That's a sample of a Canadian/North American personal statement. It's
completely different from your friend's!I am sure both of
you will notice that the approach the essay takes and the points that
are discussed are different from your friend's statement.
what is a good ps?
Clearly, you are trying to persuade professors that you are a good
candidate and developing the whole idea in a logical method. I think maybe
the problem of PS of Chinese students is that the author seems to show off
that he is a good candidate. Obviously, that's not the effect he want.
you should emphasize your senior level classes and important research project
s.
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