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发表于 2007-8-6 12:05:30 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

写了好久。。。45分钟只憋出来200多字。。。写完发现好像有点跑题了。。。多多指教吧！

TOPIC: ISSUE4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."

提纲：
strongly agree with the speaker's assertion

1.各个学科是相互关联的，没有任何一个学科是独立存在的。
例子：化学和生物，经济学涉及社会学，心理学，数学，建筑学和力学，物理和考古

2.一些学科的重大发展归因于其他学科的发展
例子：iatrology医学的发展，计算机，物理，化学和生物

3.philosophy 哲学的发展为人类研究自然科学发展的导向基础

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As the speaker asserts, no field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study. I strongly argee with the speaker, for that in the realm of knowledge which human has reached, interaction exerts in various fields of science, and development of one field is often resulted from knowledge of other fields.

One the first hand, no area of intellectual creates and operates in a vacuum, that is, sciences in various fields are ineluctable and external related . Concerning chemistry and biology, which can not extremely separate them from each other, because that much of biologic phenomenon are based on chemical reaction which is one of the objects studied in chemistry; economics, which refers to sociology, psychology, mathematics, and so forth, is a complex domain of humanities and natural science; when it comes to architectonics, mechanics can not be forgotten, which is the physical foundation of architecture; and then, at first glance, it seems that physics has nothing to do with archaeology, while radioactivity is used to date techniques, which contributes much to affirm age of ancient objects. From the examples elaborated above, we can see that no field of science, either humanity or physical science, is solitary among the wide ocean of knowledge or progress by itself.

One the second hand, scientific breakthrough in one certain area may be great contribute to development in another or several other fields. Iatrology is a typical example of this issue. We all can see the evolutionary advancement of iatrology brought by computer science which has prominently impacted nearly every other field. Nowadays, in hospital, apparatus, from record of patients' status to treat, referring to computer science can be seen everywhere. The development of physics also affect the method of cure, especially in cancer treatment which contributes to radioactivity. So does chemistry and biology which promise the ratio of cure nowadays.

At last, from ancient time to today, the advancement of philosophy, as the theoretic guidance of science, directs development of the other fields of science, which not only affects the science itself, but also deeply acts on how scientists study problems. Epistemology provides academic foundation for how to know or cognize the truth of the world and universe which contributes to advancement of nature science. Ethics instructs problems referring to the significance of life and ethical and moral practice. Aesthetics seeks for the essence of beauty and its significance, which influence the advancement of art in different times.

To sum up, no field of study can advance significantly without outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study. Any fields of science, no matter belonging to humanity or nature science, can not be divided into solitude, or studied without knowledge of other fields of science. The various realms of knowledge that we human beings have compose a integral system of episteme which stimulates the advancement of human society.

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发表于 2007-8-6 16:52:23 |只看该作者

As the speaker asserts, no field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study. I strongly agree with the speaker, for that in the realm of knowledge which human has reached, interaction exerts in various fields of science, and development of one field is often resulted from knowledge of other fields. （比较绝对的论述，似乎不太好写）

One the first hand, no area of intellectual creates and operates in a vacuum, that is, sciences in various fields are ineluctable and external related . Concerning chemistry and biology, which can not extremely separate them from each other, because that much of biologic phenomenon are based on chemical reaction which is one of the objects studied in chemistry; economics, which refers to sociology, psychology, mathematics, and so forth, is a complex domain of humanities and natural science; when it comes to architectonics, mechanics can not be forgotten, which is the physical foundation of architecture; and then, at first glance, it seems that physics has nothing to do with archaeology, while radioactivity is used to date techniques, which contributes much to affirm age of ancient objects. From the examples elaborated above, we can see that no field of science, either humanity or physical science, is solitary among the wide ocean of knowledge or progress by itself.

One the second hand, scientific breakthrough in one certain area may be great contribute to development in another or several other fields. Iatrology is a typical example of this issue. We all can see the evolutionary advancement of iatrology brought by computer science which has prominently impacted nearly every other field. Nowadays, in hospital, apparatus, from record of patients' status to treat, referring to computer science can be seen everywhere. （这句好像漏了下半截）The development of physics also affect the method of cure, especially in cancer treatment which contributes to radioactivity. So does chemistry and biology which promise the ratio of cure nowadays.（这段后面的例子不怎么好，和第一段的有些相识了）

At last, from ancient time to today, the advancement of philosophy, as the theoretic guidance of science, directs development of the other fields of science, which not only affects the science itself, but also deeply acts on how scientists study problems. Epistemology provides academic foundation for how to know or cognize the truth of the world and universe which contributes to advancement of nature science. Ethics instructs problems referring to the significance of life and ethical and moral practice. Aesthetics seeks for the essence of beauty and its significance, which influence the advancement of art in different times. （不知道跑题没有）

To sum up, no field of study can advance significantly without outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study. Any fields of science, no matter belonging to humanity or nature science, can not be divided into solitude, or studied without knowledge of other fields of science. The various realms of knowledge that we human beings have compose a integral system of episteme which stimulates the advancement of human society.

文笔很好，值得学习，大量的词都是我不会写的！

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发表于 2007-8-6 17:31:41 |只看该作者

兔兔来了

As the speaker asserts, no field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study. I strongly argee with the speaker, for that in the realms of knowledge which human has reached, interaction exertsexists in various fields of science, and development of one field is often resulted from knowledge of other fields.
One the first hand, no area of intellectual creates and operates in a vacuum…operates independently虽然暗喻很好,但总觉得这么表达怪怪的,所以保险一点, that is, sciences in various fields are ineluctable and external related . Concerning chemistry and biology, which can not extremely separate them from each other, because that多于 much of biologic phenomenon are based on chemical reaction ,which is one of the objects studied in chemistry; economics, which refers to sociology, psychology, mathematics, and so forth, is a complex domain of humanities and natural science; when it comes to architectonics, mechanics can not be forgotten, which is the physical foundation of architecture; and then, at first glance, it seems that physics has nothing to do with archaeology, while radioactivity is used to date techniques, which contributes much to affirm age of ancient objects. From the examples elaborated above, we can see that no field of science, either humanity or physical science, is solitary among the wide ocean of knowledge or progress by itself例子很多但是有些杂乱,可以试着分个类,整齐一些写出来.这段你写的好像有些不在状态,通过看你前面两篇,我感觉的你写这段水平没发挥出来哦.
One the second hand, scientific breakthrough in one certain area may be great contributecontribution to development in another or several other fields. Iatrology is a typical example of this issue. We all can see the evolutionary advancement of iatrology brought by computer science which has prominently impacted nearly every other field. Nowadays, in hospital, apparatus, from record of patients' status to treat, referring to computer science can be seen everywhere. The development of physics also affect the method of cure, especially in cancer treatment which contributes to radioactivity. So does chemistry and biology which promise the ratio of cure nowadays.这段的例子同样可以用来支持上面一段,但是若要证明这段和上面一段中心内容不一样的话我觉得应该举些更突出的例子,可以从个人成就的角度论述
At last, from ancient time to todaynowadays, the advancement of philosophy, as the theoretic guidance of science, directs development of the other fields of science, which not only affects the science itself, but also deeply acts on这个短语有些随意 how scientists study problems. Epistemology provides academic foundation for how to know or cognize the truth of the world and universe which contributes to advancement of nature science. Ethics instructs problems referring to the significance of life and ethical and moral practice. Aesthetics seeks for the essence of beauty and its significance, which influence the advancement of art in different times.
作者的关于学科的词汇不少嘛!感觉很博学哦!
To sum up, no field of study can advance significantly without outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study. Any fields of science, no matter belonging to humanity or nature science, can not be divided into solitude, or studied without knowledge of other fields of science. The various realms of knowledge that we human beings have compose a integral system of episteme which stimulates the advancement of human society最后一句如果能断一下会更精彩..
我觉得这篇文章最值得学习之处是大量的例证,很有说服力.而且值得欣赏的是作者每篇文章的提纲写的都很明朗,对照文章看起来很舒服~
但是不足之处是文章有些许杂乱
建议:既然例子这么多,而且都是描述领域,作者可以围绕论点展开各个领域的论述,一段一个或者一段相关的两个,由最基础的哲学道德领域->数学->其他科学->当今学科等等的…
嘿嘿!一点拙见!加油!

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发表于 2007-8-6 23:40:22 |只看该作者

原帖由 abc021900 于 2007-8-6 16:52 发表

谢谢abc021900和兔兔～
第三段的例子的确有点重复了，可能这两个方面本身就是相互包涵的吧～
还是按兔兔的说的按学科来写感觉比较有条理，从最基础的哲学到数学，最后说下computer，估计就差不多了
abc说的完全赞成挺不好写挺对的～我是想不到反对的方面了TOT。。。
再次感谢～我会好好改的～
ps那些学科的单词都是错了一大堆然后金山词霸里查的＝＝

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