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发表于 2005-7-15 22:15:43 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

0510G同主题写作第二期－－Issue104 有拍毕回

前些日子一直忙考试，今天才完整地写第一篇。大家别笑话，帮忙看看
连着看题目、看了些大家的提纲总共用了快三个半小时了，偶尔还用词霸
It is true that formal education surely has the responsibility to transmit ideas, and especially as a tool of culture it seems primarily to be the main means to perpetuate or discredit certain ideas. But as a matter of fact, whether education plays the most significant role or not depends on the epoch
Which it is in and the people it faces.

As we know, people's mind developed as time goes by. In ancient era when most people were wild and foolish, formal education became a certain way for gerentocratic to bondage ordinary people, and therefore was the most effective measure to perpetuate the ideas which the culture favors and discredit the ideas that it fears. Take China for an illustration, during more than 2000 years of feudality, Confucianism always stood a steady position, which was used to be diffuse ideas as a tool of culture. Then, some ideas which culture favors must be apotheosized and handed down generations by generations while others which culture feared would be discredited by all means.

However, formal education can not always be in the leading place in helping culture perpetuate or discredit ideas. Formal education is more and more orient to be open not only to all kinds of ideas but also to an avalanche of culture. Hardly can a certain kind of national culture determine what ideas to perpetuate or discredit through formal education. Apart from, even if formal education serves for a sort of culture people will not take it thoroughly, for they must achieve the capability of analysis and judgement from the persist developed education. At the same time, other ways such as medias、laws and even the social consensus may substitute the position of formal education. Any measure makes contribute to culture for perpetuating the ideas it favors and discrediting the ideas it fears. For example, social problems have much relationship with culture. Education is made to teach people the ideas to be kind hoping to reduce the serious problems. Whereas crisis 、stealing and violence which is surely feared by the culture no matter in which country still often appears. It must be medias or other means‘strength.

In one word, formal education has its effect in perpetuating the ideas that culture favors or discrediting the ideas that it fears, which can not be substitute by other ways. But it is not always play a primary role. We can not ignore the factor of era.
谢谢大家了：）也请斑竹帮忙看看

[ Last edited by staralways on 2005-7-15 at 23:42 ]

人生太短
出手要更大
旁观者不需理解

赢得风光
豪得精彩
自己偏偏感觉失败

自尊心都可以出卖
忘记我也是无坏
连幸福都输掉醉在长街
依然是我最大

连梦想洒一地再任人踩依然笑得爽快

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发表于 2005-7-23 08:51:56 |只看该作者

昨天一直没上到网，心里一直惦记着。可是我没写过issue所以也不能给你提什么意见。顶一下拉
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... ge=1&highlight=
这是我的另外一篇arg有空看看吧

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发表于 2005-7-26 13:15:58 |只看该作者

It is true that formal education surely has the responsibility to transmit ideas, and especially as a tool of culture, it seems primarily to be the main means to perpetuate or discredit certain ideas. But as a matter of fact, whether education plays the most significant role or not depends on the epoch which [when] it is in and the people it faces.

As we [all] know, people's mind developed as time goes by. In ancient era when most people were wild and foolish, formal education became a certain way for gerentocratic to bondage ordinary people, and therefore was the most effective measure to perpetuate the ideas which the culture favors and discredit the ideas that it fears. Take China for [as] an illustration, during more than 2000 years of feudality, Confucianism always stood a steady position, which was used to be diffuse ideas as a tool of culture. Then, some ideas which culture favors must be apotheosized and handed down generations by generations while others which culture feared would be discredited by all means. [觉得“through formal education”在这里没有很好地体现出来。]

However, formal education can not always be in the leading place in helping culture perpetuate or discredit ideas. Formal education is more and more orient to be open not only to all kinds of ideas but also to an avalanche [雪崩？] of culture. Hardly can a certain kind of national culture determine what ideas to perpetuate or discredit through formal education. Apart from, even if formal education serves for a sort of culture people will not take it thoroughly, for they must achieve the capability of analysis and judgement from the persist developed education. At the same time, other ways such as medias、laws and even the social consensus may substitute the position of formal education. Any measure makes contribute to culture for perpetuating the ideas it favors and discrediting the ideas it fears. For example, social problems have much relationship with culture. Education is made to teach people the ideas to be kind hoping to reduce the serious problems. Whereas crisis, stealing and violence which is surely feared by the culture no matter in which country still often appears. It must be medias or other means’ strength. [这段把很多内容集中在一起写，导致写得都比较笼统。可以把关于其他方式的内容另起一段来写。]

In one word, formal education has its effect in perpetuating the ideas that culture favors or discrediting the ideas that it fears, which cannot be substitute by other ways. But it is not always play a primary role. [“是一种无法被取代的方式” vs. “不是主要的方式”，是不是悖论？] We cannot ignore the factor of era.

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