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发表于 2008-2-1 20:47:30 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

I insofar cannot agree with the issue that the only effective way of education is when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each other. Since, it is in some aspects that negative effects are prompted by this measure. Thus, some other should not be neglected, such as basic knowledge and even genius.

Firstly, instead of just educating in ways specifically designed to meet individual needs and interests, we should try more, which is established according to the situation that varied from the exact environment and comprehensive. In those regions where the education is highly developed, this can well meet each person's request on education. However, at the same time, more educational resources are needed. Especially in the developing country, such as China, which still faces with severe pressures from large population, this kind of education method would doubtlessly be difficult for coming into use, let alone the effectiveness of it. Besides, as learning to work together is one of the most important purposes, this education method can devote little to the comprehension of cooperation. For the exact need and interest differ from each other, then less opportunities of communication and cooperation in process of studying will be provided. On the other side, with the high development of science and technology, cooperation is in an even more significant position. As a whole, without considering those details, such education form mentioned in the issue seems a bit negative in some extent.

Even in the society where education through ways specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests is effective in some scopes, however, it should not be the only measure. Fundamental course, quality education as well, should be treated equally at least, if not more concentrated on. Some basic knowledge also plays an important role in education, though it might seem to be boring that no one have any interests in it. Then, such subject has to be on the basis of compulsory education, which is actually not specially designed, some elementary subject for example. What is more, as the under graduating students usually do not comprehend themselves, misconception of themselves might happen to do harm to their growth----they may be competent on one field even without knowing themselves. At this time, teaching in accordance of their aptitude is of great importance. Besides what is mentioned above, many other components of education will be effective as well, rather than the only one specially designed.

Simply put, educating merely with specially designed measure presents mass negative effects, its advantage should not be ignored. Genius is such a kind of wealth. As is known to all, Mozart is born to music, Gauss is innate in Math, and Kimi Raikkonen----the new-born champion in F1----is commonly accepted as a talent on driving. Some person do have one scope that he or she seems accomplished in since a baby, then, special design according to their individual needs and interests is required.

As a conclusion, I cannot agree with the issue that education is truly effective only when specially designed for the individual needs and interests to some extent, unless for those who are super outstanding at a certain field. And common and compulsory education cannot be easily substituted.

提纲：
1、教育形式，是否effective应该根据实际环境所变，还应该全面,而不应仅仅依靠specially designed
2、基础学科，素质综合教育同样对effective有很大的影响
3、但是，在一些条件下，specially designed也有很大的作用

好久没有写作文了，完全没有感觉~~~
尤其是语言方面，感觉很贫乏
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发表于 2008-2-3 20:38:58 |只看该作者

I insofar [这个词常见和as连在一起用，我还不太清楚用在这里是否合适，不知道有没有出处？] cannot agree with the issue that the only effective way of education is when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each other[each other是彼此，互相的意思。我觉得应该将other改成student]. [第一句的主语和表语不太相符，感觉应该说the only effective way of education is to design it to meet ... 或者就像题目那样说也可以不过也有可能有这种说法的，待商榷~~~]Since, it is in some aspects that negative effects are prompted by this measure.[我想这里没有必要用强调句强调状语，去掉it is...that...，直接说就可以了。另外，这句和上一句可以合并为一句：I insofar cannot agree with ... , since negative effects are ... in some aspects.] Thus, some other should not be neglected, such as basic knowledge and even genius.

Firstly, instead of just educating in ways specifically designed to meet individual needs and interests, we should try more, which is established according to the situation that varied from[改成with. 一般说vary from A to B. vary from A指得是偏离A] the[去掉the也许更好] exact environment and comprehensive. In those regions where the education is highly developed, this[这里的this指代什么？] can well meet each person's request on education. However, at the same time, more educational resources are needed. Especially in the developing country [countries], such as China, which still faces with[去掉with] severe pressures[pressure不可数] from large population, this kind of education method would doubtlessly be difficult for coming into use, let alone the effectiveness of it. Besides, as learning to work together is one of the most important purposes, this education method can devote little to the comprehension of cooperation. For the exact need and interest differ from each other, then less opportunities of communication and cooperation in process of studying will be provided. On the other side[后面是从反方面来论述的吗？], with the high development of science and technology, cooperation is in an even more significant position. As a whole, without considering those details, such education form mentioned in the issue seems a bit negative in some extent[改成to some extent].

Even in the society where education through ways specially designed to meet the individual needs and interests is effective in some scopes, however, it should not be the only measure. Fundamental course, quality education as well, should be treated equally at least, if not more concentrated on. Some basic knowledge also plays an important role in education, though it might seem to be [加上so]boring that no one have any interests in it. Then, such subject has to be on the basis of compulsory education, which is actually not specially designed, some elementary subject for example. What is more, as the under graduating students [改成undergraduate]usually do not comprehend themselves, misconception of themselves might happen to do harm to their growth----they may be competent on one field even without knowing themselves. At this time, teaching in accordance of their aptitude is of great importance. Besides [Beside] what is mentioned above, many other components of education will be effective as well, rather than the only one specially designed.

Simply put, educating merely with specially designed measure presents mass negative effects, its advantage should not be ignored. Genius is such a kind of wealth. As is known to all, Mozart is born to music, Gauss is innate in Math, and Kimi Raikkonen----the new-born champion in F1----is commonly accepted as a talent on driving. Some person [people] do have one scope that he or she seems accomplished in since a baby, then, special design according to their individual needs and interests is required.

As a conclusion, I cannot agree with the issue that education is truly effective only when specially designed for the individual needs and interests to some extent, unless for those who are super outstanding at a certain field. And common and compulsory education cannot be easily substituted.

感觉语言上有待改进，可能是因为第一次写吧，以后要多注意：首先要做到表述清楚自己的意思，不要刻意写长句难句和使用自己不熟悉的词。语言是检测逻辑能力的一个载体，文章逻辑严谨，结构清晰才是更重要的。为了使用复杂的句子结构而影响了意思的表达是得不偿失的~~~

文章的结构和内容还没有仔细分析，等我明天仔细看一下再补上哈~~~

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