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Do you agree or disagree the following statementthe college years are the best time in a person's life

      We go to college to gain professional knowledge, to determine what we are going to do in our future, to experience something we can not forget forever to grow up. It is indisputable that the college years are unforgetable and meaningful for everyone, because there are so much precious memory about teenage time which can still polish our lives during the whole lifetime. After pondering the question that the college years are the best time in a person’s life, I never remain suspicous the anwser to the question is absolutely yes. My point of view is based on the following evidence.



     To begin with, the study life in college is remarkable and wonderful. After choosing a interesting major, people begin their four-years life in college. Imagine you are in the amid of the knowledge about your favorate subject or profession and enjoy the happiness of learning these knowledge deeply. Learning can be a simple duty. Even to the the students who unfortunately did not pick their favorate majors, the academic atomsphere will make it is possible for them to begin to be insterested in their major. Life in college means learning accompanied with amazing rather than the repeated rythem day after day.



Moreover, the college years is a period which we get large amount of information and views of different backgrouds. Due to these different views, our own thoughts about our future form. And we start to think what we are going to say. Someone might questioned why making a decision can be the evidence of supporting my belief because people often get delimma or confused when they confront a decision. However, in my point of view, it is the first time we can bring our dreams to the reality, it is the first chance we can be the person we used want to be, it is the first time we can decide ourselves by our own thoughts independantly.



      At last but not least, during the college years, we become adult not only officailly but also in mental.Offically, We are aged enough to go to pub, date and engage. In mental, we start to experience some unforgetable events that enable us to grow up. For example, the first love in the college years is precious memory for most of people. Even though it often failed and people finally get hurt from it, it plays an important role in the course which is called grow up.


   


      Take account to above factors, the conclusion is obvious. The college years occupy an important portion of a whole lifetime, it has many precious memories which is worth to cherish for everyone. I fully convince the statement that the college years is the best time in a person’s life.



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发表于 2008-4-19 19:31:14 |只看该作者
We go to college to gain professional knowledge, to determine what we are going to do in our future无此说法 去掉our, to experience something we can not forget forever to grow up前面很好 加上最后一个不定式就烂了 一句话讲完了突然有个尾巴 很不爽. It is indisputable that the college years are unforgetable and meaningful for everyone, because there are so much precious memory about teenage不可能是teen 除非少年班 青年 time which can still polish our lives during the whole lifetime. After pondering the question后面应跟一个问题 whether从句 that从句表一种说法 和question不搭 that the college years are the best time in a person’s life, I never remain suspicous the anwser to the question is absolutely yes. My point of view is based on the following evidence.
开头还可以 观点出得有点晚 不过各人有各人的风格





     To begin with, the study life in college is remarkable and wonderful. After choosing a interesting major, people begin their four-year life in college. Imagine you are in the amid of the knowledge about your favorite subject or profession and enjoy the happiness of learning these知识不可数 knowledge deeply. Learning can be a simple duty. Even to the the students who unfortunately did not pick their favorate majors, the academic atomsphere will make it is possible for them to begin to be insterested in their major牵强的说法. Life in college means learning accompanied with amazing rather than the repeated rythem day after day.
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Moreover, the college years is a period which we get large amount of information and views of different backgrouds. Due to these different views, our own thoughts about our future form. And we start to think what we are going to say. Someone might questioned why making a decision can be the evidence of supporting my belief because people often get delimma拼写 or confused前面是个名词 这里又是个形容词 不搭 when they confront a decision面对一个决定?决定是定好了的 面对一个抉择还差不多. However, in my point of view, it is the first time we can bring our dreams to the reality, it is the first chance we can be the person we used want to be这里不好 试试其他说法, it is the first time we can decide ourselves by our own thoughts independantly注意句法 你要决定什么?决定我们自己   的 事.






      last but not least, during the college years, we become adult not only officailly but also in mental这个。。。首先前后不搭 第二,offically?没有这种说法吧.Offically, We are aged enough to go to pub, date and engage. In mental, we start to experience some unforgetable events that enable us to grow up. For example, the first love in the college years谁说初恋在大学的? is precious memory for most people. Even though it often failed 爱情是美好的 fail这个词没有文学意 试试其他的 bear no fruit 比如and people finally get hurt from it, it plays an important role in the course which is called growing up这个说法不好 用maturity.



   



      Take account the above factors, the conclusion is obvious. The college years occupy an important portion of a whole lifetime, it has many precious memories which is worth to cherish for everyone. I fully convince不对 请用被动语态 the statement that the college years is the best time in a person’s life.


建议:对于自己没把握的词请三思而用,部分说法中文看起来很对,在英文中很错。

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发表于 2008-4-19 19:45:20 |只看该作者
We go to college to gain professional knowledge, to determine what we are going to do in our future, to experience something we can not forget forever to grow up(这句话要改下,尽量不要重复2个不定式,改成并列伴随). It is indisputable that the college years are unforgetable(unforgettable) and meaningful for everyone, because there are so much precious memory about teenage time which can still polish our lives during the whole lifetime. After pondering the question that the college years are the best time in a person’s life, I never remain suspicous(suspicious) the anwser(answer) to the question is absolutely yes. My point of view is based on the following evidence.


     To begin with, the study life in college is remarkable and wonderful. After choosing a(an) interesting major, people begin their four-years life in college. Imagine you are in(at) the amid of the knowledge about your favorate(favorite) subject or profession and enjoy the happiness of learning(固定搭配有误obtaining) these knowledge deeply. Learning can be a simple duty. Even to the the students who unfortunately did not pick their favorate(favorite) majors, the academic atomsphere(atmosphere) will make it is possible for them to begin to be insterested(interested) in their major (gently). Life in college means learning accompanied with amazing rather than the repeated rythem(rhythm) day after day.(最好能举例说明)


Moreover, the college years is(are) a period which we get large amount of information and views of different backgrouds(backgrounds). Due to these different views, our own thoughts(缺个动词) about our future form(这个句子没动词). And we start to think what we are going to say. Someone might questioned why making a decision can be the evidence of supporting my belief because people often get delimma(这个词不知道应该是哪个单词,是想说犹豫的意思吗) or confused when they confront a decision. However, in my point of view, it is the first time we can bring our dreams to the reality, it is the first chance(choice) we can be the person we used want to be, it is the first time we can decide ourselves by our own thoughts independantly(independently).


      At last but not least, during the college years, we become adult not only officially(physically) but also in mental. Offically (physically), We are aged enough to go to pub, date and engage. In mental, we start to experience some unforgetable(unforgettable) events that enable us to grow up. For example, the first love in the college years is precious memory for most of people. Even though it often failed and people finally get hurt from it, it(which) plays an important role in the course which is called grow up.

   

      Take account to above factors, the conclusion is obvious. The college years occupy an important portion of a whole lifetime, it has many precious memories which is(are) worth to cherish for everyone. I fully convince the statement that the college years is(are) the best time in a person’s life.

注意一些固定搭配和单复数问题,ETS比较忌讳这些,写完后检查一下

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1-1 录得不清楚 请调整话筒 气息音太重 超时 有点乱 3pt
1-2 不错 条理清楚很多 不过注意句式变换 4pt
1-3 最后介绍下剧情先 4pt

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1 没什么问题 结尾处可能有点紧张有点不顺
2perfect
3 注意 job发音  没什么问题
语音语速语调都不错  结构也可以

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