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发表于 2007-3-25 19:12:35 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

你的格式还是错的
191和argument之间没有空格和后面必须有空格
这次我帮你改了下次请注意

还有作为作业交改贴更应该注意格式问题
就算格式改正确之后版主也无法保证很快能把锁掉的主题打开因为我们也是学生不可能保证24小时在线谢谢理解支持 by iq28

Argument 70:

The following is a letter from a professor at Xanadu College to the college's president.

"The development of an extensive computer-based long-distance learning program will enhance the reputation of Xanadu College. This program would allow more students to enroll in our courses, thereby increasing our income from student tuition. Traditional courses could easily be adapted for distance learners, as was shown by the adaptation of two traditional courses for our distance learning trial project last year. Also, by using computer programs and taped lectures, faculty will have fewer classroom obligations and more time to engage in extensive research, thereby enhancing the reputation of Xanadu."

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1.deadline:仍然是下周日晚上，也就是4.1晚上。大家尽量吧。

2.每个人贴出自己的文章同时，也给别的同学的作业提出修改意见，大家互相促进。

3.第四次作业由是issue，由 totalsm45518 （陶气宝宝）同学出题。

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发表于 2007-3-25 19:21:44 |只看该作者

:rolleyes: 俺来报名一下。大家加油！
deadline是愚人节哦~~~ ;d:

所有的误会错过都是因为不同时的回头。

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发表于 2007-3-25 19:33:31 |只看该作者

;d: 占座！

我们的目标就是：早点退出江湖，隐退开麻将馆和菜馆，hoho

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发表于 2007-3-25 21:42:38 |只看该作者

一定按时完成！！

In this argument, the arguer recommends that The development of an extensive computer-based long-distance learning program will enhance the reputation of Xanadu College. To bolster this conclusion, he cites the fact that there were two traditional courses for their distance learning trial project last year whose adaptations were apparent. The arguer also refers the assumption that enroll more students and the more time engaging in extensive research as well as fewer classroom obligations will consequently enhance the reputation of Xanadu. However, the professor’s argument is problematic in several respects, rendering the argument unconvincing as it stands.
   To begin with, the arguer imposes the unsustainable connection between the long-distance learning program and the augment in enrolling more students in their courses. We cannot ensure that the course they carry out is to the taste of the students. If students find it is too boring to learn the program, how could there be an possibility that more students will be enrolled. What’s more, if there are not sufficent students who own a personal computer, in another word, only minory students can afford to enjoy this computer-based long-distance learning program, there is no assurement that the program will attract more students.
   Secondly, the professor cites the evidence of the adaptation of two traditional courses for distance learning trial project last year, consequently he infers that traditional courses could easily be adapted for distance learners. Notwithstanding the two traditional courses have been proved to be an success in the form of distance learning project, this cannot typify all the courses. Maybe the two courses are about the advanced development in the world such as sciences, technology, arts or military affairs, which of course can absorb more students attention and interest. Consequently they were adapted easily. But if the course is as common as daily classess in the classroom, maybe the number of students joining the long-distance courses will go down.
   What’s more, the aruger connect the less obligation of classrooms for teachers and the extensive research, I don’t think it is reasionalbe. The long-distance courses also need teacher’s dedication no less than that in classrooms so that they can assure the quality of the courses. Therefore, the less obligation of classrooms cannot allow more time for extensive research. Even if there is extensive research, the arguer cannot conclude that this will enhance the reputation of Xandu. To enhance the reputation, the college must improve their source of teachers, students, equipments and the capility of research, not only by extensive reseach.
   In sum, this is a weak argument. To strengthen it, the professor must consider and collect all other possible explanations for the advantages of long-distance courses. He should cite more statistics concerning about the students who have learnt on line. Maybe s survey in students has more persuation.To better assess the argument, I would need more information about the two courses put in distance course last year and the relation between the less obligation classrooms and the extensive research.

字数：495  没有限时但是感觉写的很散希望大家很批

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发表于 2007-3-31 22:33:27 |只看该作者

写了很久才写了这么多，挺痛苦的。写的不好，大家使劲儿批吧！
In this letter the professor argues that by introducing the computer-based long-distance learning program, the reputation of their college will be improved and more students will be enrolled in their college and thus teachers' income will be increased. To support the feasibility of this plan, the professor mentions the successful adaptation of two traditional courses last year. Besides, to show that this will improve their reputation, the professor points out that by doing so, faculty will not have to go to classrooms frequently, thus they will have more time to engage in extensive research. At first glance, the professor's reasoning seems to be appealing, but after clearly examining, we may find that it is unconvincing. The argument contains several facets that are questionable.
To begin with, the computer-based long-distance learning program may have nothing to do with the increase of the enrollment as well as teachers' income. Whether to choose this college or not depends on many other factors except for its availability. Even if this type of learning program is available for students far away, they may not choose to enter as for other reasons to be considered such as the tuition fees and their economic status and so forth. Besides, even though the enrollment has been significantly improved, it does not guarantee the increase of teachers' income. I concede that this will undoubtedly happen if the tuition fees for this type of learning are equal to or more than the traditional one. However, the author does not mention the tuition fees in the letter.
Secondly, the adaptation of two traditional courses does not mean that all traditional courses will be successfully adapted since they are only two of the overall courses and can not represent the others. Different courses possess their own features, and some may not be appropriate to be taught on line such as mathematics, arts, chemistry and so forth. If these courses are taught via the internet, there is no doubt that they may lose their innate features.
In addition, the notion that by introducing the computer programs and taped lectures, faculty will not have to go to classrooms frequently and thus have more time to engage in extensive research is questionable for the following aspects. Firstly, the professor does not provide any concrete evidences in the letter. Secondly, by doing so their working time may be prolonged rather than shortened because students may ask questions via the internet at any time. In this way, they may be obsessed with the on line teaching and may have little time for their researches. What is more, their physical health may be seriously deteriorated if they working all day long.
To sum up, the professor's conclusion lacks of credibility. Regardless of who the author is, he or she has overlooked or chosen to ignore many aspects of his or her conclusion. To strengthen the conclusion, the professor should give more evidences about the above-mentioned possibilities.

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