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发表于 2010-3-18 16:10:33 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

3 18 TPO3
第一次写，手忙脚乱的，听力听完了，写的时候感觉都忘了，哎，，，，

The lecture is mainly discussing that the portrait is indeed painted by Rembrandt, which contradicts what the reading passage states that it is not Rembrandt's painting.

First of all, the speaker holds the view that the color of the fur is added over the top of the portrait by others to increase the value and make it like the former portrait, challenging what the reading passage talks about.
Second, the speaker believes that the origin portrait is with light color and it can reflect the white color in the face. This point also disagrees with the point that the dark color would absorb light which is stated in the reading passage.

Finally, the speaker suggests that the origin portrait is really from a single wood and later , to make it more grand and valuable, several pieces of wood glued together, which were from the same tree. So this totally disagrees with the reading passage.

To sum up, the contents of the reading passage are totally jeopardized by the speaker and the lecture completely refutes the reading passage.

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发表于 2010-3-18 16:20:08 |只看该作者

在放上一篇满分作文。共大家多对比吧，看着人家的作文，我眼泪刷刷的啊，汗~
TPO-3 integrated writing sample answer （满分范文）

The lecture revises the idea presented in the text, that Rembrandt was not the artist who painted the famous painting "Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet”.

The inconsistency between the white cap, which identifies the woman as a servant, and the expensive fur collar she wears dissolves as the Professor explains that the fur collar was apparently painted over the original painting to increase its worth by displaying an aristocratic woman.

In addition, the assumption that light and shadow in the painting do not fit together is refuted by the fact that in the original painting, the woman wears a light cloth that illuminated her face. Thus the presentation of light and shadow was indeed very realistic and accurate, as it is characteristic of Rembrandt’s paintings.

Finally, the mystery of the panel consisting of patches glued together is also solved in the lecture. Actually, the wood panel was later enlarged to make it more grand and valuable, but the original painting was painted on a single panel, as Rembrandt would have done it. Furthermore, the wood is of the same tree used in other Rembrandt paintings, like the "Self-Portrait with a Hat”.

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板凳

发表于 2010-3-18 17:01:27 |只看该作者

你怎么练综合？我想跟进~

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发表于 2010-3-18 17:20:01 |只看该作者

3# annke

美利坚小组啊，https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1023010-1-1.html9 g( C& N* D! y:)

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发表于 2010-3-21 00:13:36 |只看该作者

The lecture is mainly discussing that the portrait is indeed painted by Rembrandt, which contradicts what the reading passage states that it is not Rembrandt's painting开头很好很点题也简洁，不过多少有点模板痕迹

First of all, the speaker holds the view that喜欢 the color of the fur is added over the top of the portrait by others to increase the value and make it like the former portrait, challenging what the reading passage talks about.

Second, the speaker believes that the origin portrait is with light color and it can reflect the white color in the face. This point also disagrees with the point that the dark color would absorb light which is stated in the reading passage
好简洁啊虽然听力的主要点都说了，这样不合适。怎样也要提到些阅读的内容，2者结合着说。而且你的字数明显不够

Finally, the speaker suggests that the origin portrait is really-->definitely from a single wood and later , to make it more grand and valuable, several pieces of wood glued together, which were from the same tree. So this totally disagrees with the reading passage
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To sum up, the contents of the reading passage are totally jeopardized by the speaker and the lecture completely refutes the reading passage. 词汇句子结构都很好的没什么毛病，就是字数少了而且复述的都是听力的内容，阅读的也要写。改晚了不好意思，我的也才交:L

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发表于 2010-3-21 14:28:52 |只看该作者

TOP4 综合写作！！
The lecture is mainly discussing that the considerate evidence stated in the reading pasage cannot prove dinosaurs are endothems.

First of all, the speaker holds the view that the place which dinosaur fossils are discovered is warmer than before and dinosaurs can migarate from the colder place to the warmer ones.While, the reading passage argus that only endothem animals can be active in the cold places.So the lecture totally disagrees with what the reading passage states.

Second, the speaker believes that the reason why dinosaurs have legs under their body is that it can support more weight and help them grow into a larger size which is an advantage for dinosaurs.On the contrary, the reading passage states that it is efficient for dinosaurs if their legs are undernesth the body.So this also refutes what the speaker says about the position of their legs.

Finally, the speaker suggests that grow rings indicates when the dinosaurs will grow rapidly and when they have a slow growth or stop growing,and the haversian canals in bone cannot be a indicator that dinosaurs are endothems,contradicting what the reading passage states that the aversian canals can prove dinosaurs are endothems.

To sum up, the contents of the reading passage are completely jeopardized by the speaker and the lecture entirely disagrees with the reading passage.

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发表于 2010-3-23 13:14:15 |只看该作者

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发表于 2010-3-23 16:30:25 |只看该作者

TPO8 综合写作

The lecture is mainly discussing that the memoir is pretty accurate and it totally disagrees with the reading passage.

First of all, the speaker holds the view that Chevalier did spend money in gambling, but he would sell first to get money. While the reading passage states that he borrowed a large sun of money from a Swiss merchant.

Second, the reading passage suggests that Chevalier could not remember exact phases from extended conversations held many years ago. On the contrary, the speaker believes that Chevalier wrote what he remembered each night and some one can confirm that he has kept notes for many years and he has ever consulted to journalists about the conversations. So this completely refutes the reading passage.

Finally, the reading passage states that Chevalier’s jailers were bribed to free him because Chevalier had a lot of political well-connected friends in Venice. However, the speaker argues that other people from that prison should have more powerful friends than Chevalier but none of them have been offered a bribe. The speaker also says that the ceiling has been repaired after Chevalier escaped and if he was offered a bribe, why would the ceiling be repaired?

To sum up, the contents of the reading passage are entirely jeopardized by the speaker and what the lecture talks about totally differs from the reading passage.

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发表于 2010-3-23 18:01:32 |只看该作者

3 23 TPO5 综合写作~~
The lecture is mainly discussing that the Chaco structures are not for the purpose as what the reading passage states.

First of all, the reading passage says that Chaco structures were purely residential and each housed hundreds of people. However, the speaker holds the view that if they were for the residential purpose, there would be many fire places which are used for cooking. On the contrary, there were few fire places and it seems about only 10 fire places. So the speaker totally disagrees with the reading passage.

Second, the reading passage believes that the Chaco structures were used to store food supplies, and one of the main crops of the Chaco people was grain maize. In contrast, the speaker suggests that there are not any maize or maize containers in the houses. So the speaker completely refutes what the reading passage states.

Finally, the reading passage argues that Chaco structures were used as ceremonial centers. While, the speaker thinks that there are some other materials such as building materials like stones and sands, which suggests that it should not be expected for ceremonial purpose. So the lecture challenges what the reading passage conveys.

To sum up, the contents of the reading passage are completely jeopardized by the speaker and what the lecture believes entirely disagrees with the reading passage.

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