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发表于 2009-5-20 22:54:37 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is not a surprise that one who faces the pressure of study or work wants to find a way to reduce their stress. Some people relax by spending time alone while others may do this with their friends. If I run into a situation like this, I’d rather go through the hard time together with my friends.

To begin with, it is friends who can share the pressure with us. It is said that when sadness shared by two, each suffers only half of the sadness. And the same is to pressure. When one suffers from the stress from work, he/she needs to find a way to express what is buried inside. Therefore speaking it out to a friend is the best way to give out the accumulated stress. Also, a friend may say something to comfort him/her and thus makes him/her smooth. I had a friend during my college period who always got me to speak his heart out once he had trouble. After the graduation he told me that it was I who always brought him out of the stress of college and thanked me a lot.

In addition, besides sharing pressure, a friend can also bring happiness which overcomes the stress. It is said that if one shares the happiness with another, the happiness doubles. So when one is depressed, a friend of his/hers can use happiness to take place of his/her stress which occupies him/her. Take me myself for instance. Once I got a low grade on my math test and suddenly my best friend came to invite me to his party. We all enjoyed ourselves that night and nobody cared about the low grade any more.

Friend is the one who relieves your pain, and the one who increases your happiness. According to what I have discussed above, friend can not only help reduce one’s stress but can also make one happier. As a result, being with friends is the best way to relax and escape from stress.

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发表于 2009-5-21 20:03:55 |只看该作者

It is not a surprise that one who faces the pressure of study or work wants to find a way to reduce their stress. Some people relax by spending time alone while others may do this with their friends. If I run into a situation like this, I’d rather go through the hard time together with my friends.

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To begin with, it is friends who can share the pressure with us. It is said that when sadness shared by two, each suffers only half of the sadness（这里用it好一点吧，不然重复了）. And the same is to pressure（请教，“...同理”，就是这样的句型吗？就像这里，“压力也是如此”，可以这样用吗？）. When one suffers from the stress from work, he/she needs to find a way to express what is buried inside. Therefore speaking it out to a friend is the best way to give out the accumulated stress. Also, a friend may say something to comfort him/her and thus makes him/her smooth. I had a friend during my college period who always got me to speak his heart out once he had trouble. After the graduation he told me that it was I who always brought him out of the stress of college and thanked me a lot.（觉得这段应该再对一点细节）

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In addition, besides sharing pressure, a friend can also bring happiness which overcomes the stress（啊？这句没看懂，这个which...?). It is said that if one shares the happiness with another, the happiness doubles. So when one is depressed, a friend of his/hers can use happiness to take place of his/her stress which occupies him/her. (哦，看到这里明白了，不过觉得你首句的表述晒是有点问题）Take me myself for instance. Once I got a low grade on my math test and suddenly（用在这里怪怪的，应该用“正巧”之类的词） my best friend came to invite me to his party. We all enjoyed ourselves that night and nobody cared about the low grade any more.

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Friend is the one who relieves your pain, and the one who increases your happiness. According to what I have discussed above, friend can not only help reduce one’s stress but can also make one happier. As a result, being with friends is the best way to relax and escape from stress.

建议lz还是注意一下例子的展开和细节的补充，这样觉得更有说服力。
还有逻辑连接词lz也要多积累一点啊~~

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