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发表于 2004-2-29 15:07:53 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

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"High-progile awards such as the Nobel Prize are actually damaging to society because they suggest that only a few people deserve such recognition."

There are only a few specialists who could be honored as the winner of Nobel Prize in their own areas. Therefore, the arguer claims that such high-profile awards are actually "damaging to society"; however, as far as I am concerned, the establishment of such awards and proceeding yearly will bring society nothing harmful but the harmony and prosperity of the development of science.

The establish of such high-profile awards at first was actually with the purpose to praise individuals who commits themselves to their study and research. Take Nobel Prize for example. Out of his kindness and regret that his "marvelous" discovery of bomb brought to society both convenience and tragedies, the famous chemist Nobel left his treasure behind to found a agency to support and praise the people who promote the history of science. In fact, the prize to certain extent is a wonderful wish of some people intending to leave to the world in the future something to memorize. From this point of view, the acquirement of the prize does not mean recognition only to the minority; while the loss of the prize can never be regarded as an ignorance and criticism of society.

After analysis of the origins and meaning of such high-profile prizes, it is not difficult to draw the conclusion that prizes are never undermining society. Oppositely, it stimulates the development of science, the diversity of the theories, especially those conflicts with the old ones, and the most important, the attraction of public attention towards scientists who may be ignored for reasons. Madam Curies and her research on radium can be taken as instance to support such aspect. Her identity as a woman scientist at that time brought her troubles to carry on her research with radium, even social criticism for her deviation from traditional ethics. Yet with the honor of Nobel Prize, she was immediately supported both in finance and in equipment by French government who had refused her request to use national laboratory and to work in university as a teacher. Prizes, at certain time, saved a genius scientist as well as preserved a person with ability for society.

Admittedly, the prizes are sometimes unfair or even wrong. Society may not accept the theory or idea of an individual at certain time, therefore they may "kill" the rights of a scientist to receive his deserved honor. The famous Relativity Theory of Einstein received nothing from the Sweden Government (which is the executor of the Nobel Prize); yet the creator of TTT (which is now among the most troublesome matters polluting the earth and endangering the health of human beings) was honored the 1965 Nobel Prize. However, as a famous Physician has mentioned(and I paraphrase):"The happiness with Nobel is no more than that from a new discovery in my laboratory.", the winners of such prizes do not care at all whether they will receive the prizes and the "loser" of them still devote themselves to their beloved research for the society.

The establishment of a prize is out of an individual's or a group's wish. Yet for the scientists and other potential winners, the honor of such a kind of prize is like a milestone in their research or study road. However with them or not, they will still carry on their way since their purpose is to make this world better, not to win an instant prize.

严格45分钟留下5分钟检查了
不知写的如何大家拍拍
然后给个分数吧~~~~
我9号考~~~~
谢谢各位了~~~~~~~

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俺头脑乱乱只能改点语言了~

issue61
"High-progile awards such as the Nobel Prize are actually damaging to society because they suggest that only a few people deserve such recognition."

There are only a few specialists who could be honored as the winner of Nobel Prize in their own areas. Therefore, the arguer claims that such high-profile awards are actually "damaging to society"; however, as far as I am concerned, the establishment of such awards and proceeding yearly(2词反了) will bring society nothing(?是不是这样用啊) harmful but the harmony and prosperity of the development of science.

The establish(MENT) of such high-profile awards at first(不顺) was actually with the purpose to praise individuals who commits( NO S) themselves to their study and research. Take Nobel Prize(?人把??) for example. Out of his kindness and regret that his "marvelous" discovery of bomb brought to society both convenience and tragedies, the famous chemist Nobel left his treasure behind to found a agency to support and praise the people who promote the history of science. In fact, the prize to certain extent is a wonderful wish of some people intending to leave to the world in the future something to memorize. From this point of view, the acquirement of the prize does not mean recognition only to the minority; while the loss of the prize can never be regarded as an ignorance and criticism of society.

After analysis of the origins and meaning of such high-profile prizes, it is not difficult to draw the conclusion that prizes are never undermining(NEVER UNDERMINES THE) society. Oppositely( 没这样的用法把?), it stimulates the development of science, the diversity of the theories, especially those conflicts with the old ones, and the most important( LY), the attraction of public attention towards scientists who may be ignored for reasons. Madam Curies and her research on radium can be taken as instance to support such aspect. Her identity as a woman scientist at that time brought her troubles to carry on her research with radium, even social criticism for her deviation from traditional ethics. Yet with the honor of Nobel Prize, she was immediately supported both in finance and in equipment by French government who had refused her request to use national laboratory and to work in university as a teacher. Prizes, at ( A )certain time, saved( SAVE) a genius scientist as well as preserved (PRESERVE)a person with ability for society.

Admittedly, the(NO THE) prizes are sometimes unfair or even wrong. Society may not accept the theory or idea of an individual at (A )certain time, therefore they may( 就用BUT 就行了) "kill" the rights of a scientist to receive his deserved honor. The famous Relativity Theory of Einstein received nothing from the Sweden Government (which is the executor of the Nobel Prize); yet the creator of TTT (which is now among the most troublesome matters polluting the earth and endangering the health of human beings) was honored the 1965 Nobel Prize. However, as a famous Physician has mentioned(and I paraphrase):"The happiness with Nobel is no more than that from a new discovery in my laboratory.", the winners of such prizes do not care at all whether they will receive the prizes( OR NOT) and the "loser(复数把?)" of them still devote themselves to their beloved research for the society.

The establishment of a prize is out of an individual's or a group's wish. Yet for the scientists and other potential winners, the honor of such a kind of prize is like a milestone in their research or study road. However(???WHETHER把？) with them or not, they will still carry on their way since their purpose is to make this world better, not to win an instant prize.

这几天闹到是糨糊, 看不出什么内容啊逻辑呀.
但是我决的你时间写的好好0 ,还有剩余的时间，我每次都超时,烦死了要考了还改不掉:(
MM有什么秘诀呀~

另外，你3段都举了例子...PF....我就想不到，想到了也品不出名字:(

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发表于 2004-2-29 16:58:31 |只看该作者

时间上面是没有秘诀的我写的不多也就那么10来篇
不过我还是觉得想好了再写就会比较快的

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发表于 2004-2-29 17:27:01 |只看该作者

猫猫，想问问你说的严格摸考是那种，刷的拿来题目然后花花花就写的那种吗？
我现在还是很郁闷在，如果拿来就写，时间可能就差，看了提纲写就差不多了，咳，居然还有5分钟，羡慕

猫猫，我写这个题目的时候一直有个疑问，这个题目只是那nobel prize做了引子，可是我怎么觉得写着写着就变成写这个奖了，你的也是啊，第一段从奖项的建立开始，你觉得是不是该写什么~~~文学奖啊，电影的话奥斯卡也算是最高的了，写写这个也不错啊，不应该局限在那一个点上

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发表于 2004-2-29 18:19:16 |只看该作者

"High-progile awards such as the Nobel Prize are actually damaging to society because they suggest that only a few people deserve such recognition."

There are only a few specialists who could be honored as the winner of Nobel Prize in their own areas. Therefore, the arguer claims that such high-profile awards are actually "damaging to society"; however, as far as I am concerned, the establishment of such awards and proceeding yearly will bring society nothing harmful but the harmony and prosperity of the development of science. (问个问题，prosperity of development这种说法你肯定吗？)

The establish of such high-profile awards at first was actually with the purpose to praise individuals who commits themselves to their study and research. Take Nobel Prize for example. Out of his kindness and regret that his "marvelous" discovery of bomb（好像是三硝基甲苯一类的东西，用bomb不合适吧。） brought to society both convenience and tragedies, the famous chemist Nobel left his treasure behind to found a agency to support and praise the people who promote the history of science. In fact, the prize to certain extent is a wonderful wish of some people intending to leave to the world in the future something to memorize. From this point of view, the acquirement of the prize does not mean recognition only to the minority; while the loss of the prize can never be regarded as an ignorance and criticism of society. （最后一句话没看懂,呵呵，能否讲解一下）

After analysis of the origins and meaning of such high-profile prizes, it is not difficult to draw the conclusion that prizes are never undermining society. Oppositely, it stimulates the development of science, the diversity of the theories, especially those conflicts with the old ones, and the most important, the attraction of public attention towards scientists who may be ignored for reasons. Madam Curies and her research on radium can be taken as instance to support such aspect. Her identity as a woman scientist at that time brought her troubles to carry on her research with radium, even social criticism for her deviation from traditional ethics. Yet with the honor of Nobel Prize, she was immediately supported both in finance and in equipment by French government who had refused her request to use national laboratory and to work in university as a teacher. Prizes, at certain time, saved a genius scientist as well as preserved a person with ability for society. （这个例子举的真好，呵呵，收录之！）

Admittedly, the prizes are sometimes unfair or even wrong. Society may not accept the theory or idea of an individual at certain time, therefore they may "kill" the rights of a scientist to receive his deserved honor. The famous Relativity Theory of Einstein received nothing from the Sweden Government (which is the executor of the Nobel Prize); yet the creator of TTT (which is now among the most troublesome matters polluting the earth and endangering the health of human beings) was honored the 1965 Nobel Prize. However, as a famous Physician has mentioned(and I paraphrase):"The happiness with Nobel is no more than that from a new discovery in my laboratory.", the winners of such prizes do not care at all whether they will receive the prizes and the "loser" of them （加个will好一些）still devote themselves to their beloved research for the society.

The establishment of a prize is out of an individual's or a group's wish. Yet for the scientists and other potential winners, the honor of such a kind of prize is like a milestone in their research or study road. However （whether？）with them or not, they will still carry on their way since their purpose is to make this world better, not to win an instant prize.

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