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Nowadays, with a growing concern about education, there is a heated discussion on whether a serious and strict teacher is more effective than a humorous and easygoing one. Some people agree with the statement, arguing that a strict teacher has the power to regulate students. However, from my perspective, I believe（这个和from my perspective重合） that a humorous and easygoing teacher brings more efficiency on education because they are able to teach better and ignite the spark of learning in students.

First of all, a teacher who is easygoing and full of humor is more likely to give a better（better？why？用更精确的词吧，比如说attractive） lecture to the students. It is reasonable that a humorous teacher has the tendency to make use of more effective patterns, such as simile and analogy, in order to guarantee that the students grasp his or her ideas, unlike a serious and strict teacher who may only teach students according to the text book literally. What's more, with genes of humorous sense, these teachers probably are aware of when they need to attract the students' attention and how. For example, knowing when they ought to tell a joke to introduce the topic is among their abilities（这句有点中译英的感觉，可以用it is high time to ....的句型）. I still remember my chemistry teacher in high school told us a short story in life to introduce the topic in almost every class, such a story about acid rain for the carbon dioxide. After the story, we were all attracted by the lesson and had a better understand（understanding）. In sum, a humorous teacher possesses the ability to give better lectures than a serious and strict teacher.（最后一句点题感觉结构很紧密）

Furthermore, among the advantages brought by an easygoing instructor is the bridge constructed between students and teachers. It is universally acknowledged that an easygoing and humorous are more likely to be loved by his or her students. Between the teachers and students arises trust, which is hardly built up between teenagers and a serious teacher. According to a recent survey conducted by a institute on education, nearly 87% of high school students state that they tend to talk with their easygoing teachers, rather than their strict parents or other teachers, to seek relief on their personal issues. （？不是很懂后半句意思。。。）This survey demonstrates that between easygoing teachers and students, there is more possibility to build up a constructive rather than a destructive connection. In addition, with this trust, students are more willing to obey their easygoing instructors so that they could acquire helpful advice from them. Then without any doubt, all this trust and connection contributes to an effective education, which cannot be brought by a strict teacher. （分论点很清晰~可是整段都在叙述，没有例子感觉有点枯燥~）

Admittedly, a serious and strict teacher may offer some minor benefits towards students. For example, with their strict instruction, students who are easy to obey them probably educate themselves with strict command. Meanwhile, they may have less possibility to be corrupted. While, competing with the advantages provided by a humorous and easygoing
（从反面讲这很好，可是感觉作者的观点有点personnal，may就感觉是自己认为的，例子更会具有说明性）

To conclude, although a teacher with serious and strict instruction perhaps bring about some minor advantages, I still maintain that a teacher who is easygoing and humorous is more effective since they provide better lectures and constructive connection with students.

文章很充实，不知道作者花多少时间写的。。。建议还是模拟考场环境。。。
文章有很多值得学习的地方，比如长句就写得不错，结构很清晰~总的来说是好文~
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