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TOPIC: ISSUE129 - "Technology is a necessary but not always a positive force in modern life."
WORDS: 523 TIME: 00:45:00 DATE: 2008-2-28 22:37:46
As the technology has developed at a such (such a) fast speed, our lives also have largely change (been changed). Generally speaking, technology bring (brings) about many advantages to ours (our) life, while it also take negative aspects to human being. (首段简练,但TS的提出有点过于突然 )
Admittedly (admittedly好像更多用在平衡观点的末段吧), the highly development of technology is advantageous and necessary to human beings. It makes our lives become more and more convenient, for instance, the inventions of traffic instruments such as cars, airplanes, even magnet-trains, make people can arrive at any places in a very short time. And television, video, enrich people's life in a large degree. Especially since the wide use of computer and Internet all of the world, which makes people's life more convenient. Through operating computer, people can decrease the load of work because computer can help people to address with some complex data, complete some detaied (detailed) work, and etc,(through….because重复了语言要标准) which can give people more time to do other things. Internet, also brings many positive aspects to people's live and work. It makes people can have a good communication by the means of web telephone, Electronic mail,and so forth, no matter what places, what time they are. Even two people, one is in the west of the earth while another in the east, can communicate without the regulation of time and place. (这里最好有个put it in brief的总结)
However, besides the advantages technology give us, it also bring about many negative aspects to human beings. As the development of technology, it also influence the traditional moral ideas of human beings and creat many difficult problems to human beings. Take the example of Internet again, it also do many harm to people's life, too. The crimes of Internet, are done by such people who want to gain profits such as internet cheating and etc. And the expansion of computer virus across web, also take many harm to people’s life through destroying personal computer. We cannot guarantee that all of netizens can have a high moral standard, so such bad behaviors could not be banned fundamentally. Another example is the development of clone technology. Sientists have researched clone technology also have a success in animals. Although most of scientists suppose that it cannot be allowed to experiment in human, there are still a few scientists do. There are many examples like Internet, clone, from which we can see the negative influence technology give us. (bring about, give, advantage, development, take几个词用得太频繁了应时不时替换几个更准确到位的词比如negative aspects换成detrimental influence, deleterious impact啥的)
Technology (is)like a double-edged sword, if people can make good use (make good use of it), it can take many positive aspects; if cannot , the whole world will be destroyed. Face so many difficult problems, the society should consider a best way to solve. To governments, they should regulate related laws to regulate people's behavior . To human beings themselves, they should strengthen their moral standard . Especially to scientists, it is more important and necessary to strengthen their responsibility of not do bad things by using modern technology. In such condition, it can be believed that actions, which have harm to human ,will be avoided.
(tech 的好处坏处大家都会谈得很好 要想出彩就靠你的这段平衡观点了, 这段应在多下功夫写的圆润些)
In sum, it is certain that what technology brings to human, not only positive aspects, but also negative. If human beings can make good use of technology, it is sure that technology can make people's life better.
以上只是我的一点humble opinion 觉得你在练习时应该在保证语言准确 拼写正确的基础上提高速度,另外思路要顺畅不要重复陈述 毕竟有了思路就不愁字数了 |
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