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发表于 2007-2-24 10:57:14 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ISSUE147 - "Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them."
WORDS: 346 TIME: 0:41:05 DATE: 2007-2-24

1 科学方面有冲突
2 社会本质方面，人性方面没冲突
3 艺术，文化领域没冲突

I do not agree on this statement that one must choose one, tradition or modernization. Nowadays, I concede that there are so many conflicts between tradition and modernization; however, in the base of the society, the tradition and modernization are not incompatible.

For the fast developing of technology, the world change quickly. Therefore, some tradition things cannot incompatible with these technology, and we have to choose one of them. For example, in the realm of science, modern science always attacks tradition culture such as religion. Therefore, one has to do a choice between the science and tradition religion. And even the tradition science defeated by the modern science; also, there usually have two ways to study, a tradition and a modernization. In this field, we should choose one of the tradition and modernization.

However, in the level of base of the society, tradition can be compatible with the modernization. Because, in a long time, what it is modernization today, would be a tradition in future. And also, human nature is changed very slowly, even how it in the past is as same in the modern; hence, in this level, tradition is same as modernization. For example, whatever time people live in, one always thinks about one's own profit first; therefore, whatever the law in the modern or in the past, it is always preserves one's own profit. Although these two laws have many different, in the base of them, they are similar.

Furthermore, in the realm of art, the tradition and modernization also can be compatible. One likes the tradition picture, maybe others like modern art. Both of them can live friendly together. Also, in the realm of culture, in China, we are still happy in Chinese New year; and in this Chinese spring festival, modern business, modern technology and modern art are all come into this tradition culture without any conflict.

To sum up, I concede that there are some conflict between traditions and modernization which we must choose one of them. But in the base of the society, or mostly realm, the tradition and modernization are compatible

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发表于 2007-2-24 15:28:06 |只看该作者

I do not agree on agree with this statement that one must choose oneof them, tradition or modernization. Nowadays, I concede that there are so many conflicts between tradition and modernization; however, in the base of the society, the tradition and modernization are not incompatible.

For the fast developing With the fantastic developmentof technology, the world change quickly. Therefore, some traditiontraditional things cannot incompatible with these technology, and we have to choose one of them. For example, in the realm of science, modern science always attacks tradition traditional culture such as religion. Therefore, one has to do a choice between the science and tradition traditional religion. And even the tradition science defeated by the modern science; also, there usually have two ways to study, a traditiontraditional one and a modernization one. In this field, we should choose one of the tradition and modernization.

However, in the level of base of the societyas the foudation of a society to be concerned, tradition can be compatible with the modernization. Because, in a long timein the long run, what it is modernization today, what is today served as modernaization would be gradually become a traditional one . And alsofurther more, human nature is changed very slowly, that is,how it was in the past is the same in modern; hence, in this level, tradition is the same as modernization. For example, whatever time people live in, one always thinks about one's own profit first; therefore, whatever the law in the modern or in the past, it is always preserves one's own profit. Although these two laws have many differentdefferencein the base of them, they are similar.这一段的例子举的不是很好,跟主题句不符,更多在将现在的和过去的没有变化,而不是论证他们的兼容

Furthermore, in the realm of art, the tradition and modernization also can be compatible. One likes the tradition picture, maybe others like modern art. Both of them can live friendly together. Also, in the realm of culture, in China, we are still happy in Chinese New year; and in this Chinese spring festival, modern business, modern technology and modern art are all come into this tradition culture without any conflict. 缺少主题句

To sum up, I concede that there are some conflictconflicts between traditions and modernization which we must choose one of them. But in the base of the society, or mostly realm, the tradition and modernization are compatible

文章表达的不是很清楚,意思重复的比较多.
有些东西不好改, 请自己再斟酌以一下.
特别是结尾,可以再变换下句型,扩充点字数.
说的不对的地方请见谅.

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