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redhobor斑竹啊，我知道你是牛人，帮帮忙吧。。。。看在我曾经发表了2篇精华贴的份上。。。。
原计划是1小时写完的，但是用了2小时，哭死了。。。。郁闷。。。。。

issue 110  历史学家是否是storytellers.

History seems to have masked as many mysterious as possible, and such is so convincing that historians interpret the past through careful exploring and precise logical reasoning. Like most things, there is far more to it than meets the eye. Historians, when they begin to explore past, cannot go behind his particular thoughts and ideas.

First and foremost, there is no denying that the study of history is not a purely objective process. No man ever looks at the history with pristine eyes. He sees it edited by a definite set of his insights into the world and ways of thinking. Even in the history exploring, he cannot go behind these stereotypes; his very concepts of history will still have reference to his traditional customs. Although we have some cultural relics and historical books, historians, to study history without objective pursuit, are to some extent, inaccurate. These relics, historical books, and some evidence are justly immortal, yet do they convey the meaning that the historians can study them without any subjectivity? Absolutely not. Since they never see the past with their own eyes, it is inevitable that they bring into history their personal view, or even prejudice, which is impartial to the study of history.

Furthermore, another should be added that historians sometimes distort the facts when there is no sufficient compelling evidence. Robert Conquest has said in all seriousness that the historian, registering the facts beyond doubt, and in their context, cannot but also judge. For instance, Paul Revere's famous horseback ride to the Massachusetts countryside in one version, he single headily alerted the people that the British were colony. We have this image of us solitary rider galloping along of the dark from one farm house to another, and of course the romantic version of the story is not what actually happened that night. Paul Rever was the only one of the many riders helping deliver messages that night. In this sense, we may say historians become storytellers when they lack the facts though there still exists some difference between the storytellers and historians.

So much is certain: that the storytellers create story in the light of their imagination while the historians research the history based on some data, or, logical reasoning. Historians try to study history objectively, if they ever had done, they cannot think outside the particular patterns that their brains are conditioned to. Having said this, however, since the history is awfully complex and complicated and, as the speaker mentioned, never can we go back, hence what the historians do is necessary and understandable.

Taking into account all these aspects, the exploring of history is not as accurate as some people think, although it trying to be, as much as possible. Until we are objective enough as to the ample facts, the main history of human life must remain unintelligible. It is necessary first for historians to arrive at that degree of sophistication where they no longer conditioned to their own brains.

南京新东方的AW 笔记  主讲：李鼎。牛人啊！
一、Sentence variety
1. 开头
Strongly admitted that
相邻两句话不要用同样的开头
2. 不同的句式结构
P173-S3
Today’s education place more emphasis on students desires than their needs.

Accordingly, students are …..way, and educators are willingly conspiring with

them. As oppose to this trend, I would argue that ….rather than ….. Not only

should educators…..

每写好一句：check；改句子（开头及句式）
GRE作文中绝对不能出现 I think, I believe, 应该使用 I would / could / may / might
3. 使用信号词(逻辑关系词)--- 给人看，体现逻辑关系，记住ETS是reader
l 结论信号词
In sum, to conclude, in conclusion
l 表肯定
--非常肯定：certainly, clearly, obviously, plainly, apparently, surely, undoubting, absolutely, totally, exactly, naturally, for sure, for certain
--有保留的肯定：possibly, perhaps, likely, probably, potentially, presumably.
  In some sense, in a sense, in large sense
--引出新观点: last but not least , in addition , additionally, furthermore, moreover
l 表类比 likewise, similarly
l 表假设，推测：suppose, given, imagine, given
l 引出详细解释particularly, in this/that case, specially
l 反对，表达其他观点
所有表示转折的词：nevertheless, while, whereas, on the contrary, by contrast, in spite of, rather than, apart from(除…以外) ,
On one hand, on the other hand / one thing, another thing
l 表推理: accordingly, consequently, as a result, hence, thus, thereby, therefore, ultimately
l 反复说明( 不推荐) : in other words , briefly
4. 使用对称排比结构
Despite all the evidence, experts continue to debate whether global warming exists, the extent of the global problem, what the likely effects will be and whether any remedy is possible.
红字部分修改: 1. how extensive the problem is
         2. to debate exist of the global warming it’s likely effects.
Eg: I can, I saw, I conquer
仿照上句: I can , I took , I succeed
5. 避免不完整的句子
6. 避免分词短语作状语的错误(主语一致!!)
Holding her in his harm, the moon had behind the cloud (F)
Correct : As soon as the moon had…. , he held her in his arm
7. 修饰词位置错误
Romeo received words that Juliet was dead from another messenger (F)
Romeo received words from another messenger that Juliet was dead.
8. 运用修辞 (比喻:明喻、暗喻)
Man was wretched from nature, the power to make the world a desert or to make desert bloom. There is no devil in the  万能词  only in man’s soul. ( 用于科技类最好)
万能词：Atom(经典！)，education, system, technology
What beneath the life is evil。

I am easily conscious that my friendship with….was like owning a dog that bites (亲切的斗争关系)
Peens and beans/ Tom and Jerry/

America has given its colored people a bad check, a check that has come back marked "insufficient funds."
仿句：The boss/ government always provided civil labor/ urban labor a bad check, which has come back marked with “insufficient funds”

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发表于 2006-7-21 11:27:54 |只看该作者

History seems to have masked as many [这个MANY不用了吧]  mysterious as possible, and such is so convincing that historians interpret the past through careful exploring and precise logical reasoning. Like most things, there is far more to it than meets the eye. [SORRY，这句没有读懂] Historians, when they begin to explore past, cannot go behind his particular thoughts and ideas.

First and foremost, there is no denying that the study of history is not a purely objective process. No man ever looks at the history with pristine eyes. He sees it edited by a definite set of his insights into the world and ways of thinking. Even in the history exploring, he cannot go behind [beyond]  these stereotypes; his very concepts of history will still have reference to his traditional customs. Although we have some cultural relics and historical books, historians, to study history without objective pursuit, are to some extent, inaccurate. These relics, historical books, and some evidence are justly immortal, yet do they convey the meaning [convey用的好] that the historians can study them without any subjectivity? Absolutely not. Since they never see the past with their own eyes, it is inevitable that they bring into history their personal view, or even prejudice, which is impartial to the study of history. [其实即使是亲眼所见，也未必能避免主观性]

Furthermore, another should be added that historians sometimes distort the facts when there is no sufficient compelling evidence. Robert Conquest has said in all seriousness that the historian, registering the facts beyond doubt, and in their context, cannot but also judge. For instance, Paul Revere's famous horseback ride to the Massachusetts countryside in one version, he single headily alerted the people that the British were colony. We have this image of us solitary rider galloping along of the dark from one farm house to another, and of course the romantic version of the story is not what actually happened that night. Paul Rever was the only one of the many riders helping deliver messages that night. [Paul Rever的例子叙述的不是很清楚] In this sense, we may say historians become storytellers when they lack the facts though there still exists some difference between the storytellers and historians. [关于STORYTELLERS和HISTORIANS之间的差异在此段中并没有提到。放在这儿段末不是非常合适吧]

So much is certain: that the storytellers create story in the light of their imagination while the historians research the history based on some data, or, logical reasoning. Historians try to study history objectively, if they ever had done, they cannot think outside the particular patterns that their brains are conditioned to. Having said this, however, since the history is awfully complex and complicated and, as the speaker mentioned, never can we go back, hence what the historians do is necessary and understandable.

Taking into account all these aspects, the exploring of history is not as accurate as some people think, although it trying to be [这句是什么？] , as much as possible. Until we are objective enough as to the ample facts, the main history of human life must remain unintelligible. It is necessary first for historians to arrive at that degree of sophistication where they [(are)]  no longer conditioned to their own brains.

1. 作者词汇量较大，用了不少的好词。但是某些句子偏长，读起来并不很地道。
2. 在解读论题方面，作者侧重讲了FACTS不足带来的影响。而对于其他方面如
史学家的生活背景，受教育程度，个人经历和当时所处的国家和社会状况并
没有太多的分析。
that's all.

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