[i习作temp] 【issue28】大家进度好快，时差党6.11G才写了第一篇issue，请求大家给予指点！附提纲 [复制链接]

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我6月11号在德国考GRE，一直拖着没写issue，提纲倒是写了不久，今天发现距离考试只有两周，不禁有些紧迫感，于是晚上终于逼着自己开始写issue。和大家一样，我第一篇也花了差不多一个小时，选了一个自己之前没有写过提纲的题目。写完之后还是有点点成就感的，不过觉得自己要提高的地方还是太多了，比如词汇用来用去就那几个，结尾写得干巴巴的，不知道每段论述完应该怎么小总结一下，还有就是。。。打字好慢啊(剁手！这周必须疯狂练习)

我知道写得不好，不过大家不要手下留情[鞠躬~]
题目  issue
28. The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
一个国家的伟大体现在国民的安乐上，而不是体现在统治者、艺术家或科学家的成就上。
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

作文
简单的提纲：
Position，部分肯定，但是ruler,artists和科学家的作用同样不可忽视。
1，general welfare 很重要，因为群众是nation的组成部分，国民的welfare代表了这个nation的总体强大水平。举例，唐朝。
2，但是，不能说另外三个的成就没有用处，因为：
（1）ruler,artists和科学家的成就与general welfare是相辅相成的。政治领域... 文化科学领域...
（2）ruler,artists和科学家分别构成了国家的硬实力和软实力
Conclusion.

正文：In the statement the speaker asserts that it is the general welfare of a nation's people rather than its ruler, artists, or scientists that shape a a great nation. However, as far as I am concerned, although the general welfare does play a vital part, it is not justifiable for the speaker to depreciate the role of politicians, artists, or scientists.

Admittedly, it is an idea shared by the general public that a great nation should be the one that ensures the welfare of its own people simply because a nation is the union its people and thus has responsibilities for its people. A nation is not a symbol (e.g. the national flag), a political term appearing in text books, nor can it be represented by a small cluster of people who may be puissant, genius or intelligent.  Instead, what really composes a nation is its ordinary people, who, although may seem not to contribute so much to the society as artists or scientists,  form the solid foundation for the nation and continuously make a contribution in their everyday life. Considering the importance of people, it is reasonable to say that the general welfare of the people reflects, to a large extent, the general performance of the nation. To put it another way, we could say A is a great nation if country A could provide adequate resources and proper condition so that everyone in the society can lead a prosperous life and realize his or her own value. For instance, in Tang Dynasty China was praised by the whole world as the greatest country on this planet.  Although prudent rulers, plenty of artists and scientists all contributed to its prosperity, what really made China in Tang Dynasty an attractive dreamland was the openness of society which allowed and encouraged everyone to make a fortune and pursue a better life.

However, it would be too rash to conclude that rulers, artists and scientists  don't do much to contribute to the greatness of a nation. As a matter of fact, rather than mutually exclusive,  political, cultural and scientific achievements and the general welfare are interdependent. In democratical politics, rulers are elected by the public and thus can only be successful when they appeal to the public and make policies that benefit the general welfare. On the other hand, the welfare of the people also ensured and secured by preeminent rulers, without whom the people may be endangered. This allies also to artists and scientists.  In the example of Tang Dynasty China, splendid literature and musical achievements and numerous scientific inventions appeared because the material life was guaranteed and people could devote themselves to the spiritual world; meanwhile, people enjoyed the fruits of art and science. But for the art pieces and scientific invention, life for the people in Tang Dynasty would not have been so colorful and convenient.

Apart from the general welfare, rulers, artists and scientists are all significant for the greatness of a nation because they are hard power and soft power for a country. Firstly, a great nation must be politically strong enough to protect its people and enjoy a prestige on the world stage. This could not be achieved by ordinary people and  must rely on the rulers. Secondly, the greatness of a nation also manifests itself in arts and science because art and science represent intellectual performance of a nation and a culturally and scientifically strong country can influence other nations.

In conclusion, just as persons are required by the contemporary era be all-round, a great nation should be “all-round” as well. Thus, it is not fair to attribute the greatness of a nation solely to the general welfare, because all of the four factors are interdependent and indispensable.
(623字,好像确实写长了，囧)
谢谢大家，现在时间晚了得睡觉，明天抽空我也看看其他同学的作文，先鞠躬了，大家作文都加油！