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69.Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development

Should government place great restrictions on scientific research and development? In my view, government should add little restrictions on pure scientific research in theories, focus on some implementations’ research of some projection, which might bring out moral and ethical problems and constrain some implementations of technology that would lead to the danger to the stability of society.

First in the place, government should not interfere the freedom of pure theories studying. Pure-theory researches provide the basis knowledge and theories for other implementation researches, which require freedom environment for scientists to study every potential valuable thing that might be no effective at once. For example, the relativity theory is the important principle for atomic field. It has shown no power and force for society in any field until the bombast of the atomic bomb. And the implementation of X-ray effect has suffered a long silent road before it first used in medical field. The emergence of these theories mainly depended on the freedom environment for them to dedicate the lives in the interesting and goals. Under little interference, scientists could look for the goals with their specific senses. And, the interesting on some things enables more creative thinking for the goals.

If the government required the pure-science conform the requirement of governments’ demanding, these grant innovation pure-theory can hardly emerge with the talent work of scientists. For example, in 1920s, the Soviet Union compelled the goal to the researches on pure sciences for its politic purposes. As a result, the whole science area stopped developing owing to the limitation in research area. In this example, the head leaded by the politics and scientists cannot do the things that they think necessary for the research, which lead to the no validated data come out. Further more, the hard orders from the government disturb the normal orders of the research. In short, governments’ demanding and hardly interference would destroy the balance of the bases of the whole science and, in advance, damage the whole science field.

Secondly, government should focus and discuss on some researches that might bring moral and ethical problems. Such as cloning, aborting, and euthanasia fetch many problems out the technologies it selves. Most scientists would only focus on the understanding and solving the technologies or theories problems, rather than the society impacting. The results of the implementation are not clear. Some businessmen would take the using only for short time benefits, which might hurt the human being society in future. And, people have little power and knowledge understand for understanding the problems. So, it require government evaluate the positive and negative effects and decide whether to continue or not to research in that arena for apply the demanding of people.

Finally, government should limit the researches on the projects that obviously hamper the stability on society. For example, the researches on chemical weapon, nuclear weapon, and so forth. The results from the researches only lead to the violence and war in great harm to society and human being. If the technology mastered by the terrorists, the whole nations would be under the umbrella of the dead threat. The more the technology study, the more threat the human being face. The cold War is still in our memories. The days during that time, every people worried that someday people would walk to the end for some nibble mistaken of the leader, America or the Soviet Union. Therefore, government should take supervision and strong limitation on those distinct damaging technologies.

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To sum up, government should give the free space for pure science on the reseraches that have no harm to society only to direct implementation technologies, focus on some concrete researches that might cause ethical or moral problems, and constrate those technologies that obviously bring out disastry to human society.

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呜呜~~我不得不看了
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发表于 2004-4-10 14:35:09 |只看该作者

Should government place great restrictions on scientific research and development? In my view, government should add little restrictions on pure scientific research in theories, (and)focus on(不好,用focus那意思就是重视了,前面的研究就应当不重视?) some implementations’ research of some projection, which might bring out moral and ethical problems and constrain some implementations of technology [U]that would lead to the danger to the stability of society. [/U] (指代的是什么?有歧义) 开头回应的不错,但是定语从句慎用

First in the place(这是什么表达?), government should not interfere the freedom of pure theories studying. Pure-theory researches provide the basis(basic) knowledge and theories for other implementation(则么老是这个词执行? 不通啊) researches, which require freedom(free) environment for scientists to study every potential valuable thing that might be no(not) effective at once. For example, the relativity theory is the important principle for atomic field. It has shown no power and force for society in any field until the bombast of the atomic bomb. And the implementation of X-ray effect has suffered a long silent road before it first used in medical field. The emergence of these theories mainly depended on the freedom environment for them to dedicate the lives in the interesting and goals. Under little interference(有这种搭配吗), scientists could look for the goals with their specific senses. And, the interesting(?) on some things enables more creative thinking for the goals. 质疑一下,纯理论的科学研究不会导致问题吗?和一般的你说的 implementations’ research 有什么区别呢

If the government required the pure-science conform the requirement of governments’ demanding, these grant innovation(innovative) pure-theory can hardly emerge with(with用的不对) the talent work of scientists. For example, in 1920s, the Soviet Union compelled the goal to the researches on pure sciences for its politic purposes. As a result, the whole science area stopped developing owing to the limitation in research area. In this example, the head leaded by the politics and scientists cannot do the things that they think necessary for the research, which lead to the no validated data come out. Further more, the hard orders from the government disturb the normal orders of the research. In short, governments’ demanding and hardly interference would destroy the balance of the bases of the whole science and, in advance, damage the whole science field. (这一段从反面论证,其实完全可以归到上面一个段落里面)

Secondly, government should focus and discuss on(用control比较好) some researches that might bring moral and ethical problems. Such as cloning, aborting(abortion), and euthanasia fetch many problems out the technologies it selves. Most scientists would only focus on the understanding and solving the technologies or theories problems, rather than the [U]society impacting[/U](social impacts) . The results of the implementation are not clear. Some businessmen would take the using only for short time benefits, which might hurt the human being society in future. And, people have little power and knowledge understand for understanding the problems. So, it require government evaluate the positive and negative effects and decide whether to continue or not to research in that arena for apply the demanding of people.

Finally, government should limit the researches on the projects that obviously hamper the stability on society. For example, the researches on chemical weapon, nuclear weapon, and so forth. The results from the researches only lead to the violence and war in great harm to society and human being. If the technology mastered by the terrorists, the whole nations would be under the umbrella of the dead threat. The more the technology study, the more threat the human being face. The cold War is still in our memories. The days during that time, every people worried that someday people would walk to the end for some nibble mistaken of the leader, America or the Soviet Union. Therefore, government should take supervision and strong limitation on those distinct damaging technologies.

结构有点怪,怎么结尾段写成这样呢?

个人的看法是,对科学是否应当有限制不在于它的研究类型,而在于它的影响和目的之类的.所以一开始的分类有问题.
如果要balance 的话,是不是可以这样:
1 政府应当给予科学研究足够的空间和支持
2 但是毫无节制会引发一系列的问题
3 全面综合的考虑,适当的限制会引导科学更加良好的发展,服务于人类.

语言上你的形容词和名词老混用,而且很多词语不准确.
继续努力,我光挑毛病了.
btw:你那样的标题,就没有更多的人给你该文张拉~~

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发表于 2004-4-10 15:04:49 |只看该作者

结构上没写结尾段，也许我在考试的时候也不准备写了。觉得还是写body比较重要。

用词不准确的问题是一直存在的，我也不准备改变了。呵呵。是不是很不上进的。

关于第3段是否应该属于第2段的问题。我本来就是对一个分论点的讨论。但是，是从两个方面进行所以分两段。所以用firstly, secondly, and finally来表示整个文章的层次。

关于标题。我上gter的时候，看见你在，才把前些天的文章贴上来。本来就是想让你看一下啊。不写，当然你不容易看的。既然我是发贴子，而不是悄悄话，当然也是欢迎大家都来看，都来批。呵呵。

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发表于 2004-4-10 15:23:49 |只看该作者

Should government place great restrictions on scientific research and development? In my view, government should add little restrictions on pure scientific research in theories, (and)focus on(不好,用focus那意思就是重视了,前面的研究就应当不重视?) 【我的意思是把注意力放到一些应用项目上来，注意好像是focus on?/concentrate on；and 倒是漏加了】some implementations’ research of some projection,【自己现在才发现，应该是projects，呵呵】 which might bring out moral and ethical problems and constrain some implementations of technology that would lead to the danger to the stability of society. (指代的是什么?有歧义) 开头回应的不错,但是定语从句慎用【为什么定语从句要慎用】

First in the place(这是什么表达?), government should not interfere the freedom of pure theories studying. Pure-theory researches provide the basis(basic) knowledge and theories for other implementation(则么老是这个词执行? 不通啊)【implementation是应用的意思，我在专业词汇里经常用。对××的应用，跟application差不多】 researches, which require freedom(free) environment for scientists to study every potential valuable thing that might be no(not) effective at once. For example, the relativity theory is the important principle for atomic field. It has shown no power and force for society in any field until the bombast of the atomic bomb. And the implementation of X-ray effect has suffered a long silent road before it first used in medical field. The emergence of these theories mainly depended on the freedom environment for them to dedicate the lives in the interesting and goals. Under little interference(有这种搭配吗)【自己翻的，呵呵】, scientists could look for the goals with their specific senses. And, the interesting(?) on some things enables more creative thinking for the goals. 质疑一下,纯理论的科学研究不会导致问题吗?和一般的你说的 implementations’ research 有什么区别呢【纯理论在纸上，如果不实现，是不会有危害的，比如E=mc2，谁都知道，但是如果不作应用研究，是不会造出原子弹，或者核燃料，cloning理论如果不作应用，也不会有道德问题。永远上纸上的理论，pure science。包括纯物理，纯数学等等，是些指导性学科，in my view, have no direct value except for directing the concrete disciplines】

If the government required the pure-science conform the requirement of governments’ demanding, these grant innovation(innovative) pure-theory can hardly emerge with(with用的不对)【？？】 the talent work of scientists. For example, in 1920s, the Soviet Union compelled the goal to the researches on pure sciences for its politic purposes. As a result, the whole science area stopped developing owing to the limitation in research area. In this example, the head leaded by the politics and scientists cannot do the things that they think necessary for the research, which lead to the no validated data come out. Further more, the hard orders from the government disturb the normal orders of the research. In short, governments’ demanding and hardly interference would destroy the balance of the bases of the whole science and, in advance, damage the whole science field. (这一段从反面论证,其实完全可以归到上面一个段落里面)【正因为，正反，俺就把它分开了，呵呵，可以吗？】

Secondly, government should focus and discuss on(用control比较好) some researches that might bring moral and ethical problems. Such as cloning, aborting(abortion), and euthanasia fetch many problems out the technologies it selves. Most scientists would only focus on the understanding and solving the technologies or theories problems, rather than the society impacting(social impacts)【impact 有动词意思，不是说尽量用动词分词吗？比如clone有时候用cloning】 . The results of the implementation are not clear. Some businessmen would take the using only for short time benefits, which might hurt the human being society in future. And, people have little power and knowledge understand for understanding the problems. So, it require government evaluate the positive and negative effects and decide whether to continue or not to research in that arena for apply the demanding of people.

Finally, government should limit the researches on the projects that obviously hamper the stability on society. For example, the researches on chemical weapon, nuclear weapon, and so forth. The results from the researches only lead to the violence and war in great harm to society and human being. If the technology mastered by the terrorists, the whole nations would be under the umbrella of the dead threat. The more the technology study, the more threat the human being face. The cold War is still in our memories. The days during that time, every people worried that someday people would walk to the end for some nibble mistaken of the leader, America or the Soviet Union. Therefore, government should take supervision and strong limitation on those distinct damaging technologies.

谢谢，不知道我的论证是否有力，麻烦九月MM再给给个comment

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发表于 2004-4-10 18:46:09 |只看该作者

结构上一定要完整, 要写结尾段!!!

在文中要体现一个control的意思我是这么想的

纯理论在纸上，如果不实现，是不会有危害的，比如E=mc2，谁都知道，但是如果不作应用研究，是不会造出原子弹，或者核燃料，cloning理论如果不作应用，也不会有道德问题。永远上纸上的理论，pure science。包括纯物理，纯数学等等，是些指导性学科，in my view, have no direct value except for directing the concrete disciplines】

对啊你就要解释啊 ets就是像我这么笨的!!
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发表于 2004-4-11 09:38:45 |只看该作者

我可不敢说谁笨的，呵呵。看来需要加个结尾段了。
To sum up, government should give the free space for pure science on the reseraches that have no harm to society only to direct implementation technologies, focus on some concrete researches that might cause ethical or moral problems, and constrate those technologies that obviously bring out disastry to human society.

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