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Who is the creator of the human history? We are not discussing a religious topic. There are many viewpoints according to different philosophies. A widely held opinion about this topic is that it is some individuals who create the history and lead us through the dark frog around we human beings. To the opposite,from some others` perspective,the history is undoubtedly created by the ordinary people instead of the so-called heroes or some significant individuals of the history. Indeed,we cannot deny the role of both the crucial individuals and the ordinary people---the conclusion must be based on a case-by-case analysis.



Leader plays such an essential role in the historic event that there is no denying their vital influence. Look back at the establishment of the United States of America,what would happen without the leadership of Washington? I am not sure whether there would be the USA,however I am sure about one thing---it would take a longer period of time and harder struggle for the American people to receive the independence for the Great Britain. That is why we call Washington the father of the USA. Take Mahatma Gandhi,the leader of the India non-violence campaign as another example. At Gandhi`s century,it was such an tough struggle for the Indian people the get the freedom from their Britain ruler that thousands of Indian volunteers died for the dream of freedom. Nonetheless,it is Gandhi who eventually found a method for the people to achieve the goal. Thus,individuals is very important to our history.



Nonetheless, individuals cannot write the history just based on his own strength. There is no one in the history who ever changed the trend of the history merely by his single power. The most magic power lies in the ordinary people. It is the people who support the struggle of the individual leaders or heroes and record the history. Can you imagine MR.Washington fighting the Britain army all by himself? Of course a leader need the people the advocate his leadership. Let us look back at Mahatma Gandhi. his success lies not only in the wisdom of his own but also in the people who believe in him. Thus,on other factors than the people can help the heroes write the history.



Finally,from my perspective viewpoint,a complete conclusion must be based on a case-by-case analysis. There are so many different situations that we cannot justifiably assert that it is the individual or the people who created the history thus should be remembered. Even though there too individuals that make huge contributions to our society and world,we should not forget the ordinary people. Just as i talked above different situation need different analysis.



In sum,both the individuals or heroes and the ordinary people should be remembered by us. However,if we want to seek for a more significant role of them,we need to analyse the certain situations. Besides,even though some individuals are really such important to our history,cannot we forget those who ever tried so hard to make the world better.

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第一次限时,都写慌了 用Word一搜拼写错误一箩筐
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Who is the creator of the human history? We are not discussing a religious topic. There are many viewpoints according to different philosophies. A widely held opinion about this topic is that it is some individuals who create the history and lead us through the dark frog around we human beings(知道你想要表达上什么,但是好像这样说不太好). To the opposite, from some others` perspectives, the history is undoubtedly created by the ordinary people instead of the so-called heroes or some significant individuals of the history. Indeed, we cannot deny the role of both the crucial individuals and the ordinary people---the conclusion must be based on a case-by-case analysis(这个不错,学习之~).


Leader plays such an essential role in the historic event that there is no denying their vital influence(语法上有问题,我记得应该是there is no denying that…). Looking back at the establishment of the United States of America ,what would happen without the leadership of Washington? I am not sure whether there would be the USA, however I am sure about one thing---it would take a longer period of time and harder struggle for the American people to receive the independence(receive independence?好像没听说过有这样的搭配,gain会更好一些) for the Great Britain(可以不要了). That is why we call Washington the father of the USA. Take Mahatma Gandhi,the leader of the India non-violence campaign as another example, At Gandhi`s century ,it was such an(a) tough struggle(前面已经用过了,换一个最好) for the Indian people the(to) get the(去掉) freedom from their Britain ruler that thousands of Indian volunteers died(用从句表达) for the process of chasing dream of freedom. Nonetheless, it is(was) Gandhi who eventually found a method for the people to achieve the goal. Thus, individuals is(are) very important to our history.

Nonetheless, individuals cannot write the history just based on his own strength. There is no one in the history who ever changed the trend of the history merely by his single power. The most magic power lies in the ordinary people. It is the people who support the struggle of the individual leaders or heroes and record the history. Can you imagine MR.Washington fighting with the Britain(British) army all by himself? Of course a leader need the people the advocate his leadership. Let us look back at Mahatma Gandhi. his success lies not only in the wisdom of his own but also in the people who believe in him. Thus,on other factors than the people can help the heroes write the history.


Finally, from my perspective viewpoint(两个词只需要一个), a complete conclusion must be based on a case-by-case analysis(这句话不错,但是最好不要出现两遍). There are so many different situations that we cannot justifiably assert that(justify the assertion which) it is the individual or the people who created the history thus should be remembered. Even though there too individuals that make huge contributions to our society and world(没看懂),we should not forget the ordinary people. Just as I talked above different situations need different analysis.


In sum, both the individuals or heroes and the ordinary people should be remembered by us(可以去掉). However,if we want to seek for a more significant role of them,we need to analyze the certain situations. Besides, even though some individuals are really such important to our history, cannot we forget those who ever tried so hard to make the world better.(是在反问么?)
逻辑还是比较清楚的,就是语言相对弱一些, 多用同义词替换,同样的话最好不要说两遍,我看下来这个是最主要的,能力不足,多指教哈~~

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