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发表于 2007-8-6 21:24:51 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

TOPIC: ISSUE4 - "No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study."
WORDS: 446 TIME: 02:22:46 DATE: 2007-8-6 21:15:08

提纲：
1. 其他领域的知识能否带来新的灵感，举遗传算法的例子
2. 但是对于一些基础学科，可以独立发展。举黎曼几何的例子
3. 基础学科加上其他领域的帮组能够得到进一步的发展，还是黎曼几何的例子，找到在相对论里面的对应。

结论领域内和领域外的研究都很重要。

The speaker asserts that no field of study can advance significantly without outsiders' knowledge and experience. Although this issue sounds a convincing one, I cannot totally agree with it because for some fundamental disciplines the researchers can develop their field within itself.

Admittedly, guided by the outsiders' knowledge and experience, the field of study may inspire from them and set off the New World. Most of the numerical calculation experts feel frustrated when they encounter their well-designed energy function always trapped into the local minimum. Enlightened by the genetics, in 1975 J. Holland put forward the genetic algorithm to find the satisfactory solution for that problem. This new approach simulates the evolution process and search for the better solution to update the genetics code. Evidences have showed it performs well in many kinds of application. Besides, other bionics examples such as the invention of radar also demonstrate that the field can reap benefits from outsiders' knowledge and experience. Shared with outside framework and skill, some innovation is likely to be worked out. As the society evolved into a complicated one, it's usually necessary to seek the solution through the amalgamation of all the subjects.

Nevertheless, some basic disciplines can advance remarkably all by themselves. In the eighteenth century, Riemann proposed a new concept into the mathematics realm - Riemannian Geometry. But his work didn’t achieve approve from his colleges, since many of them think this theory worth nothing. Riemann standed by the presure, and went on with this new domain, and finally explored a research area - non-Euclidean Geometry. Obviously, such basic field of study can proceed on a big step without outside force. So some theories can evolve free from the phenomenon of human observation, and external field can be helpful but unable to occupy the whole process.

As a matter of fact, the breakthrough from other fields may stimulate the elemental research to go forward further. Still take the Riemann example, all of the non-Euclidean Geometry would be of interest only to mathematics except for the intervention of a guy called Albert Einstein. He showed in his General Theory of Relativity that gravity has such an effect on everything around it that space is curved and obeys Riemannian Geomery. It means that Riemann's theory find its correspondence in the real world. That drives more and more researchers dive into the non-Euclidean Geometry ocean, and push this area toward a new epoch. Thus outsider advances are also helpful for the field's progress.

To sum up, both internal and external knowledge and experience are important for the disciplines' advances. Take full advantages of the two folds, our science will have a bright future.

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The speaker asserts that no field of study can advance significantly without outsiders' knowledge and experience. Although this issue sounds a convincing one, I cannot totally agree with it because for some fundamental disciplines the researchers can develop their field within itself. Admittedly, guided by the outsiders' knowledge and experience, the field of study may inspire from them and set off the New World. Most of the numerical calculation experts feel frustrated when they encounter their well-designed energy function always trapped into the local minimum. Enlightened by the genetics, in 1975 J. Holland put forward the genetic algorithm to find the satisfactory solution for that problem. This new approach simulates the evolution process and search for the better solution to update the genetics code. Evidences have showed it performs well in many kinds of application. Besides, other bionics examples such as the invention of radar also demonstrate that the field can reap benefits from outsiders' knowledge and experience. Shared with outside framework and skill, some innovation is likely to be worked out. As the society evolved into a complicated one, it's usually necessary to seek the solution through the amalgamation of all the subjects.哇，这么精典的例子都想的到。Nevertheless, some basic disciplines can advance remarkably all by themselves. In the eighteenth century, Riemann proposed a new concept into the mathematics realm - Riemannian Geometry. But his work didn’t achieve approve from his colleges, since many of them think this theory worth nothing. Riemann standed byshoulder the presurepressure, and went on with this new domain, and finally exploredcreate a new research area - non-Euclidean Geometry. Obviously, such basic field of study can proceed on a big step without outside force. So some theories can evolve free from the phenomenon of human observation, and external field can be helpful but unable to occupy the whole process.As a matter of fact, the breakthrough from other fields may stimulate the elemental research to go forward further. Still take the Riemann example, all of the non-Euclidean Geometry would be of interest only to mathematics except for the intervention of a guy called Albert Einstein. He showed in his General Theory of Relativity that gravity has such an effect on everything around it that space is curved and obeys Riemannian Geomery. It means that Riemann's theory find its correspondence in the real world. That drives more and more researchers dive into the non-Euclidean Geometry ocean, and push this area toward a new epoch. Thus outsider advances are also helpful for the field's progress. To sum up, both internal and external knowledge and experience are important for the disciplines' advances. Take full advantages of the two folds, our science will have a bright future.

感觉最大的问题就是第一个观点和第三个观点感觉非常类似，区别没有讲出来。其它感觉还可以，文章行文还是相当流畅的。例子举的也很到位。学习中。。。

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发表于 2007-8-6 23:47:58 |只看该作者

很奇怪，怎么放在WORD里面好好的，拷出来就这样了？

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发表于 2007-8-6 23:57:50 |只看该作者

The speaker asserts that no field of study can advance significantly without outsiders' knowledge and experience. Although this issue sounds a convincing one, I cannot totally agree with it because for some fundamental disciplines the researchers can develop their field within itself. （觉得开头很好。。。不完全赞同开头的写法偶要好好学习～）

Admittedly, guided by the outsiders' knowledge and experience, the field of study may inspire from them and set off the New World. Most of the numerical calculation experts feel frustrated when they encounter their well-designed energy function always trapped into the local minimum. Enlightened by the genetics, in 1975 J. Holland put forward the genetic algorithm to find the satisfactory solution for that problem. This new approach simulates the evolution process and search for the better solution to update the genetics code. Evidences have showed it performs well in many kinds of application. Besides, other bionics examples such as the invention of radar also demonstrate that the field can reap benefits from outsiders' knowledge and experience. Shared with outside framework and skill, some innovation is likely to be worked out. As the society evolved into a complicated one, it's usually necessary to seek the solution through the amalgamation of all the subjects.（the去掉感觉好些。。。这段的论述很有说服力，例子也很好～非常好的例子啊～）

Nevertheless, some basic disciplines can advance remarkably all by themselves. In the eighteenth century, Riemann proposed a new concept into the mathematics realm - Riemannian Geometry. But his work didn’t achieve approve（动词？） from his colleges, since many of them think this theory worth nothing. Riemann standed by the presure, and went on with this new domain, and finally explored a research area - non-Euclidean Geometry. Obviously, such basic field of study can proceed on a big step without outside force. So some theories can evolve free from the phenomenon of human observation, and external field can be helpful but unable to occupy the whole process.（例子真好。。。）

As a matter of fact, the breakthrough from other fields may stimulate the elemental research to go forward further. Still take the Riemann example, all of the non-Euclidean Geometry would be of interest only to mathematics except for the intervention of a guy called Albert Einstein. He showed in his General Theory of Relativity that gravity has such an effect on everything around it that space is curved and obeys Riemannian Geomery. It means that Riemann's theory find its correspondence in the real world. That drives more and more researchers dive into the non-Euclidean Geometry ocean, and push this area toward a new epoch. Thus outsider advances are also helpful for the field's progress.

To sum up, both internal and external knowledge and experience are important for the disciplines' advances. Take full advantages of the two folds, our science will have a bright future.

写的真好啊！赞一个，很值得学习～例子真好，收了。。。

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发表于 2007-8-7 10:28:09 |只看该作者

The speaker asserts that no field of study can advance significantly without outsiders' knowledge and experience. Although this issue sounds a convincing one, I cannot totally agree with it because for some fundamental disciplines the researchers can develop their field within itself.

Admittedly, guided by the outsiders' knowledge and experience, the field of study may inspire from them and set off the New World. Most of the numerical calculation experts feel frustrated when they encounter their well-designed energy function always trapped into the local minimum. Enlightened by the genetics, in 1975 J. Holland put forward the genetic algorithm to find the satisfactory solution for that problem. This new approach simulates the evolution process and search for the better solution to update the genetics code. Evidences have showed it performs well in many kinds of application. Besides, other bionics examples such as the invention of radar also demonstrate that the field can reap benefits from outsiders' knowledge and experience. Shared with outside framework and skill, some innovation is likely to be worked out. As the society evolved into a complicated one, it's usually necessary to seek the solution through the amalgamation of all the subjects.

Nevertheless, some basic disciplines can advance remarkably all by themselves. In the eighteenth century, Riemann proposed a new concept into the mathematics realm - Riemannian Geometry. But his work didn’t achieve approve from his colleges, since many of them think this theory worth nothing. Riemann standed by the presure, and went on with this new domain, and finally explored a research area - non-Euclidean Geometry. Obviously, such basic field of study can proceed on a big step without outside force. So some theories can evolve free from the phenomenon of human observation, and external field can be helpful but unable to occupy the whole process.

As a matter of fact, the breakthrough from other fields may stimulate the elemental research to go forward further. Still take the Riemann example, all of the non-Euclidean Geometry would be of interest only to mathematics except for the intervention of a guy called Albert Einstein. He showed in his General Theory of Relativity that gravity has such an effect on everything around it that space is curved and obeys Riemannian Geomery. It means that Riemann's theory find its correspondence in the real world. That drives more and more researchers dive into the non-Euclidean Geometry ocean, and push this area toward a new epoch. Thus outsider advances are also helpful for the field's progress.

To sum up, both internal and external knowledge and experience are important for the disciplines' advances. Take full advantages of the two folds, our science will have a bright future.
你的观点跟我是一样的，但是我觉得你的表达很到位，例子也很好的支持了你的论据。有一点，我也觉得在一篇文章中用同一个例子会削弱论证，虽然一个例子可以从不同的侧重点来说。

还有想请教下，这些例子你都怎么记忆的，而且人名都那么难记？呵呵，谢谢先……

坚持就是胜利……

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