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发表于 2007-7-14 12:38:34 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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Well, the lecture is mainly discussing the tourism in present and past, which is similar in several aspects with that in the reading passage. And the lecture also makes some complements to what is described in the reading materials.

Firstly, the lecture tells that ancient people traveled for conquering while modern people travel for adventure, this point is similar to what told in the reading passage. The author of the passage said that early people traveld for resourses such as food and good to sustain themselves, and he also said later people take trip for culture and scientific purposes. Seconly, both the passage and the lecture mention “Ernest Hemingway” and the “big game” to prove that some people take journey for adventure.

Moreover, the ethnic tourism and environment tourism which mentioned in the lecture are also more or less similar to the contents in reading passage. According to the lecture, the ethnic tourism means touring long distance to visit a certain local custom, social culture such as dancing, ceremonies and so forth, while the goal of environment tourism is to abserve and learn nature source such as wild life in Afica. Coincidently, in the reading passage, the author gives us the example of Europe’s wealthy calsses’ “grand tour” and Charles Darwin’s studies, which seem to correspond to the ethic tourism and enviornment tourism respectively.

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When you choose a career, what factor is the most important, money or your personal satisfaction?
Well, I would prefer to choose a career by my personal satisfaction. For in my opinion, only when one satisfied with his job could he stay that position long and make good achivement. In the other hand, if my job coud give me nothing but money, I won’t do any thing right while lacking rest and entertainment. Money is not everything, people wouldn’t be very happy until they can do what they really want to, until they have their own career.

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发表于 2007-7-15 14:45:43 |只看该作者

修改森林的第六次作业

综合写作
Well, the lecture is mainly discussing the tourism in present and past, which is similar in several aspects with that in the reading passage. And the lecture also makes some complements to what is described in the reading materials. 开头明确！complements一下就点出了2者的关系。

Firstly, the lecture tells that ancient people traveled for conquering while modern people travel for adventure, this point is similar to what told in the reading passage. The author of the passage said that early people traveld for resourses such as food and good to sustain themselves, and he（the author） also said later people take trip for culture and scientific purposes. Seconly, both the passage and the lecture mention “Ernest Hemingway” and the “big game” to prove that some people take journey for adventure.

Moreover, the ethnic tourism and environment tourism which mentioned in the lecture are also more or less similar to the contents in reading passage. According to the lecture, the ethnic tourism means touring long distance to visit a certain local custom, social culture such as dancing, ceremonies and so forth, while the goal of environment tourism is to abserve and learn nature source such as wild life in Afica. Coincidently, in the reading passage, the author gives us the example of Europe’s wealthy calsses’ “grand tour” and Charles Darwin’s studies, which seem to correspond to the ethic tourism and enviornment tourism respectively.

在你写作的文章中找到的都是两者的相似点，不过似乎二者之间是有不同的。可以考虑把它们也罗列出来。
综合写作确实挺难改的，大家写作的角度完全不一样，不能说谁对谁错。所以抱着认真负责的态度，哈哈！我决定了，建议你去delta的P600比对一下。
PS：单词拼写的问题没有修改。自行处理，印象深刻。

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When you choose a career, what factor is the most important, money or your personal satisfaction?
Well, I would prefer to choose a career by my personal satisfaction. For in my opinion（好像没有这种说法，估计是你口语化带出来的，直接就in my opinion）, only when one satisfied with his job could he (不知道以前有没有人和你提到过he or she的问题，尽量少用。既然问when you，那么就都用I来回答不也挺好的吗。)stay that position long and make good achivement. In the other hand, if my job coud give me nothing but money, I won’t do any thing right while lacking rest and entertainment（没太看明白）. Money is not everything, people wouldn’t be very happy until they can do what they really want to, until they have their own career.

第二点的意思还是挺好的，就是那个句子我没太明白意思。

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