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发表于 2009-7-1 23:48:39 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

221"The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history." By zhizhelege
The study of history is
to make us understand
rationally about the event passed by.The event left in the history river can not come about again and this circumstance makes the study of history become necessary. The
study can tell us what happened in that time,why it came about and what is the effect of this event to history.
Through my explanations of the study of history ,I believe now you know I support this assertion. As we all known, history can happen for the second time. With the absence of the study of history, we can not comprehend the nature of human and we can not understand the reality with a rational history standpoint,which can confer us the ability to master the develpoment
trend of the reality. Through the study of history , we can make the conclusion that in every stage of the history ,we human use our wise and endeavor to creat new things to improve our condictions of living and make efforts to seek for freedom,formly defined as democracy. Without a study of history ,we can not tell why
America
keep the democracy as its tradition meanwhile some other country are still in the autharch. The study illuminates us about the
development trend of the society and the human beings,which drive us to make more substantial contributions to the development and eliminate the waste of resources.
Now we talk about the illusion,defined as the differerce about the reality and what we think in our mind. So without a study of history ,we can not comprehend the reasons
of the event happened in that time. Maybe
we can image a reason in our mind ,but history is history ,it had its own particular reason that we can comprehend without a study of history. With the absence of history study ,we can tell how cars come out
step by
step and we can not tell why the first and the second world war happened
go without saying we can predict weahter there will be the third world war. The study of history make us comprehened the history event with the circumstance that the history event happened in this way we can be similar with the people in that history time.
Through the discussion above, we know that the history study eliminate the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. Though the study of history has so many benefits,I take the position that the most benefit of this study is to tell people the difference between the different periods and break down the illusion exsited in people`s mind who do not take the histoury study. And then people can make a deep comprehension about the current event using a history standpoint.
All in all ,the study of history make us understood people who lived in another time and eliminate the illusion existed in people`s mind of different periods. I believe this is the history study`s most and fundermental benefit to us .

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221"The chief benefit of the study of history is to break down the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history." By zhizhelege
The study of history is to make us understand rationally about the events passed by. The events left in the history river can not(will not) come about again (why?历史上有重复发生的事件，比如金融危机，比如皇族斗争，再比如自然灾害。鄙人认为这个说的太绝对了)and this circumstance makes the study of history become necessary.（这里有点不太理解，为什么历史上的事件不会重演会使study of history necessary?本人认为正是历史上常有相似的事件发生才使得研究历史有更高的价值，因为可以指导现实生活嘛） The study can tell us what happened in(at) that time, why it came about and what is the effect of this event to history（what the effect of this event to history is）.Through my explanations of the study of history ,I believe now you know I support this assertion.(Due to my foregoing explanation, I strongly agree with the speaker’s assertion.最好把论点再重申一遍)

As we all known, history can happen for the second time（跟首段是不是有点矛盾？）. With the absence of（without） the study of history, we can not comprehend the nature of human and we can not understand the reality with a rational history standpoint, which can confer(endow) us (on) the ability to master(forecast) the development trend of the reality. Through the study of history, we can make the conclusion that in every stage of the history, we human use our wise(wisdom) and endeavor to create new things to improve our condictions of living(living conditions) and make efforts to seek for freedom, formly(formally) defined as democracy. Without a study of history, we can not tell why America keep the democracy as its tradition meanwhile(是副词不是连词，用while) some other country(countries) are still in the autharchy. The study illuminates us about the development trend of the society and the human beings, which（指代什么？定语从句最好跟在修饰词的后面） drive us to make more substantial contributions to the development and eliminate the waste of resources.（本段在讲研究历史的作用，但没有具体的例子，貌似不是很切题。）

Now we talk about the illusion, defined as the differerce(differences)(wrong feeling or judgement) about the reality and what we think in our mind. So without a study of history, we can not comprehend the reasons of the event happened in(at) that time. Maybe we can image a reason in our mind, but history is history, it had its own particular reason that we can comprehend without a study of history.(这句不是很理解)With the absence of（最好不要与上文重复）history study ,we can （not）tell how cars come out(developed) step by step and we can not tell why the first and the second world war happened go without saying we can predict(不理解)weather(whether) there will be the third world war. The study of history makes us comprehened(comprehend) the history events with(under) the circumstance that the history events happened in this way we can be similar with the people in that history time.

Through the discussion above, we know that the history study eliminate the illusion that people in one period of time are significantly different from people who lived at any other time in history. Though the study of history has so many benefits, I take the position that the most benefit of this study is to tell people the difference between(among) the different periods and break down the illusion exsited in people`s minds who do not take the histoury study(作者显然是想用who引导的定语从句修饰people,但先行词是people’s minds,因此不能这么用). And then people can make a deep comprehension about the current events using a history standpoint.

All in all ,the study of history make us understood people who lived in another (other)times and eliminate the illusion existed in people’s mind of different periods. I believe this is the history study’s most and fundermental benefit to us.
1,首先是格式问题，标点前不空格，标点后空一格。
2，全片貌似没有具体的例证，显得略有枯燥。
3，论点不是很清晰，二三段好像有点重复。
作者在理论分析上分析的比较到位，值得学习。以上纯属个人观点，仅供参考！呵呵，加油加油！

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