[a习作temp] 第一次作业argument 238 [try best] 第二小组 by wangyao735 [复制链接]

This argument recommends that Mira Vista (Mv) College must offer more courses in business and computer technology and should hire additional job counselors to help their graduates to find employment, To support its conclusion the argument points out that Green Mountain (GM) College which has more business course and more job counselors, 90% of their graduates had job offers. But that only 70% of MV College who reported that thee planned to seek employment had jobs within three month after graduation and only half of these graduates were employed in their major fields of study. This argument is unconvincing for several reasons, as discussed below.

First, all the conclusions depend on the assumption that MV College has a same situation as GM College. But we do not have any evidence to proof it. Common sense tell us there are several differences between two college like University as a comprehensive level of education, teachers. and the basic quality of students, the number of students. As well as such difference as employment of students direction.
Without these evidence, the conclusion that the business and job counselors will help the graduates of MV College is unwarranted. Perhaps it just suit to GM College, the MV College offer it without thinking would lead to contrary side.

Second, the argument try to convince us rely on assumption that GM' comparatively strong job-placement record due the fact that it afford more business course and job counselors than MV College. But this need not be the case. Perhaps students in the GM College are more excellent and they can easy be employ the high job counseling and the quality of instruction.

Without rule out any other reasons for the difference between the job-placement rates. The argue fails to convince us that the more business course and job counselors will contribute to the strong job-placement record.

The statistical evidence, on which the argument rely is too vague to be information. The survey dose not include all the graduates in MV College. We need to ask what about the students who did not informed the placement office. Perhaps all of them have found work, and if so then strong job-placement of GM College may not have existed.
Then there is no need to provide more business courses and job counselors.

In sum, the argument is unconvinced. In order to strengthen it, the speaker need to proof that the MV College and GM College are analogy. And the speaker need evidence that the difference job-placement rate between the two college are exit.