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题目：ISSUE26 - "Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."
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1,如果旧建筑的价值超过了新建筑的时候,应该保留
2如果新的建筑的需求和作用比旧的建筑大,旧建筑应该被拆除.
3还有一种解决方法就是改造旧的房屋以作它用.

In the epoch of rapid development, new buildings are mushrooming in this era because of people' large demands. However controversial question emerge when the old buildings encumber the construction of the new. In my point of view, to preserve the old or to destroy them for the new is a complicated and intricate question which depends on the value of the old and the necessity of the new.

To begin with, the old building with extraordinary value in culture or arts, which excesses the value of the new building to be constructed, should not be replaced by the new. As is known to all, architectures play an important role in preserve culture and individuality of one nation. An old building records much information about the past which is very important and precious for the study of the constructing skills, culture, and morality at that time. For instance, the pyramids in Egypt over 3000 years ago tell us much information about that time. They record the values on what populace in ancient Egypt thought about live and death, the mirage skills in constructing and the antique in it provides important data for research ancient culture. In this case, pyramids represent a whole history of the grand ancient Egypt which cannot be destroyed for other uses. Another example is the Forbidden City in Beijing, China. The Forbidden City is the relics of the Ming and Qing palace which preserve much information about the history. Due to the thoughts that the palace for empire should be in the center of Beijing and the palace cannot be visited by populace, the Forbidden City, which lies in the center, separates Beijing to two parts. The east and west part cannot connect well because populace is not allowed to cross the palace which leads to the detour. Even the palace cause so much troubles, Chinese still would break it down because it is a precious legacy that our ancestors leave for us.

To the contrary, if the old architect is not as important as the new buildings, giving precedence to modern development is an advisable and acceptable choice. For example the old building has fewer characteristics or there are many coeval building around meanwhile the new building is used for hospital or education which is emergent for residents. In these cases when the value of the new excesses the old, the old should be destroyed to make this area available for the new.

Nevertheless, is there a better choice for this dilemma when the old building is as important as the old? In my point of view, to redesign may be a solution. Destroy the old and construct a new one will cost much money. If we can redesign the old and adapt it to the new function, the preservation of the old and the emergent need for the new can be solved at one time. For example, the old baiyun airport, in Guangzhou city China, is deserted when the new one begins to serve. Considering this old airport witness the large development in this city, it would not be destroyed but be redesigned for new purose. Now its terminal tower is planned to be used for a market and other part would be used for several functions else after being renewed. In this case, both the value of the old and the need for are resolved perfectly meanwhile this method saves myriad money.

In sum, whether to preserve the old or to construct the new is a complex question which needs our deliberation. This issue should be treated specially rather than generally or in other word it is a case-by-case problem based on the value and consequence of each choice. Moreover, reconstructing the old building for new function is a new way out when it comes to the green and economy society.(不知道节约型社会是否这么翻译.....)

还有10天就要考了,这个水平够么?作文虽然是45min内完成,但是写之前思考了很久,不知道大家写限时作文是不是连想带写一共45min? 留链接必回拍哦!!!!!!!

谢谢大家了,我还有个问题就是,我的B3算不算走题了?因为B3的ts的意思好像没有包括在我的总的ts里面,即我第一段总的ts写的是"要不要拆取决于房子的重要性"而B3的ts却是"改造旧房子也是个不错的方法",有走题否?????????

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发表于 2007-8-9 16:57:06 |只看该作者

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发表于 2007-8-9 17:46:41 |只看该作者

帮顶下，俺也是练习者，搬个凳子听意见~~

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发表于 2007-8-10 10:55:05 |只看该作者

In the epoch of rapid development, new buildings are mushrooming in this era because of people' large demands（动词用得不错。后面Large demands太白话了。due to various increasing needs both in life and in economy）. However controversial question emerge(三单) when the old buildings encumber（不错） the construction of the new. In my point of view, to preserve the old or to destroy them for the new is a complicated and intricate question which depends on the value of the old and the necessity of the new.

To begin with, the old building with extraordinary value in culture or arts, which excesses the value of the new building to be constructed, should not be replaced by the new. As is known to all, architectures play an important role in preserve（ing） culture and individuality of one nation. An old building records much information about the past which is very important and precious for the study of the constructing skills, culture, and morality at that time. For instance, the pyramids in Egypt over 3000 years ago tell us much information about that time. They record the values on what populace in ancient Egypt thought about live and death, the mirage skills in constructing and the antique in it provides important data for research ancient culture.（金字塔又不是在城市里，和现代建筑没什么矛盾吧。不过这样举例也行，但不是太有说服力） In this case, pyramids represent a whole history of the grand ancient Egypt which cannot be destroyed for other uses. Another example is the Forbidden City in Beijing, China. The Forbidden City is the relics（保存得相当完好。把这个the relics of去掉） of the Ming and Qing palace which preserve much information about the history. Due to the thoughts that the palace for empire should be in the center of Beijing and the palace cannot be visited by populace, the Forbidden City, which lies in the center, separates Beijing to two parts. The east and west part cannot connect well because populace is not allowed to cross the palace which leads to the detour. Even the palace cause so much troubles, Chinese still would （not）break it down because it is a precious legacy that our ancestors leave for us.（论述得不错，语言也不错）

To the contrary, if the old architect（建筑师） is not as important as the new buildings, giving precedence to modern development is an advisable and acceptable choice. For example the old building has fewer characteristics or there are many coeval building around meanwhile the new building is used for hospital or education which is emergent for residents. In these cases when the value of the new excesses the old, the old should be destroyed to make this area available for the new.（可以写一写保护旧建筑的坏处，占地，是城市没有生气，浪费人力物力。此段没有well-developed）

Nevertheless, is there a better choice for this dilemma when the old building is as important as the old? In my point of view, to redesign may be a solution. Destroy the old and construct a new one will cost much money. If we can redesign the old and adapt it to the new function, the preservation of the old and the emergent need for the new can be solved at one time. For example, the old baiyun airport, in Guangzhou city China, is deserted when the new one begins to serve. Considering this old airport witness the large development in this city, it would not be destroyed but be redesigned for new purose. Now its terminal tower is planned to be used for a market and other part would be used for several functions else after being renewed. In this case, both the value of the old and the need for are resolved perfectly meanwhile this method saves myriad money. （意见挺新颖。）

In sum, whether to preserve the old or to construct the new is a complex question which needs our deliberation. This issue should be treated specially rather than generally or in other word it is a case-by-case problem based on the value and consequence of each choice. Moreover, reconstructing the old building for new function is a new way out when it comes to the green and economy society(conservation-oriented society 中国特色词汇最好不要有).

作者写得不错，应该能的4分以上。
我15号考，共同加油！

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发表于 2007-8-10 11:09:42 |只看该作者

十分感谢,
关于金子塔的例子,因为限时,写了一般发现不好,但没时间改了
关于B2没有develop的原因,我实在想不出有什么有名的旧建筑保护错了,希望达人指点

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发表于 2007-8-10 23:12:33 |只看该作者

首先谢谢你对我的作文的修改哈，现在我也来拍拍啦！

题目：ISSUE26 - "Most people would agree that buildings represent a valuable record of any society's past, but controversy arises when old buildings stand on ground that modern planners feel could be better used for modern purposes. In such situations, modern development should be given precedence over the preservation of historic buildings so that contemporary needs can be served."
字数：637 用时：00:45:00 日期：2007-8-8 22:39:51

1,如果旧建筑的价值超过了新建筑的时候,应该保留
2如果新的建筑的需求和作用比旧的建筑大,旧建筑应该被拆除.
3还有一种解决方法就是改造旧的房屋以作它用.

In the epoch of rapid development, new buildings are mushrooming in this era because of people' large demands. However controversial question emerge when the old buildings encumber the construction of the new. In my point of view, to preserve the old or to destroy them for the new is a complicated and intricate question which depends on the value of the old and the necessity of the new.（开头不错啊！用的词挺好的，理由简短又明确）

To begin with, the old building with extraordinary value in culture or arts, which excesses the value of the new building to be constructed, should not be replaced by the new. As is known to all, architectures play an important role in preserve culture and individuality of one nation. An old building records much information about the past which is very important and precious for the study of the constructing skills, culture, and morality at that time. For instance, the pyramids in Egypt over 3000 years ago tell us much information about that time. They record the values on what populace in ancient Egypt thought about live and death, the mirage skills in constructing and the antique in it provides important data for research ancient culture. In this case, pyramids represent a whole history of the grand ancient Egypt which cannot be destroyed for other uses. （我的观点是：金字塔的例子作为强调古建筑的重要性，还算是合适的，不过就是无法涉及题目中所指出的矛盾。我想如果稍微做一个假设，比如说某个金字塔挡住了某个将要修的高速公路或者什么之类的，我们也不能为了现在的利益而牺牲文化价值。个人意见，仅供参考哈！）Another example is the Forbidden City in Beijing, China. The Forbidden City is the relics of the Ming and Qing palace which preserve much information about the history. Due to the thoughts that the palace for empire should be in the center of Beijing and the palace cannot be visited by populace, the Forbidden City, which lies in the center, separates Beijing to two parts. The east and west part cannot connect well because populace is not allowed to cross the palace which leads to the detour. Even the palace cause so much troubles, Chinese still would break it down because it is a precious legacy that our ancestors leave for us.这里来一个小总结吧！

To the contrary, if the old architect？？？ is not as important as the new buildings, giving precedence to modern development is an advisable and acceptable choice. For example the old building has fewer characteristics or there are many coeval building around meanwhile the new building is used for hospital or education which is emergent for residents. In these cases when the value of the new excesses the old, the old should be destroyed to make this area available for the new.我觉得这个具体的例子可能比较难找，毕竟那些被改造的房子都是比较没有名气的，但是你把城市改造必然会拆掉一些没有多少价值的旧屋这个事实摆出来，应该还是可以比较有说服力的吧？否则城市改造不是没有可能了？甚至就说说你自己城市里面改造，把你熟悉的某些旧房子改造掉了，也可以说服别人。

Nevertheless, is there a better choice for this dilemma when the old building is as important as the old?（这里要修改一下吧？？） In my point of view, to redesign may be a solution. Destroy the old and construct a new one will cost much money. If we can redesign the old and adapt it to the new function, the preservation of the old and the emergent need for the new can be solved at one time. For example, the old baiyun airport, in Guangzhou city China, is deserted when the new one begins to serve. Considering this old airport witness the large development in this city, it would not be destroyed but be redesigned for new purose. Now its terminal tower is planned to be used for a market and other part would be used for several functions else after being renewed. In this case, both the value of the old and the need for are resolved perfectly meanwhile this method saves myriad money. （这段讲得还不错啦！）

In sum, whether to preserve the old or to construct the new is a complex question which needs our deliberation. This issue should be treated specially rather than generally or in other word it is a case-by-case problem based on the value and consequence of each choice. Moreover, reconstructing the old building for new function is a new way out when it comes to the green and economy society.(不知道怎么说就不要说呗，换一个句式，大家都可以理解的就可以啦。)

嗯，关于限时的问题，我目前的想法是如果能做到事先没有碰到过直接在45分钟内构思加写作是最好的啦，否则到时候要是遇到没有碰到的题目，还特别不熟悉的话，不是傻掉了？但是，如果你对每一个题目都有所构思的话，那就没关系了，不过这好像不太可能哦。

总的来说，我觉得这篇文章很不错啦，把第二个point充实一下问题就不大了，向你学习哦！

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