[i习作temp] issue 147 传统和现代 既然没有同主题了 高频题大家一起写吧～～ [复制链接]

最初由 sblbasler 发布
[B]147"Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."

The intrinsic nature of human有点唐突，可能是由于前面的铺垫不够吧，看看下面吧 determines a modernization without tradition is impossible. Since traditional value,为什么加逗号 concepts are influential on human, no matter whether one are conscious of its existing. With globalization, youngsters in China, Japan whichwho are relatively traditional are indulged怎么是纵容呢 into the fashion affairs不好 such as dancing n Disco through the whole night, drinking Coca-Cola instead of tea. They seem to be so reluctant to dress themselves in tradition. But in fact, after satisfying their curiosities, the deeply rooted value system will effectaffect on their behaviors. They will be boring of the superficial imitation of western modernization and return back from Discos, some of them even feel regret of throwing their own traditional life style during that period.这是你在说不是事实在说话，没有根据呀，你要用人们的共识作为论据才有说服力 It is tradition that can not be abandon by human-beings.为什么 Modern life styles, matters物质？？ and objects物体？？ without traditional effects is just surface and will not last long.又是为什么，难道仅仅因为年轻人自己觉得They will be boring of the superficial imitation of western modernization and return back from Discos, some of them even feel regret of throwing their own traditional life style during that period么
你在这一段就犯了我那篇所说的错误了，就是说你不是在证明，而是在强奸（虽然这个词有点不恰当，我用这个词没有别的意思，只是想说你是在强迫他人认同你的观点）别人的思想。你的例子首先就不是很有说服力，而你例子后面的“论证”完全是一种陈述，根本没说为什么，如果照你这样说我是不是可以说没了传统世界会灭亡呢

以下省略...... [/B]