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Universities should require every studentto take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.

Writea response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree withthe claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address themost compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge yourposition.

感觉这位大哥说的靠谱https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1331699-1-1.html，本文受此影响，不知道水平怎样，求各位狠砸。

1 认为每个学生都相同（违背了教育的精神和目的）——即便部分学生要选修课程，学校是否有权利要求学生这么做呢。
2 这么做的目的（培养兴趣综合发展）必须通过这种形式么——这么做有什么恶果呢：不是每一个学校都可以提供优质的课外服务。不是每一个学生都选择这种形式。
（本文自动脑补了every university，这样可以么？）

之前，链接，要把问题理解成一个体系。即分析修习专业外课程的目的是什么，使问题得到升华。也可理解为阐释题目。

Shouldevery university set a rule that every student was required to take a varietyof courses outside the students’ field? Admittedly, in contemporary society, itis necessary that every student should have some basic knowledge about nature,society, science and we humans. Furthermore, for most of students, the mostefficient way to attain knowledge is taking university’s courses. To thisextent, the speaker’s assertion seems impregnable. But this rule inadvertently neglectsthe student’s individual situation and illogically assumes that the universitycan make a wise decision about which way is efficient to gain necessaryknowledge instead of students.
部分承认题目，但认为这样做忽略了学生的差异性，同时错误的代替学生成为了学习的主体。

Inmodern pedagogy, every student should be treated in different ways has become acommon sense because of their distinction. In limited education resources,there is difficult to attain this at school in children and teenagersespecially, we cannot assure every student is given a special teacher, however,we must consider this common sense when we are making up a rule. The studentsat university are all adults and they have capability to choose a comfortableway to learn knowledge outside their field of study.
因材施教是常识。有限的教育资源下，未成年人教育中，可以选修业余课程。但大学生主要都是成人，学生有能力自主决定选择哪种方式获取知识而非学校要求。

Moreover, the assertion takes a risk ofwasting universities’ and students’ given resources. Every student takes avariety courses means there must be more courses than they needed. Forinstance, my university set a rule that every student should take twelvecourses. The famous and popular courses only can accept limited students, somany of us should take some unattractive and uninterested courses to accomplishour study. Sometimes there are three or four students in one classroom and ithas hundreds of seats essentially. On the other hand, students were wastingtime on their uninterested fields and some universities could not offerqualified classes. If one university is famous for its nature science, is it alittle hard to acquire it has high-grand courses in social science? Do studentstake these classes will be more efficient than learning themselves?
演讲人的观点可能存在风险（即讨论题目建议实施后的恶果），1 每一个学生都要选课必然要开设很多多余的课程。2 有些学校无法保证领域外课程的教学质量。（可以反问么？）

Admittedly, taking a variety of courses iswell in helping students learn knowledge outside the field of study, thespeaker unnecessarily expands the extent that taking courses is efficient inall fields. For example, my friend Jay learning basketball for many years and he acquired ahigh level before he went to university. For him, more time should be taken in practicingand attending matches. The similar situation is ordinary in physic and music.
Final, university should offer qualified coursesin many fields and encourage students to take them. Even the speaker’s rule hadbeen passed, exceptions should be allowed.
再次承认课程的方式可以帮助部分学生学到知识。但在某些领域这样做效果不好。
最后，学校应提高自身的授课质量并鼓励学生选择业余课程。即便如题要求，也应允许例外。

还有一个问题是，题目要求：应对最能挑战你观点的理由。我总感觉这样以驳斥题目观点立论就没什么能挑战我的了，我这样写算不算把I写成A啊？
我觉得最能挑战我观点的就是，这样做可以培养学生兴趣，我只用最后一段说明这样做可能不行。

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发表于 2012-2-17 10:15:36 |只看该作者

这样写会不会好些？

我的观点是，学校不应该去要求每一个学生都选择领域外课程
1 支持我观点：区别对待承认差异
2 挑战我观点，学校如果没有要求则学生做不到——这样做低估了学生的学习意愿并且混淆了学习的主体。
3 支持我观点：这样做可能带来一些恶果

这样尽量做到了题目附属的要求，但只有一个明确的挑战的观点，这样可以么？

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发表于 2012-2-17 10:38:38 |只看该作者

谢谢LS能肯定我的一些观点。你想法很好，我还是觉得你所谓的“体系”离题目有点太近了，有点被题目牵着鼻子走了。
我想把我的一点个人想法与你交流下。首先要明确大学教育者的目的究竟是什么，即在通识教育和专门教育间是否应该找到一个平衡。论述完这个问题后（这就是所谓“体系”），我再看题目，之前的论述算是给题目underlie了一个坚实的assumption。

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