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发表于 2012-4-30 00:53:28 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
第一篇,求狂拍!!!在寄托上看了一些前人写的东西,也加了一些自己的东西。写好了打上去都用了超过半个小时,哭啊,,, 求狂拍!谢谢
题目:Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses out side the student's field of study.
As is described in the issue, the author think universities should require every student to take courses that are out the student's own field. In my opinion of view, I am inclined to support the idea. My point of view can be substantiated by the following discussions.
To begin with, requiring students to take courses out of their own field can meet the objective of education. The real objective of education to cultivate students into integrated talents which can not only contribute knowledge to the development of society, but also have a comprehensive concept and understanding about the world. To take a variety of courses can obviously help students to grow in many aspects, so that they can become integrated talents.
In addition, since various disciplines are related, the study of courses out of students' own field can benefit that of their own major. For instance, philosophy is the foundation of every subject. Whatever your major is , you can benefit from learning it. Mathematics is a useful tool for us in solving problems. If your major is economics, you will find that knowledge of mathematics can help you a lot in your research. In the same way, students with a mastery of different disciplines have a great advantage in competing with those who have only a limited scope.
What's more, the study of courses out of students own major can enhance the quality of students. The knowledge students get from the courses can broaden the vision and provide an acute insight. In a so competitive society students with transdisciplinary knowledge are sure to surpass others in communication skills, organizational capacitycapability and collaboration capability. For example, in the negotiation with the employers, students with transdisciplinary knowledge, such as psychology and philology, can better express their ideas and realize the interests maximum.  
To sum up, from the analysis above ,it is appropriate for universities to require students to take a variety of courses out side the student's own major.
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题目:Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses out side the student's field of study.典型的话题文论。这类题目相对还是比较好写的,而且不易出现固定倾向性思维。
As is described in the issue, the author think universities should require every student to take courses that are out the student's own field.【开端虽然没有什么错误,但也没有什么新意。话题类文论这样写挺伤的其实,相对比较稳妥的开头要么用疑问句如“whether”引导的选择类疑问,或者Some people,while the other引导的discusion。】 In my opinion【point】 of view, I am inclined【I tend to support that(支持)universities do should encourage their students...(反对)it is no need for u students to learn more which is helpless to their field of study.】 to support the idea. My point of view can be substantiated by the following discussions.【这句话可有可无,最好不要写,没有任何意义。】

To begin with, requiring students to take courses out of their own field can meet the objective of education. The real objective of education to cultivate students into integrated talents which can not only contribute knowledge to the development of society, but also have a comprehensive concept and understanding about the world.【谈教育的目的其实有些太大了。而且你没有进行任何论证。你只说综合学习是迎合了教育的目的的,教育的真正目的是让学生blablabla....你却没说为什么,如何做。你没说为什么能够理解社会,建设社会。如何能使我们信服你的言论?其次,由于你的立足点太宽泛,你还需要论述为什么单学一门学科无法达到教育的最终目的。凭什么说只专一门就无法做到理解社会,建设社会了?】 To take a variety of courses can obviously help students to grow in many aspects, so that they can become integrated talents.

In addition, since various disciplines are related, the study of courses out of students' own field can benefit that of their own major. For instance, philosophy is the foundation of every subject.【同样的问题,你的立足点太高了,但是你的支架非常薄弱。】 Whatever your major is , you can benefit from learning it. Mathematics is a useful tool for us in solving problems. If your major is economics, you will find that knowledge of mathematics can help you a lot in your research.【这样的例子说了等于没说。非常含糊。】 In the same way, students with a mastery of different disciplines have a great advantage in competing with those who have only a limited scope.

What's more, the study of courses out of students own major can enhance the quality of students. The knowledge students get from the courses can broaden the vision and provide an acute insight. In a so competitive society students with transdisciplinary knowledge are sure to surpass others in communication skills, organizational capacitycapability and collaboration capability. For example, in the negotiation with the employers, students with transdisciplinary knowledge, such as psychology and philology, can better express their ideas and realize the interests maximum.  【这段内容和body第一段重复。】

To sum up, from the analysis above ,it is appropriate for universities to require students to take a variety of courses out side the student's own major.
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发表于 2012-5-2 00:31:26 |只看该作者
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首先感谢大神赐教,我第一篇,确实不太会写。
按照你的批改,是不是我把body的第一和第三段合起来比较好,然后TS是提高学生的综合素质?
还有,为什么我感觉我写的时候没有东西可写呢,请问issue要想得个差不多的分数,大概要写多少字啊??

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首先是你的着眼点的问题。你还在天朝的作文思维之中,什么都往大了写。这在AW中是很致命的,你根本时间或者是相关专业知识去完成这样一种上升到意识层面上的论述。所以,尝试着从一点上去进行突破。AW并不会去评判你的对与错,或者是价值观的正或反,只看你写的够不够有逻辑性,有道理,这就足够了。

比较普遍采用的写法都是中立观点,就事论事。两段,一段什么样的专业是需要去接触其他学科的,另一段,什么样的专业不需要去接触其他的学科。第三段,学校是否有必要去强迫学生学习?

没有东西可写,是因为在潜意识里我们觉得我们的理论是理所当然的,可以说是常识。比如一门学科对另一门学科的借鉴作用,在平时的中文写作中,就这么一句话就好了,从来没去深究过为什么,久而久之就成了所谓的常识。但在issue里,你需要去论证这点。但平时我们从来没有去训练过自己这方面。

issue保险的字数在500以上,不是太失水准的话,能有个3
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楼主我借鉴你的思路写了一篇同题目的,有时间交流感想哦
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