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发表于 2011-1-21 21:22:47 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

topic： 59. some people are always in a hurry to go places and get things done. other people prefer to take their time and live life at a slower pace.

While some people are used to live at a franticpace, others feel comfortable with a slow pace. As far as I am concerned, thesetwo kinds of life attitude were not conflict each other at all. We could be getsomething done quickly and enjoy other leisure time lazily. By this way, I mademy university life wonderful and memorable.

Since I entered university, I put study onthe top of my list. I always stepped in the classroom first, respond toteachers quickly, and handed my paper before others.
At the same time, I joined in the studentunion and took the chair for the last two years. When I dealt with work, Iwould like to plan things well and finished them in time. This habit or stylemakes me a good leader of students union, winning the trust of schoolfellowsand instructors.

On the other hand, accomplishing my missionas a student and chairman of students’ union without delay allows me has moreleisure time to enjoy. I was accustomed to relish good movies and music atnight in my dormitory. During the two hours, I could forget everything boringand just immerse into the wonderful atmosphere around me. Although I finishedmy paper in a short time regularly, I would love to wander with my girlfriendin a park for a whole day, making our relationship more concrete. Furthermore, Ispent my vacations to visit beauty spots and cities. I like to use my foot andeyes to explore the lives of different people. For example, when I was in lasa,the most thing I like to do is stay at the jokhang monasty square and observethe facial express of different people, especially that of pilgrims; I couldread a thing called piety from that.

In my view, there are so many distinctivethings in our lifetime. We cannot treat all of them with one single attitude. Onlyhandle diverse issue with different pace could we have a beautiful life.

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发表于 2011-1-22 10:09:42 |只看该作者

第一段的conflict后面加上with吧？conflict是vi.第二段的respond改成responded，同学用的是过去时态，handed in是提交的意思。第三段would like to 后面的plan和finish的时态应该一致。on the other hand那一句中，student union without delay allowed me。Furthermore 后面beautiful spots，beauty是名词。lasa的词头l 大写，因为是地名，Lasa。facial expression, express是动词。这些只是我的个人看法，如有不对之处请见谅哈

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