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发表于 2010-8-14 17:24:58 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children' s life

Making a perfect and right option plays a crucial role in one's life. And parents that own more experience should aid to make decisions and determine the future for children. I, however, hold a completely various viewpoint that children should be cultivated to make their own options. For them, they possess personal right to pursue their interests adn life,although the life is full of chanllenge and diversity. Morever, childern are required to be develop independent skills.

It is each child that have his/her interests. In one's life, of course, allowed to follow their own direction to pursue their interests, a child will be extremely happy. For instance, about the selection what subject to learn in college, parents maybe choose the hot field in society, considering the employment. However, children, of course, desire to study subjects they enjoy. I believe parents should allow their children to pursue their dream to learn their loved subjects. Because even though the popular subject is in important position in look for a job, children are not able to be their best at the subjects they do not like. Then it will bring adverse effect on achievement of children in the university. While permitted to learn the subject they take pleasure in , the children study better and achieve an excellent employment. Therefore, parents should not determine their children 's future .

In addition, children should chanllenge themselves in the life. Every knows that he/she easily get access to success if someone experienced helps. But each vital decision will be provided help from parents adn the future will be determined by them, children become depent on parents. No matter the work or the other options , Parents can not always make choices on everything. In fact, They can teach children the ablity to make a right decision from pemitting children make choices on important issues. Thus, children should be allowed to make their own choices.

Even though children can obtain benefits from the decision made by parents, but i believe they get more benefits if they learn the ability how to make a right choices. Consequently, parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determin their future for them.

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发表于 2010-8-15 14:07:08 |只看该作者

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Making a perfect and right option plays a crucial role in one's life. And (删了)Parents that (who)own more experience should aid to make decisions and determine the future for children. I, however, hold a completely various viewpoints that children should be cultivated to make their own options. For them, they possess personal rights to pursue their interests adn life（and lives）,although the life is full of chanllenge and diversity. Morever, childern are required to be（删了） develop independent skills.7 d' ~4 q2 N; N0 i9 s: S
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（既然后文有连接词了我觉得这里最好也加个）It is each child that has his/her interests. In one's life, of course, allowed to follow their （his） own direction to pursue their（his ）interests，a child will be extremely happy（把这句话插入前面去变成状从会不会更好，放allowed前）。 For instance, （When talking）about the selection what （of which） subject to learn in college（如果不是从句这句话的主语呢）, parents maybe choose the hot field in society, considering the employment. However, children, of course, desire to study subjects they enjoy. I believe parents should allow their children to pursue their dreams and to learn their loved（loving但是我觉得这里用这个不好） subjects. Because（删了） Even though the popular subject is in important position in looking for a job, children are not able to be their best at the subjects they do not like. Then it will bring adverse effect on achievement of children in the university. While permitted to learn the subjects they take pleasure in , the children study better and achieve an excellent employment.（goal） Therefore, parents should not determine their children 's future .

In addition, children should chanllenge themselves in the life（lives）. Everyone knows that he/she can easily get access to success if（when receives） someone experienced helps（help）. But each vital decision will be provided help（删了） from parents adnand the future will be determined by them, children become depent on parents（这句话怎么会有两个谓语）. No matter the work or the other options , Parents can not always make choices on everything. In fact, They can teach children the ablity to make a（删） right decisions from pemitting children make choices on important issues. Thus, children should be allowed to make their own choices.

Even though children can obtain benefits from the decisions made by parents, but i believe they get more benefits if they learn the ability as how to make a right choices. Consequently, parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determin their future for them.

（1）LZ单复数要多多注意啊~
（2）第三段没有例子就显得单薄了~
（3）有的句子不是很通顺，要注意表达
（4）我们都是新同学，一起加油啊~^^~

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发表于 2010-8-17 22:29:05 |只看该作者

本帖最后由 SilviaZho 于 2010-8-17 22:30 编辑

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Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children' s life( p; n5 p m5 V4 Q! ]

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Making a perfect and right option plays a crucial role in one's life. And parents that own more experience should aid(通常指援助，如灾害援助等，用assist或help都可）to make decisions and determine the future for children. I, however, hold a completely various(different?) viewpoint that children should be cultivated to make their own options. For them, they possess personal right to pursue their interests adn life,although the life is full of chanllenge and diversity. Morever, childern are required to be(去掉） develop independent skills.

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It is each child that have（has） his/her interests. In one's life, of course, allowed to follow their own direction to pursue their interests, a child will be extremely happy. For instance, about the selection what subject to learn in college, parents maybe choose the hot field in society, considering the employment. However, children, of course, desire to study subjects they enjoy. I believe parents should allow their children to pursue their dream to learn their loved(favorite) subjects. Because even though the popular subject is in (an) important position in looking for a job, children are not able to be their best at the subjects they do not like. Then it will bring adverse effect on achievement of children in the university. While permitted to learn the subject they take pleasure in , the children study better and achieve an(去掉) excellent employment. Therefore, parents should not determine their children 's future
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In addition, children should chanllenge themselves in the life. Everyone knows that he/she easily get access to success if someone experienced helps. But if? each vital decision will be provided help from(by) parents adn the future will be determined by them, children become dependent on parents. No matter the work or the other options , Parents can not always make choices on everything. In fact, They can teach(cultivate) children the ablity to make a right decision from pemitting children make choices on important issues. Thus, children should be allowed to make their own choices. ! i2 n0 `, t$ }# [9 t+ `$ Q
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Even though children can obtain benefits from the decision made by parents, but i believe they get more benefits if they learn the ability (of) how to make a right choices. Consequently, parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determin their future for them.
论述得都很不错，细节上最好能再注意点:)

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发表于 2010-8-20 18:13:35 |只看该作者

水平有限，见谅，

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