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发表于 2005-3-20 17:42:11 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

144,It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value.
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
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Currently, the value of the critic is under great suspicion, some people argue that the critic gives nothing of enduring significance to the society. However, in my point of view, I agree that it is the artist who gives society something of lasting value whereas the critic also plays a crucial pole in the field of art.

To begin with, the artist does bring something of significance to the world, which will not be undermined even by the severest criticism. As it is said by a famous Chinese writer(and I paraphrase):Being a piece of gold, it will glitter eventually. When it comes to the area of art, it is the same. If it is really an excellent work, it will be appreciated by the public ultimately. Take the abstract painting by Van Gogh for example, when he was alive, his work was considered of no value at all by the critic and even by the public. However, not long after his death, with the promotion of the mass cognition, people began to realize the inherent significance of his work. Therefore, the outstanding art work will at last proves to be valuable though it is possibly not be accepted by the contemporaries.

On the other hand, there is no denying that it is the critic who help the public to have a better understanding of the significance to the artwork. Common sense tells us that many famous works are not easy to understand/comprehend, such as the Last Super and the Mona Lisa by Da Vinci, how many people on earth understand the essence of the leading art works? In this case, the critics have a space to exert themselves. For instance, A Dream Of Red Mansions, a most famous work in China at present, enjoys an everlasting reputation throughout the country. However, it is not easy to imagine that when it was born, the government regarded it as an obscene book and forbade it, which also led the public to have a bad impression of the book. With the great effort of the critic from generation to generation, such as having research to the author's background, experience and the social culture at that time, finally, they found that this book do was an outstanding artwork and increasingly number of people started to accepted the book. Thus, it is apparently that the critics, who are willing to devote themselves to some artwork, will offer an access to the outstanding work, which is not easy for the mass to understand.

Furthermore, what the critics point out, to some extent, give inspiration for the creation of the artists and simultaneously, help them to assimilate the advantages of other’s works and also offset the weakness of themselves. Nowadays, in the realm of film, the producers are mostly aim at the box office without having a deep thought about what they should bring to the audience. However, Titanic, the best film in the 1997 Oscar, drew a vast attention of the critics and therefore gave the film industry a intense impact. The critics, after a further study of the film, revealed to the public what is contained in the film, that was: the everlasting love and the very spirit of the human being that should be cherished most when facing the death, which also offered a good lesson to the entirety of the film producers about what was the most important in their work.

To sum up, the critic is also useful in the society, other than the artist.

结尾太仓促，请高手指教！

爱是绝对不能放弃的!
You Will Never Fail Till You Stop Trying~~~

想与你相拥在雨中漫步，
想与你在幽幽月华下携手相依，
然后一起慢慢老去。

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向日葵的孩子
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沙发

发表于 2005-3-20 17:58:13 |只看该作者

占座!
今日晚些时候交

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板凳

发表于 2005-3-20 18:09:34 |只看该作者

144,It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value.
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.
---------------------------------------------------------------

Currently, the value of the critic is under great suspicion, some people argue that the critic gives nothing of enduring significance to the society. However, in my point of view, I agree that it is the artist who gives society something of lasting value whereas the critic also plays a crucial pole in the field of art.

To begin with, the artist does bring something of significance to the world, which will not be undermined even by the severest criticism. As it is said by a famous Chinese writer(and I paraphrase):Being a piece of gold, it will glitter eventually. When it comes to the area of art, it is the same. If it is really an excellent work, it will be appreciated by the public ultimately. Take the abstract painting by Van Gogh for example, when he was alive, his work was considered of no value at all by the critic and even by the public. However, not long after his death, with the promotion of the mass cognition, people began to realize the inherent significance of his work. Therefore, the outstanding art work will at last proves to be valuable though it is possibly not be accepted by the contemporaries.
(例子用的恰当，语言简洁，赞！）
On the other hand, there is no denying that it is the critic who help the public to have a better understanding of the significance to the artwork. Common sense tells us that many famous works are not easy to understand/comprehend,（这用comprehend好） such as the Last Super and the Mona Lisa by Da Vinci, how many people on earth understand the essence of the leading（gorgous) art works? In this case, the critics have a space to exert themselves. For instance, A Dream Of Red Mansions, a most famous work in China at present(at present去掉）, enjoys an everlasting reputation throughout the country. However, it is not easy to imagine that when it was born, the government regarded it as an obscene book and forbade it, which also led the public to have a bad（用clear好吗？bad太绝对了吧？）impression of the book. With the great effort of the critic from generation to generation, such as having research to the author's background, experience and the social culture at that time, finally, they found that this book do was an outstanding artwork and increasingly number of people started to accepted (accept and appreciate)the book. Thus, it is apparently that the critics, who are willing to devote themselves to some(some去掉） artwork, will offer an access to the outstanding work, which is not easy for the mass（ordinary people) to understand.

Furthermore, what the critics point out, to some extent, give inspiration for the creation of the artists and simultaneously, help them to assimilate the advantages of other’s works and also offset the weakness of themselves. Nowadays, in the realm of film, the producers are mostly aim at the box office without having a deep thought about what they should bring to the audience. However, Titanic, the best film in the 1997 Oscar, drew a vast attention of the critics and therefore gave the film industry a intense impact. The critics, after a further study of the film, revealed to the public what is contained in the film, that was: the everlasting love and the very spirit of the human being that should be cherished most when facing the death, which also offered a good lesson to the entirety of the film producers about what was the most important in their work.

To sum up, the critic is also useful in the society, other than the artist.

结尾太仓促，请高手指教！
(你的开头和结尾是不是不副呀？如果你的结论是最后一段的观点，那么第一段应该再说清楚点。而且结尾真的有点轻，要知道结尾是点精之笔呢。不过我真觉得文章不错，行文流畅，没有大词和生词，赞，不过我是新手，请多多指教

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地板

发表于 2005-3-20 22:44:41 |只看该作者

UP一下，进步很大地说！

宝宝，爱你!
一起走过的路,即使看不到尽头也要永远牵着手......

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发表于 2005-3-20 23:28:23 |只看该作者

Currently, the value of the critic is under great suspicion, some people argue that the critic gives nothing of enduring significance to the society. However, in my point of view, I agree that it is the artist who gives society something of lasting value whereas the critic also plays a crucial pole in the field of art.

To begin with, the artist does bring something of significance to the world, which will not be undermined even by the severest criticism. As it is said by a famous Chinese writer(and I paraphrase):Being a piece of gold, it will glitter eventually[再具体讲解一下这句话会比较好，英语语言文化中可能没有这种意象，老美很可能搞不懂这句话是什么意思，虽然我们可能会认为很理所当然]. When it comes to the area of art, it is the same. If it is really an excellent work, it will be appreciated by the public ultimately[噢，你这里又解释清楚了，但个人感觉应该在上面也应巧妙地解释一下]. Take the abstract painting by Van Gogh for example, when he was alive, his work[works才是作品的意思] was considered of no value at all by the critic and even by the public. However, not long after his death, with the promotion of the mass cognition, people began to realize the inherent significance of his work. Therefore, the outstanding art work will at last proves to be valuable though it is possibly not be accepted by the contemporaries.[总结这段：后面的论证与主题句很好的吻合，特别是“which will not be undermined even by the severest criticism”也照应得非常好，就是感觉例子太陈旧了，但确实很恰当，呵呵]

On the other hand, there is no denying that it is the critic who help the public to have a better understanding of the significance[换个词吧，用好几次了] to the artwork. Common sense tells us that many famous works are not easy to understand/comprehend, such as the Last Super and the Mona Lisa by Da Vinci, how many people on earth understand the essence of the leading art works? In this case, the critics have a space to exert themselves. For instance, A Dream Of Red Mansions, a most famous work in China at present, enjoys an everlasting reputation throughout the country. However, it is not easy to imagine that when it was born, the government regarded it as an obscene book and forbade it, which also led the public to have a bad impression of the book. With the great effort of the critic from generation to generation, such as having research to the author's background, experience and the social culture at that time, finally, they found that this book do was[do was?] an outstanding artwork and increasingly[increasing] number of people started to accepted[用原型] the book. Thus, it is apparently that the critics, who are willing to devote themselves to some artwork, will offer an access to the outstanding work, which is not easy for the mass to understand.[按照这段对红楼梦的论述，实际上也完全可以用上一段中的凡高啊，光看例子的话这两个都像是在说明一个问题，觉不觉得？为避免这个，个人认为关于评论家起到的关键性作用应在这段中重点写。末句有待改进]

Furthermore, what the critics point out, to some extent, give inspiration for the creation of the artists and simultaneously, help them to assimilate the advantages of other’s works and also offset the weakness of themselves. Nowadays, in the realm of film, the producers are mostly aim at the box office without having a deep thought about what they should bring to the audience. However, Titanic, the best film in the 1997 Oscar, drew a vast attention of the critics and therefore gave the film industry a[an] intense impact. The critics, after a further study of the film, revealed to the public what is contained in the film, that was: the everlasting love and the very spirit of the human being that should be cherished most when facing the death, which also offered a good lesson to the entirety of the film producers about what was the most important in their work.[最好要对TS里的“and also offset the weakness of themselves.”也有所照应]

To sum up, the critic is also useful in the society, other than the artist.

[别看俺批得有点多，其实是在carp，别介意喔。其实楼主限时写的已经是很不错了啊，够强！]

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