[作文] 月底考试,求各位给看一下,最好帮忙指出缺点!! [复制链接]

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发表于 2010-8-18 17:35:22 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Schools should teach children some academic subjects which will be beneficial to their future careers. Therefore, other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

With the fierce competition in labour market, working-reletive standard of candidate becoming more and more complicated. When it comes to schooling strategy, there is a controversy concern the issue that whether the acadimic studying is more important than other basic teaching. In fact, what should stand in the way of estimate is a thorough accessment of what is actually beneficial for those future workers.
Obviously, it looks like those academic subject is very important for student’s working career, as it foster practical knowledge, nurther career planning strategy and even teach about experiences of adaptibility. But authorities ignore those basic study for instance music and sports will lead to an inevitable negative effects, since music and sports, for a students, are the fundamental to cultivate creativity nad imagenation.
As a matter of fact, basic science certainly has the potential to bring about great advances for individuals’ growing and development. Precisely, in long-term, the development of learning and cognitive ability is the determining factor in people’s life career. In other words, it is responsible for people’s self-improve in life time. Without it ,we can not make an adequate and efficient react when problem happened immediately, it also exert a significant influence when people facing ther choices of life. Accordingly, it’s determined that neither employer nor teacher can denied.
In addition, art cultivating helps student to understand the meaning of life and even the responsibility as a human being. Specifically, art learning borden horizon, enrich kenowledge and arose interest, as well as student are available to learn the meaning of teamspirit among sport games.Thus, in order to bring complicated and proper citizens in the future. We cannot give up the foster of music and sports.
Even through the employers always practical when to choose employees, but overall, schooling should take the responsibility of the development in long-term of every students. Consequently, school should carry on the teaching of “other subject”,for example music and sports.

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发表于 2010-8-18 22:21:35 |只看该作者

用词用句还是贴近学术风格的，但是段落结构就模糊了
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Reaching soul
As time pass
Hearing voice
On the magic cross
Creating interface
Through finger touch
Searching peace
In cyber space
Hunch is stylish
Above superficies
Life is synchronous
In between balance
It is for you …

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