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1# hellogt
TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively.
It is well known that where deficiency exists, improvement exists. (前后问逻辑跳跃,需要把skepticism如何引发improvement的关系需要讲一下)Accordingly, Skepticism and innovation can make our society go further. To cultivate students(后文主句是students.这是基本的从句错误) to embrace the kind of ability, students should be told to learn knowledge critically, not merely absorb passively.
As(as引导的是弱语气原因状语从句,表达双方都不言而喻的意思,这里显然不是) the purpose of science is to explore the unknown and propel the society forward, scientists equipped with Skepticism will enable their research to conform to it better. (这一句TS放在这里显然是强调purpose of science,而不是purpose of skepticism,句式需要改变以改变强调的中心)In consideration of the Newton's classic theory(这个名字也是错的,Newton's Laws of Motion), it has been regarded as the one closest to truth and is suitable for all materials.(语法没过关,问题比较多) However, Max Born, a physicist in Germany, dissented from it after proposing his basic assumption of quantum mechanics. As the development of quantum theory, physicists and chemists have found that those classic mechanics are not applicable in microcosmic world. Bohr is right! This story convinces us that even if the most classic theory may be not perfect as well, let alone others. As a matter of fact, there are many theories requiring us to complete them. (通篇未提到skepticism,只是用一种新理论代替旧理论罢了,如何能够体现出是通过skeptism而不是通过obervation或者counterevidence?)
When it comes to students, as the pillar of society in the near future, they should be equipped with the virtue-skepticism(这是什么?解释下比较好,不要只说它功能如何), which will enable them to discern the real from the unreal(这个我没有看出来,你是不是解释清楚一下), the true from the false and the surface from the internality(这个反了吧). (上文还在说virtue-skepticism,马上就跳到knowledge的来源了)The knowledge they have learned in class is based on the experience of our predecessors, some of which may consist of some flaws not been discovered. Therefore, it is necessary for the students to question what they have been imparted. By collecting references about the issues they face, they can gain a deep understanding of them.(这句话放在这里是何用意?和skeptical有一丝关联么?) In addition, having failed to get the result expected, they can resort to the professors(知识仅仅来源于professors么?). In this path to ultimate truth, they will have their critical and analytical thinking enhanced. as well as knowledge acquired. On the other hand, if the students can only absorb the knowledge passively, they will be close-minded and have no fresh ideas and the society will be at a standstill.(逻辑跳跃,解释清楚)
But it is not to say that students should bring skepticism to whatever they learn. As knowledge which they have learned is not sufficient and their way of thinking is not mature enough, to do so will really make them confused and usually, it is a waste of time.(这句论断需要更多的details和examples支撑) Those questions, such as why can water quench fire, can’t be explained clearly(lack of oxygen,怎么解释不清楚了...), for it is just natural phenomenon. In addition, having no restriction on questioning everything will have menace on the society.(仍然没有解释清楚) Thus, the skepticism is recommended only within certain scope.
In conclusion, students should be recommended to question what they have learned and not merely absorb the knowledge passively. It is beneficial for the improvement of our society, especially for science and technology. As we are in a society that information acquired more conveniently, if students fail to learn and accept it critically and selectively, they will probably lose their bearings on the sea of information and data. On the other hand, to avoid unnecessary problems, they should stick to the certain scope.
你的问题就是,文章的论述点很多,但是每一个点都论述的很不清楚,中间跳过的必备步骤太多了,导致论述乱而不准
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