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As a high education becomes a more accessible commodity, students will be able to choose between these two different forms of instruction. The one is broading knowledge of many academic subjects , the other is specializing on one specific subject. However, Some people believe that it is better to master many subjects. As far as I concerned, It is benefit for students to focus on their interests and the subjects relevant to them.
First of all, it is hard for students to learn many academic subjects well. Most students who complete a degree at a university which require them to take classes in many different subjects. In order to get degree, students always too tired to know all the subjects deeply. In normally , they get the basic idea of subjects, even a few knowledge about it. when students pass the exam , they will forget a great part of contents.
Furthermore, some classes are unnecessary to students. such as students majoring in physics and chemistry would feel boring in a course on politics or western literature. They consider it a waste of their time and energy. So, this might have a negative effect on their educational progress in general.
At last, students who specialize on a subject will have a great advantage over students who don’t when it comes to finding a job in their specific field of study. Because companies wil be most interested in job applicants who have superior knowledge and can make the greatest contributions.

good good study, day day up.

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发表于 2009-9-27 17:32:05 |只看该作者

As a high education becomes a more accessible commodity, students will be able to choose between these two different forms of instruction. The one(这里不需要定冠词) is broading knowledge of many academic subjects , the other is specializing on one specific subject. However, Some people believe that it is better to master many subjects. As far as I concerned（as far as I'm concerned）, It is benefit（应该是beneficial） for students to focus on their interests and the subjects relevant to them.

First of all, it is hard for students to learn many academic subjects well. Most students who complete a degree at a university which require them to take classes in many different subjects（缺谓语）. In order to get degree, students always (缺谓语)too tired to know all the subjects deeply. In normally , they get the basic idea of subjects, even a few knowledge about it. when students pass the exam , they will forget a great part of contents.

Furthermore, some classes are unnecessary to students. such as students majoring in physics and chemistry would feel boring in a course on politics or western literature. They consider it a waste of their time and energy. So, this might have a negative effect on their educational progress in general.6 v' Q' r9 `7 w! g

At last, students who specialize on a subject will have a great advantage over students who don’t when it comes to finding a job in their specific field of study. Because companies wil be most interested in job applicants who have superior knowledge and can make the greatest contributions.8 k% A+ F# @: M" l

文章似乎太短了，可以加一点例子补充一下
语法错误比较多，注意点就可以避免啦！加油！

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发表于 2009-9-28 16:30:14 |只看该作者

As a high education becomes a more accessible commodity, students will be able to choose between these（these无指代） two different forms of instruction. The one is broading knowledge of many academic subjects , the other is specializing on one specific subject. However（转折没有意义）, Some people believe that it is better to master many subjects. As far as I concerned, It is benefit for students to focus on their interests and the subjects relevant to them.

First of all, it is hard for students to learn many academic subjects well. Most students who complete a degree at a university which require them to take classes in many different subjects. In order to get degree, students always too tired（缺谓语） to know all the subjects deeply. In normally , they get the basic idea of subjects, even a few knowledge about it. when students pass the exam , they will forget a great part of contents.

Furthermore, some classes are unnecessary to students. such as students majoring in physics and chemistry would feel boring in a course on politics or western literature. They consider it a waste of their time and energy. So, this might have a negative effect on their educational progress in general.

At last, students who specialize on a subject will have a great advantage over students who don’t when it comes to finding a job in their specific field of study. Because companies wil be most interested in job applicants who have superior knowledge and can make the greatest contributions.

前两个理由比较不具有说服力，再展开点。文章组织的有点乱，多练练就好了。

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