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发表于 2003-9-8 11:50:23 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

i 113 "It is primarily through our identification with social groups that we define ourselves."

How we human being define ourselves has being one of the most important and basic philosophic questions ever since the ancient Greek philosophy period, which seems even more confusing and mysterious in this era of rapid social and technological changes leading to increasing complexity in both personal life and social environment. The title statement considers "our identification with social groups" the primary element to our self-identification. However, in my opinion, the dual quality of both individuality and sociality of human being calls for a balance in which there is not only social identification but also individual identification within the process of one's self-identification.

Social identification is necessary because everyone lives in a certain social environment, and it is from this social environment that we learn the behavior norms, form the outlook of value, and find the direction of our lives. As Karl Marx, the great German philosopher illustrated brilliantly (and I paragraph), which he regarded as the main key in his whole philosophic system," Human being is a kind of social animal, the essential of a human being is a synthesis of all his or her social relationships." That means, every person acts as different social roles in different time and to different object. As to a man, for example, he is son, husband and father in his family, he is teacher to his students, and also he is a fan of the New York Nicks when he watches the basketball match in the stadium. The process of enjoying right as well as fulfilling incumbency of every role is just the process for one to form his or her integrated human definition. So, undoubtedly, social identification is unavoidable in human self-identification.

Simply put, without being set in some certain social environment, one cannot be properly defined. The best example to this is the wolf-girl found in Amazon forest, who was the only survivor of a severe airplane accident and was brought up by a group of wolfs. The wolf-girl had no psychological characteristics of mankind, she is afraid of staying together with others, cannot communicate with others. Even in physical points, she was more similar with a wolf rather than a human, she stepped with her all fours and ate raw meat. Obviously, one who is of no sociality like a wolf-girl cannot be defined as a real human being.

On the contrary, however, over social identification leads to an assimilation in the whole society, which is in a sense harmful to social development and will probably prevent people from making clear some personalities hiding deeply in one's spiritual world, which is of equal importance in people's self-identification as sociality. Not all teachers are supposed to be kind and affable, some students need a stricter one. Not all employees are supposed to be precise and conservative, some employers prefer a more energetic and adventurous one. The attempt to form people in the same shape was proved a big error and a destructive calamity to the society both in pre-U.S.S.R. under the Stalin's administration and in China in 1970's. To sum up, as mentioned in the famous movie "Legend of the fall", no one can refuse to listen to the voice from his or her own heart, the self-identification without individuality is not an integrated one.

Without social identification, one can not find the origin from which his sense of value, social norms and life plan was drawn, without looking for some inborn characteristics within oneself, one will miss the important part which different him(her)self from others in the society. So while self-definition necessitates sociality, individuality is equally important. Only can a perfect combination of these two aspects lead to a correct definition of human being.

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发表于 2004-1-3 19:33:02 |只看该作者

ever since the ancient Greek philosophy period, which seems even more confusing... 这里的which指代的是整个前面半句，而你的which里面想要说明的是How we define ourselves这一个问题，指代上出现了错位，因为你的从句用法出错了。改。

and I paragraph写错了吧？ :)

acts as different social roles 好像act as role 有点问题？

she seemed to be more of a wolf than a human as judged by her behavior 可以试试这样的写法

文法上没有太大失误。social方面的两个例子都不错，但是提出了self-identification这一个很有意思的词却没能好好说清楚。最后一个body的论证和说明是不够的，很可惜。而且social identification和assimilation/denial of personal characteristics划等号？之间的联系和区别是应该给与充分说明的，如果你要从这个角度下笔，这也是考察你的逻辑严谨，自己设置概念中是否清晰的所在。

总体来说还是不错的。

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