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发表于 2009-4-25 19:02:11 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something that may destroy the friendship. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Everyone has run into a situation that one has predicted the mistake his friend would make. And now here comes the serious problem: should he say or do anything even would terminate their friendship to prevent his friend from doing wrong, or not? After considering all the factors in this contradiction, I think keeping friendship is more important.

To begin with, the words people say or do risking their friendship may not be accepted by their friends sincerely. Sometimes people are over-confident about what they are doing and mistakenly think everything is under their control. Under such circumstances, they cannot tolerate any persuading word for their unpredictable bad consequences. Only when the mistakes they make punch them in the face can they realize what they are wrong for. Therefore, risking friendship to convince a friend will not do any good, especially when those words may annoy the friend. Take my best friend for instance. I saw his girlfriend dating another man once on the street. However, I could not tell him directly because he trusted his girlfriend so much that he would not believe in the truth. So I just informed him about this indirectly in case he broke off with me. He found the truth eventually and ended their relation.

In addition, it is only with the friendship can one help his or her friend. Keeping friend form making mistakes in ways risking friendship is not wise a solution for the reason that friendship is far more important than the consequence of one mistake. Without friendship, people cannot help a friend as a friend, thus the friend may make more mistakes with more serious consequences. As in the example above, if I said something which he thought humiliating and broke off with me, I could not help him any more. As a result, to help a friend, preserve friendship first.

Letting a friend make one mistake is not horrible, what’s horrible is that one cannot stop him or her making more. So if one really wants to help a friend, it is better to keep the friendship and be patient to the friend rather than doing unreasonable things.

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发表于 2009-4-26 20:50:59 |只看该作者

本帖最后由网兜妮妮于 2009-4-26 21:33 编辑

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Everyone has run into a situation that one has predicted the mistake （这里加个before 吧）his friend would make.And now here comes the serious problem: should he say or do anything even would terminate their friendship to prevent his friend from doing wrong, or not? After considering all the factors in this contradiction, I think keeping friendship is more important.

To begin with, the words people say or do risking their friendship may not be accepted by their friends sincerely. Sometimes people are over-confident about what they are doing and mistakenly think（ing） everything is under their control. Under such circumstances, they cannot tolerate any persuading words for their unpredictable bad consequences. Only when the mistakes they make punch them in the face can they realize what they are wrong for（这个for应该可以去掉吧）. Therefore, risking friendship to convince a friend will not do any good, especially when those words may annoy the friend. Take my best friend for instance. I saw his girlfriend dating another man once on the street（street?cafe吧）. However, I could not tell him directly because he trusted his girlfriend so much that he would not believe in the truth. （这里应该加一句，如果我这样做的话，我们的friendship也end了，因为他会认为我在背后讲他女友的坏话）So I just informed him about this indirectly in case he broke off with me. He found the truth eventually and ended their relation.

In addition, it is only with（keep) the friendship can（could) one help his or her friend. Keeping friend form making mistakes in ways risking friendship(这里我咋没懂？） is not wise a solution for the reason that friendship is far more important than the consequence of one mistake. Without friendship, people cannot help a friend as a friend, thus the friend may make more mistakes with more serious consequences（这句的推理不太对，不能令人信服）. As in the example above, if I said something which he thought humiliating and broke off with me, I could not help him any more. As a result, to help a friend, preserve（the） friendship first.

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Letting a friend make one mistake is not horrible, what’s horrible is that one cannot stop him or her making more.（忽然有个小灵感，这里可以写成if we say to let a friend making a mistake is terrible, one can not stop his/her friends making more mistakes is horrible)So if one really wants to help a friend, it is better to keep the friendship and be patient to the friend rather than doing unreasonable things.

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板凳

发表于 2009-4-27 10:01:57 |只看该作者

楼主我的语法很差，所以不能给你看语法上错误了实在很抱歉。在内容上，我感觉有点欠缺说服力，应该多注意例子的运用，观点应该鲜明，提出后能够展开论述然后用例子论证。你的第一段应该首先亮出你的观点同意哪方。第二段你的朋友好像没犯错误吧，犯错的是他女朋友这好像跟题目不相关。怎么感觉你写的好像是说朋友是重要的，跟犯错没什么关系呢？

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