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发表于 2008-4-15 21:18:57 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

有点生疏了，大家拍砖～

Although college years do play an important part in a man's natural life, i don't believe that it is so vital that can be called the best time.
First of all, college give us not just good memories but also bad ones. We have to stay up late worrying about our examinations, we have to get up early in the morning to do the morning exercises the school force us to do, we have to compete with others for scholarship really hard, etc. College is never haven. It is true that you are able to gain true friendship that can be very hard to find after entering the society, also right that the knowledge and skills you picked up in this period is vital in the career that you are to follow. In addition, one can probably find his or her true love on campus. Affection took place at this stage is somewhat purified. However, those beautiful things come at prices. Maturity sometimes kills the child inside your heart, you may never be as carefree as you used to be and you may start to beat around the clock just to struggle to live. Students are never adept to protect themselves against all the dagers out there, so they must pay a lot to learn the basic rules of the society. These learning processes are likely to take place in college, which is just one stop away from the society. Some of the training to be strong to face the obstacles are really painful. Secondly, besides college period, there are other choices on best times of the life. Whether it be a vivid childhood or a successfull career life is rather different for different people. The saying of the college years are the only best time of one's life is pretty vacant and cannot stand compared to people's colorful stories during other years. In considering this, I hold fast that there never exists the best time of man's natural life or every moment can be considered the best. You can not tell what the life is in store for us ahead, neither can you place according to importance the historic events of your own because they are equally important.
To sum up, one can never say that college life is the best part of his lifetime. Live everyday to the fullest, and they can all be titled the best.

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发表于 2008-4-19 00:00:21 |只看该作者

Although college years do play an important part in a man's natural life, i don't believe that it is so vital that can be called the best time.
First of all, college give (gives)us not just good memories but also bad ones. We have to stay up late worrying about our examinations, we have to get up early in the morning to do the morning exercises the school force us to do, we have to compete with others for scholarship really hard, etc. (是排比的话用；)College is never haven. It is true that you are able to gain true friendship that can be very hard to find after entering the society, also right that the knowledge and skills you picked up in this period is vital in the career that you are to follow. In addition, one can probably find his or her true love on campus. Affection（affectation） took place at this stage is somewhat purified. However, those beautiful things come at prices. Maturity sometimes kills the child inside your heart, you may never be as carefree as you used to be and you may start to beat around the clock just to struggle to live. Students are never adept to protect themselves against all the dagers （danger）out there, so they must pay a lot to learn the basic rules of the society. These learning processes are likely to take place in college, which is just one stop away from the society. Some of the training to be strong to face the obstacles are really painful. Secondly, besides college period, there are other choices on best times of the life. Whether it be a vivid childhood or a successfull career life is rather different for different people. The saying of the college years are the only best time of one's life is pretty vacant and cannot stand compared to people's colorful stories during other years. In considering this, I hold fast that there never exists the best time of man's natural life or every moment can be considered the best. You can not tell what the life is in store for us ahead, neither can you place according to importance the historic events of your own because they are equally important.
To sum up, one can never say that college life is the best part of his lifetime. Live everyday to the fullest, and they can all be titled the best.
建议中间部分分成几个小段，会更为清晰。However后面的结构有点乱，可以再理清下

不好意思，这么晚才抽空来看

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发表于 2008-4-19 19:59:58 |只看该作者

Although college years do play an important part in a man's natural life, i (I) don't believe that it is so vital that can be called the best time.
First of all, college give(gives) us not just good memories but also bad ones. We have to stay up late worrying about our examinations,（；） we have to get up early in the morning to do the morning exercises the school force us to do,（；） we have to compete with others for scholarship really hard, etc. College is never haven. It is true that you are able to gain true friendship that can be very hard to find after entering the society, also right that the knowledge and skills you picked up in this period is vital in the career that you are to follow.（这块说了很多坏处，我个人觉得最好一段一个坏处详细写，这段太笼统）

In addition, one can probably find his or her true love on campus. Affection(Affection) took place at this stage is somewhat purified. However, those beautiful things come at prices. Maturity sometimes kills the child inside your heart, you may never be as carefree as you used to be and you may start to beat around the clock just to struggle to live. Students are never adept to protect themselves against all the dagers（danger） out there, so they must pay a lot to learn the basic rules of the society. These learning processes are likely to take place in college, which is just one stop away from the society. Some of the training to be strong to face the obstacles are(is) really painful. Secondly, besides college period, there are other choices on best times of the life. Whether it be a vivid childhood or a successful(successful) career life is rather different for different people. The saying of the college years are the only best time of one's life is pretty vacant and cannot stand compared to people's colorful stories during other years. In considering this, I hold fast that there never exists the best time of man's natural life or every moment can be considered the best. You can not tell what the life is in store for us ahead, neither can you place according to importance the historic events of your own because they are equally important. (这段也是，前面说是初恋，后面说到生活，有点混乱。要理下)

To sum up, one can never say that college life is the best part of his lifetime. Live everyday to the fullest, and they can all be titled the best.
总体文章下来，最大的问题是结构，自己要再理下，建议一个理由一个段落，最好对这个理由进行深入，当然不能太笼统

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