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发表于 2012-2-23 21:46:56 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

先说一下楼主自己的情况……去年10.23跪了，151+161（我了个去……）+3.5，然后报了今年3.31准备二战了。上次的考试verbal出了大失误当时已经和G友们说过了，quantitive你们尽情的笑吧……可是作文是真的非常的郁闷了，因为实实在在的自我感觉很良好，考场发挥两篇的篇幅应该是I600A550，我可以保证我不是用汉语拼音写的……至于遣词造句，花钱给了langlib，排除了这个问题。可是最后看到了这个分，在查阅了相关资料，仔细思考了之后，得出了一个可怕的结论

我可能得了2+5……issue跑题…………

贴一段写作电子书上的东西：

很多考生往往对关乎自己作文命运最关键的部分却不屑一顾，结果往往“下笔数百字，离题十万里”。时间对于考生来说的的确确是个不可不考虑的重要环节，但是审题是一种好的“习惯”，是对应试者最基本素质的考验，马虎不得。后面我们会提到如何作文，就是如何“借题发挥”，如何“点到为止”，不经过这道工序，是不可能“功成身退”的。之所以如此关注强调这点，一方面是因为一旦“跑题”(主要是在ISSUE中)，将接受ETS最severe的惩罚，被叛“0”分，同时也是因为这种现象很普遍，比如下面一篇来自网上的ISSUE作文就出现了这种“症状”。
　　注：病历文章来自猴哥满分网，范文主要就所讨论之处作出示范，并非一定是什么“高分作文”，主要是silentwings的文章，所选话题均来自近半年来笔者等人在华东区考场实战真题。
　　29."Public figures such as actors, politicians, and athletes should expect people to be interested in their private lives. When they seek a public role, they should expect that they will lose at least some of their privacy."
　　(病历文)
　　Everyone has the right to keep his/her privacy, including the public figures. People have the nature to learn others' privacy, especially those of the celebrities for various reasons, such as reverance and curiousness, but it doesn't follow that they are entitled to pry others' private life, and it is really unfair to say that any public figure choose to expose his/her privacy by himself/herself as long as he/she seek a public role.
　　In the current days, it is a widely spread atmosphere that people take a strong interest in talking about the private life of celebrities, they even rival each other in the fact that who knows more about a common interested celebrity. To cater such a taste, more and more mass media try their best to collect each aspect of a public figure's private life with an interest even exceeding that of making known their work. When we read a entertainment paper or magazine, we are certain to find that most of the content are the private life of singers and stars, such as someone got a divorce with his/her ex-girlfried/ex-boyfriend and is now keeping contract with someone else, etc.
　　All that exists is not valid, we couldn't say that it is in reason to spy into others' privacy just because most people prefer to do so, and we should not just accept a unfair fact without exert any effort to change the circumstance. To put your own feet in the shoes of the public figures, do you feel comfortable to be watched everywhere you go, and find a lot of affair news about you in the media especially when most of the news are made out by the pressmen? If your answer to this question is no, you should agree that we are obliged to do something to change the current situation about the private lift of public figures. Special laws should be enacted to discipline the prying into privacy of the mass media, sound should be heared arguing again people's interest in celebrities' private life.
　　Only when the public figures are librated from the harassment of worrying about their privacy's protection, we can expect a better service from them, and in that case, more capable people will be attract to pursue a public role. Suppose that if a singer is followed everywhere he/she goes, how can he/she lead a normal life as common people, how can he/she gets a relaxation? He/she must be cautious when he/she every words, he/she can't expect a casual and relaxing atmosphere as every common people can enjoy. It is difficult for him/her to concentrate all their energy in working, as a consequence, we would lose some more brilliant performance we can expect otherwise.
　　In summary, we should call on the public to cease to spy into the celebrities' privacy and pay more attention to their public life, only in that way can the public figure enjoy their life better and can we expect a better service from them. (496 words)
　　评析：这篇文章的主要失误来自作者未能仔细审题便下笔一蹴而就，题目所讨论的对象明明是Public Figures,从头到尾讨论的主体居然成了Public，说他们如何如何关注明星隐私，说他们如何如何设身处地地为明星们着想，最后总结说是公众应还明星们于自由之躯，把一上来合理的“否定回应”抛之脑后，从而导致文章“答非所问”。考虑到文章一上来合理回应，以及不错的语言表达，仅有几处不起眼的拼写错误，应判为“2分”(有严重错误类文章)。

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然后我将之前的句式保留，推倒重新进行返璞归真的5段论重塑，可是这个时候又出现了问题……照现在的理解，写作不被判跑题的最保守方式是围绕话题的主语来成文，可是新东方提过的方法是寻找stakeholder，通过这些来构建analytical perspective，这样又变成了跑题……好吧，我想大家理解我想说什么了。

拜托，请告诉我什么是跑题吧。