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The following appeared in a memorandum written by the vice president of Nature’s Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products.

“Previous experience has shown that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build our next new store in Plainsville, which has many such residents. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club, which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. We can even anticipate a new generation of customers: Plainsville’s schoolchildren are required to participate in a ‘fitness for life’ program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.”
Outline:
1，That residents are concerned with leading healthy lives doesn’t necessary mean that they emphasize on health food, however, they may rely on physical exercise or the like as a means to boost up corporeity.
2,Plainsville residents ‘ relish of buying sport items has nothing direct to do with their propensity of health food
3,the arguer ignore consideration of the feasibility of opening a new health food store in the city in that if Plainsville already has some analogous hygienical druge stores there with good selling record and excerllent service, it’s hard for a newbie like Nature’s Way to invade into the market.
4,also, there’s no evidence proving the everlasing profit according only to the present porsperous selling phenomenon
The vice president’s argumentation is preposterous and unconvincing if failed to validate the followiing facts.

From the argumentation we can see that one most impotant factor the augur drew support from is that palinsville’s citizens pay good attention on leading healthy lives. However, positive notion of fitness is a broad defination with a great many of concret methods engaging in, for example, physical exercise, regulare living habit, absorbing nurture, regular physical check in hospitals, eating healthy food and so forth. With all of these methods we can inexticably gain strong physique, but, reversly, the combination of all the five means are not the indispensible prerequisite for achieving our target of being healthy. In terms of this, there’s undenied possiblity that denizens of this city would choose everything except buying healthy food as their inclination to obtain fitness. So, the argure’s reasoning in this degree is not compelling and persuasive.

In addition, all-time high sales of sport items like running shoese and excercising clothing has only prefiguration, if any, in forseeing the potential market in sport items rather than healthy food. Inhabitants’ buying of these sport items may be a reason for their infatuation in some superstare who advertized for this brand as a mouthpiece, a reason for their deep love in the material of the merchandise and so on. If these non-health-related reasons dominates on residents’ minds when diciding whether to buy or not, they are more like to not buy healthy food because of health and therefore Nature’s Way cannot gain much profit from them.

The vice president ignored not only the relationship between purchase of sport items and healthy food, but he also neglected the analysis of market. Let’s make a hypothesis here, if some good reputed health pruduct campanies have already existed in Plainsville, will a newbie be easy to invade in or even dominate the market? Also, From the psychologic angle, customers would be more attached to old companies and old brand goods instead of new ones because they think old one are more credible. Consequently, it’s hard for Nature’s Way to have a prospersous selling trend without former selling experience in Plainsville.

Finally, the vice president’s reasoning lacks envidence to show everlasing profit only based on the flourishing sales at present. It’s well known that flatuation in marketing and trade is as nature as vississitude in stock market, so the impermanent palmy vision at any period of time is not sufficient to bespeak the forever prosperity.

Having viewed all the aspects above, it’s clear that the arguer’s conclusion lacks credibility because the evidences cited in the analysis are neither penetrating nor strong enough to support what the argument maintain. To validate the argument, the vice president is highly suggested to take aspects like potential market, connection between concern of fitness and concern for health food into consideration.

第一篇写完没检查直接发上来了，错误可能有点多，大家包涵啊，对了，经常应用题目里面的事实的时候应该用什么事态比较好啊，比如这里，vice president给了很多理由来支持他的结论，我们在文章中引用他给了很多理由，这个“给 ”是give or gave or has given呢？？还有就是标点符号的问题，经常都觉得用得不好
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发表于 2005-12-5 16:36:09 |只看该作者

注意下发帖子的格式撒

先帮你改了

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什么格式要求，斑竹说说。没有改啊？？？？

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发表于 2005-12-6 13:43:23 |只看该作者

The vice president’s argumentation is preposterous and unconvincing if failed to validate the followiing facts.是不是开头太短拉哈

From the argumentation we can see that one most impotant factor the augur拼写 drew support from is that palinsville’s citizens pay good attention on leading healthy lives. However, positive notion of fitness is a broad defination with a great many of concret methods engaging我觉得应该是engaged in, for example, physical exercise, regulare living habits, absorbing nurture, regular physical check in hospitals, eating healthy food and so forth. With all of these methods we can inexticablyinextricably 是这个单词吗 gain strong physique, but, reversly, the combination of all the five means are not the indispensibleindispensable prerequisite for achieving our怎么变成我们了 target of being healthy. In terms of this, there’s undenied真的不知道有没有这个单词，原型是undeny吗？查不到 possiblity that the denizens of this city would choose everything except buying healthy food as their inclination to obtain fitness. So, the argure’s reasoning in this degree is not compelling and persuasive.

In addition, all-time high sales of sport items like running shoese队长写得太着急了 and excercising clothing has only prefiguration, if any, in forseeing the potential market in sport items rather than healthy food. Inhabitants’ buying of these sport items意思明白，但是好像 may be a reason for their infatuation in some superstare who advertized for this brand as a mouthpiece, a reason for their deep love in the material of the merchandise and so on. If these non-health-related reasons dominates on residents’ minds when diciding whether to buy or not, they are more like to not buy 不对吧not怎么会放在这里 they are not more likely to buy healthy food because of health and therefore Nature’s Way cannot gain much profit from them.

The vice president ignored not only the relationship between purchase of sport items and healthy food, but he also neglected the analysis of market. Let’s make a hypothesis here, if some good reputed health pruduct campanies have already existed in Plainsville, will a newbie这个单词用的对吗？它是指计算机网络上的新手而不是你现在要表达的这个意思。 be easy to invade in or even dominate the market? Also, From the psychologic angle, customers would be more attached to old companies and old brand goods instead of new ones because they think the old ones are more credible. Consequently, it’s hard for Nature’s Way to have a prospersous selling trend without former selling experience in Plainsville.

Finally, the vice president’s reasoning lacks envidence to show everlasing profits 如果表利润最好加s only based on the flourishing sales at present. It’s well known that flatuation应该是fluctuation吧晕死了:L找了好多才知道:) in marketing and trade is as nature as vississitude是vicissitude吗 in stock market, so the impermanent palmy vision at any period of time is not sufficient to bespeak the forever prosperity.

Having viewed all the aspects above, it’s clear that the arguer’s conclusion lacks credibility because the evidences cited in the analysis are neither penetrating nor strong enough to support what the argument maintain. To validate the argument, the vice president is highly suggested to take aspects like potential market, connection between concern of fitness and concern for health food into consideration.
用什么事态都可以，但是全篇必须一致就可以了。
组长好厉害，好多词我都不会用，学到了好多东东。学习ing
组长加油阿，其他组员也一样。

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发表于 2005-12-6 14:33:51 |只看该作者

yangxing好认真，那么多我写错的单词都查出来了。耐心让我感动啊~~~~我怎么就那么多错别字呢？/考试的时候杂拌？？
其实我也不太确定newbie的用法，还希望大家证实下，除了用在网络上其他的还可以不？
be more like to not buy这种用法不行吗？大家讨论下

呵呵，辛苦yangxing 啦

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发表于 2005-12-6 18:26:12 |只看该作者

ding上，大家来讨论阿

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发表于 2005-12-8 07:09:41 |只看该作者

表哭组长，我来ding以下

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发表于 2005-12-8 10:34:43 |只看该作者

组长别哭，我查到了这个

newbie: /n[y]oo´bee/, n.
[very common; orig. from British public-school and military slang variant of ‘new boy’] A Usenet neophyte. This term surfaced in the newsgroup talk.bizarre but is now in wide use (the combination “clueless newbie” is especially common). Criteria for being considered a newbie vary wildly; a person can be called a newbie in one newsgroup while remaining a respected regular in another. The label newbie is sometimes applied as a serious insult to a person who has been around Usenet for a long time but who carefully hides all evidence of having a clue. See BIFF; see also gnubie. Compare chainik, luser.

看来这个词起源于新闻业，但是现在网络上大家都用这个词代表菜鸟啊，新手啊之类的人。

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发表于 2005-12-8 10:47:14 |只看该作者

看来这个词只能指人了，不能代表公司。

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发表于 2005-12-8 12:29:39 |只看该作者

但是我觉得新手也可以说某个公司是新手吧。那么，大家有什么更好的词专门指新出道的公司呢？
谢谢yangxing和superficial 的帮助了
还有，有更大的可能不会做这个表达：more likely  to not do
                                                more likely not to do
                                 大家觉得哪个是对的？？

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发表于 2005-12-8 17:58:54 |只看该作者

Originally posted by sallyxindu at 2005-12-8 12:29
但是我觉得新手也可以说某个公司是新手吧。那么，大家有什么更好的词专门指新出道的公司呢？
谢谢yangxing和superficial 的帮助了
还有，有更大的可能不会做这个表达：more likely to not do
...

我觉得第二个说出来比较顺口，可是是不是应该换个思路表达一下这个意思呢，其实我觉得都不太好啊

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发表于 2005-12-8 18:48:16 |只看该作者

我没想到更好的表达方法啊

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发表于 2005-12-8 21:39:45 |只看该作者

Originally posted by sallyxindu at 2005-12-8 12:29
但是我觉得新手也可以说某个公司是新手吧。那么，大家有什么更好的词专门指新出道的公司呢？
谢谢yangxing和superficial 的帮助了
还有，有更大的可能不会做这个表达：more likely to not do
...

novice
newly emerged company

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