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发表于 2007-8-11 22:18:41 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

题目：ARGUMENT65 - The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.

"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
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Merely depending on the best-sellers in one new store last year and a survey from a magazine, the arguer claims that all of stores diverting the main stocking from imported cheeses to domestic ones. As it stands, this argument suffers several flaws as following.

  Firstly, the arguer cited the sales situation of a newest store in last year as the evidence that domestic cheeses were best-sellers. However, the most important problem is that best-sellers don’t necessarily result in profit maximization. The augur fails to provide the further cost-benefit analysis on these domestic cheeses so that we can imagine that maybe these products which were on a great discount were popular but cannot brought enormous profits.

  And we are not informed the sales situation in most other stores since the new one cannot be representative of all stores in different places. The best-sellers depend on purchase preference and life habits of consumes which might differ greatly from towns and districts. Perhaps in the district where the new store settles, residents, most of whom are the old, have a traditional preference in productivities and tend to consume domestic cheeses. While this is not necessarily the case in other districts where young people gather since most of them prefer imported cheeses with different tastes.

  Moreover, the argument unjustifiably rests on the result of a recent survey by a national magazine which shows that its subscribers prefer domestic cheeses than imported ones. However, do consumers have the same preference as subscribers? Since it is unlikely for ordinary consumers subscribe a magazine about cheeses, most of its subscribers are more likely to be expertise and workers in the realm of cheeses industry. Perhaps their preference is released from their own interests to advocate domestic productivity which ordinary consumers may be not agreed with.

  To sum up, the arguer draws a hasty suggestion that all of stores should stock domestic cheeses primarily to improve profit without investigating consumers' preference and needs in different places.

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argument65 0710G　＋U Aug小组第15次作业 coffee modified by gungun
题目：ARGUMENT65 - The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
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Merely depending on the best-sellers in one new store last year and a survey from a magazine, the arguer claims that all of stores diverting the main stocking from imported cheeses to domestic ones. As it stands, this argument suffers several flaws as following.第一段第一句就有批驳的意思，觉得有些不习惯
  Firstly, the arguer cited the sales situation of a newest store in last year as the evidence that domestic cheeses were best-sellers. However, the most important problem is that best-sellers don’t necessarily result in profit maximization. The augur fails to provide the further cost-benefit analysis on these domestic cheeses so that we can imagine that maybe these products which were on a great discount were popular but cannot brought enormous profits. 这个批驳的好，我居然没想到，学习了。但你这段偏题了，题目要写要不要进口商品，你写前5名是不是最大利益。你觉得呢
  And we are not informed the sales situation in most other stores since the new one cannot be representative of all stores in different places. The best-sellers depend on purchase preference and life habits of consumes which might differ greatly from towns and districts. Perhaps in the district where the new store settles, residents, most of whom are the old, have a traditional preference in productivities and tend to consume domestic cheeses. While this is not necessarily the case in other districts where young people gather since most of them prefer imported cheeses with different tastes. 这一段用来批驳NEW和城市，我觉得应该更清楚点分开说明2者可能更清晰
  Moreover, the argument unjustifiably rests on the result of a recent survey by a national magazine which shows that its subscribers prefer domestic cheeses than imported ones. However, do consumers have the same preference as subscribers? Since it is unlikely for ordinary consumers subscribe a magazine about cheeses, most of its subscribers are more likely to be expertise and workers in the realm of cheeses industry. Perhaps their preference is released from their own interests to advocate domestic productivity which ordinary consumers may be not agreed with.这一段批驳了那个SURVEY，我当时认为这个SURVEY是事实，不可以批驳的，可以讨论讨论
  To sum up, the arguer draws a hasty suggestion that all of stores should stock domestic cheeses primarily to improve profit without investigating consumers' preference and needs in different places.
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