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发表于 2010-3-9 21:56:00 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

48. "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."

一边倒的观点……基本没有让步
1，帝王们生来有统治权，2社会运动中的领袖 3，发明家作家画家 4，研究个人更好操作

In the long history of human kind, a few famous individuals play a very important role in significant events which became the turning point of certain period of history. While some may assert that the influence of individuals is overvalued and that it is the power of those unknown groups of people that made historic changes possible, I doubt that perception. I am convinced that some few are meant to preside over history; contributions in other fields of civilization are also principally made by individuals; besides, it is more practical thus understandable for the study of history to start with individuals.

In ancient times, admittedly cruel but true, some people were born with the superiority to decide the matter of life and death of others, even the future of their nations. In old empires like China, India or middle ages Europe under the influence of the Church, where social hierarchy or caste is distinct, the ruling power certainly dominate the history. In fact, when historian analysis certain policies or social changes of a dynasty, they naturally start with the policy maker—the ruler. Sometimes the whims and goals of a king or emperor totally changed the life of his people and political pattern of the whole world. The first emperor of Qin who unified China in 221 BC., Genghis Khan who conquered nearly half Asian and Europe, Elizabeth I who gave prosperity to England, George Washington who contributed to the unification of U.S.A today... these great rulers wrote the history. Even nowadays heads of each nation is continuing to make history. The special few people hold much more political, economical and diplomatic clout than ordinary mass or group of common people, thus having a greater impact on history than any others.

Individuals without noble origins also dictate the trend of history. In social revolutions or uproars, which were often regarded as the resistance of the people, the initial effort and most significant decisions were made by few leaders who rose from mediocrity. According to the theory of Semelser, social uproars are routed in massive animosity, but this fire of rage need to be enlightened by primers, which were usually the advocate of certain individual who became leader of the event, whether he or she is meant for good or bad. For example, the world war two was initiated by Nazis and primarily its crazy leader-- Hitler. Actually, by mobilizing and motivating the mass, Hitler rose from a common soldier and changed and reformed the world using his unusual charisma and insanity. In this case, the value of individual is fully demonstrated, in an calamitous way though. Many heroes from low status have managed to change history with their exceptional qualities. They are certainly the objects of history study.

In other fields of civilization, it is also individuals who are remembered in history. Shakespeare and his plays, Edison and the light bulb, Van Gogh and his sunflowers, altogether those great masters gave vitality to their respective fields and impel the development of human history in an all round way.

From a more practical perspective, as the speaker have mentioned, many people behind a great historic event are long forgotten, their origins and experience were faded in the ashes of history, how do historians yield any productive result learning about them? Like say, how is it possible to study all the belligerents in Normandy Invasion? That will be a waste of time and energy. While analyzing individual opinion leaders can best explain the action of groups, it is recommendable in history study.

In sum, although people is the fundamental forces of social change, some individuals rule history, some lead history, some complete history, they have more decisive impact on the groups of people and the trend of history. It is those individuals that are more studying worthy.

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发表于 2010-3-10 22:41:38 |只看该作者

48. "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."

一边倒的观点……基本没有让步
1，帝王们生来有统治权，2社会运动中的领袖 3，发明家作家画家 4，研究个人更好操作

In the long history of human kind, a few famous individuals play a very important role in significant events which became the turning point of certain period of history. While some may assert that the influence of individuals is overvalued and that it is the power of those unknown groups of people that (have) made historic changes possible, I doubt that perception. I am convinced that some few are meant to preside over history; contributions in other fields of civilization are also principally made by individuals; besides, it is more practical thus (这个词用得让人很费解，应该是and吧) understandable for the study of history to start with individuals.

In ancient times, admittedly cruel but true,（这句话想追求简洁，但是让人不好懂，最好改为it is a cruel but indeed true fact that） some people were born with the superiority to decide the matter of life and death of others, even the future of their nations. In old empires like China, India or middle ages Europe under the influence of the Church, where social hierarchy or caste is distinct, the ruling power certainly dominate the history. In fact, when historian analysis certain policies or social changes of a dynasty, they naturally start with the policy maker—the ruler. Sometimes the whims and goals of a king or emperor totally changed the life of his people and political pattern of the whole world. The first emperor of Qin who unified China in 221 BC., Genghis Khan who conquered nearly half Asian and Europe, Elizabeth I who gave prosperity to England, George Washington who contributed to the unification of U.S.A today... these great rulers wrote the history. Even nowadays heads of each nation is continuing to make history. The special few people hold much more political, economical and diplomatic clout than ordinary mass or group of common people, thus having a greater impact on history than any others.(这段论证很有力，例证清晰且简洁，结尾也注意了总结升华，赞~！)

Individuals without noble origins also dictate the trend of history. In social revolutions or uproars, which were often regarded as the resistance of the people, the initial effort and most significant decisions were made by few leaders who rose from mediocrity. According to the theory of Semelser, social uproars are routed in massive animosity, but this fire of rage need to be enlightened by primers, which were usually the advocate of certain individual who became leader of the event, whether he or she is meant for good or bad. For example, the world war two was initiated by Nazis and primarily its crazy leader-- Hitler. Actually, by mobilizing and motivating the mass, Hitler rose from a common soldier and changed and reformed the world using his unusual charisma and insanity. In this case, the value of individual is fully demonstrated, in an calamitous way though. Many heroes from low status have managed to change history with their exceptional qualities. They are certainly the objects of history study.

In other fields of civilization, it is also individuals who are remembered in history. Shakespeare and his plays, Edison and the light bulb, Van Gogh and his sunflowers, altogether those great masters gave vitality to their respective fields and impel the development of human history in an all round way. （这一段我觉得和前面的有点重复，而且例证也是和前面的方法——一句话概括。建议可以取一个最有代表性的着力丰富其内容更好）

From a more practical perspective, as the speaker have mentioned, many people behind a great historic event are long forgotten, their origins and experience were faded in the ashes of history, how do historians yield any productive result learning about them? Like say, how is it possible to study all the belligerents in Normandy Invasion? That will be a waste of time and energy. While analyzing individual opinion leaders can best explain the action of groups, it is recommendable in history study.

In sum, although people is the fundamental forces of social change, some individuals rule history, some lead history, some complete history, they have more decisive impact on the groups of people and the trend of history. It is those individuals that are more studying worthy.

很抱歉，你的文章写得很好，以至于我只能轻拍了。语言非常很好，论证也很在理，就是不知道是不是限时写的。最后我想说的是，最好不好写成一边倒的，虽然北美范文中有很多这样写的，但是任何事情都是有两面的，最好是提一下反面比较保险~

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发表于 2010-3-11 21:13:42 |只看该作者

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是限时写的呀，当时比较傻，没想通G作文其实可以不用限时的，到时候抽到高频上去默就好了……我一般作文是限时写，再参照别人的文章改改，查逻辑错误，加观点

谢谢你的批改~！关于一边倒的问题我以后会注意的~只是这个topic一边倒似乎还能自圆其说，有的issue真是不写两面就没法写了……

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