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awintro范文分析:
结构、论证、逻辑
Issue
"In our time, specialists of all kinds are highly over-rated. We need more generalists — people who can provide broad perspectives."
Benchmark 6
In this era of rapid social and technological change(具体,点明背景) leading to increasing life complexity and psychological displacement, both positive and negative effects among persons(提示了行文思路从生活的复杂度和心理易位的角度来思考) in Western society call for a balance in which there are both specialists and generalists (主题明确:两者都需要). (第一段就一句,但已经满足了优秀主题句的3要点:1.观点明确2.具体3.提示行文思路)
Specialists are necessary in order to allow society as a whole to properly and usefully assimilate the masses of new information and knowledge that have come out of research and have been widely disseminated through mass global media.TS清楚表达作者观点,specialists是必要的。并且程度副词如as a whole, properly, usefully, 具体描述如come out of research…增加了观点的明确性和可信度。 As the head of Pharmacology at my university once said (and I paraphrase): "I can only research what I do because there are so many who have come before me to whom I can turn for basic knowledge. It is only because of each of the narrowly focussed individuals at each step that a full and true understanding of the complexities of life can be had. Each person can only hold enough knowledge to add one small rung to the ladder, but together we can climb to the moon." This illustrates前面举例,现在分析
the point that our societies level of knowledge and technology is at a stage in which there simply must be specialists in order for our society to take advantage of the information available to us. 结论句总结论证。
Simply put逻辑顺序标志词,表明这一段是上一段的简短解释, without specialists, our society would find itself bogged down in the Sargasso sea of information overload形象的比喻. While it was fine for early physicists to learn and understand the few laws and ideas that existed during their times, now, no one individual can possibly digest and assimilate all of the knowledge in any given area. 提出别人可能有的疑问:过去的科学家都很通才的。展示了全面的思维,增加了文章的深度。
On the other hand连接词,表明分论点的转变, over specialization means narrow focii in which people can lose the larger picture.TS明确表达作者观点,over specialization会让人们失去全面的眼光-就是讲specialization的缺点,而前一个分论点讲的是specialization的优点,有正有反,考虑全面。 No one can hope to understand the human body by only inspecting one's own toe-nails. 举例,一句短句,简单有效。What we learn from a narrow focus may be internally logically coherent but may be irrelevant or fallacious within the framework of a broader perspective.继续说理。 Further, if we inspect only our toe-nails, we may conclude that the whole body is hard and white.进一步分析前面的事例支持说理。 Useful conclusions and thus perhaps useful inventions must come by sharing among specialists.深入说明专才的局限性
Simply throwing out various discoveries means we have a pile of useless discoveries, it is only when one can make with them a mosaic that we can see that they may form a picture.
Not only may over-specialization be dangerous in terms of the truth, purity and cohesion of knowledge, but it can also serve to drown moral or universal issues. Not only…but also的结构承上启下,表明这里的分论点的转变为进一步阐述-over specialization除了对生活复杂度的影响,对人们的心理有什么样的影响-呼应了主题中的分析范畴,提升了深度;其中moral or universal表明了这段的论证角度是从道德和全球问题等大角度来思考的。Generalists and only generalists can see a broad enough picture to realize and introduce to the world the problems of the environment环境问题属于常识,没有详述,下面就开始了对事例的分析. With specialization, each person focusses on their research and their goals. Thus, industrialization, expansion, and new technologies are driven ahead. Meanwhile no individual can see the wholisitc view of our global existence in which true advancement may mean stifling individual specialists for the greater good of all. 虽然例子举得是很老套的工业和环境对立的事例,但是表达很简洁,也很贴合TS。
Finally逻辑顺序标志词,很好的表明了这是最后一个分论点, over-specialization in a people's daily lives and jobs具体化 has meant personal and psychological compartmentalization呼应首段,daily lives and jobs表明这段的论证角度是从人们的生活细节角度来思考的.明确表明分论点 People are forced into pigeon holes early in life (at least by university) and must consciously attempt to consume external forms of stimuli and information in order not to be lost in their small and isolated universe. 以上举例,以下分析。Not only does this make for narrowly focussed and generally poorly-educated individuals, but it guarantees a sense of loss of community, often followed by a feeling of psychological displacement and personal dissatisfaction.
Without generalists, society becomes inward-looking and eventually inefficient. Without a society that recognizes the importance of broad-mindedness and fora for sharing generalities, individuals become isolated. Thus, 和without联系,前面是原因,现在是结果while our form of society necessitates specialists, generalists are equally important. Specialists drive us forward in a series of thrusts while generalists make sure we are still on the jousting field and know what the stakes are. 形象的比喻进一步总结,升华作者观点。
整篇文章的结构是
平衡观点
专才很重要
简单重复解释专才很重要
过专业化会让人们失去全面的眼光,影响真实的理解
过专业化会造成道德和社会的问题
过专业化会影响人们生活细节问题
总结平衡观点
逻辑顺序是:总(平衡观点)分(好+不好),分再分(事例到概念+大范围到小范围)。这样的逻辑缜密,全面且细节化。
这篇文章里段落内部连接,利用重复进行连接很少,基本每一句就提到了一个更新、更深层次的说理或论据。
每一个分论点都深入的进行了挖掘,体现这篇文章的特点:分析再分析。对事例的描述很少,重在分析。
Benchmark 5
Specialists are not overrated today. More generalists may be needed, but not to overshadow the specialists.总论点 Generalists can provide a great deal of information on many topics of interest with a broad range of ideas. People who look at the overall view of things can help with some of the large problems our society faces today. But specialists are necessary to gain a better understanding of more in depth methods to solve problems or fixing things. 以上相当于给generalist和specialist定义,仅仅是将总论点重述一遍、没有深入,且该定义也属于对大家的常识的多余解释,可以省去。
One good example of why specialists are not overrated is in the medical field. 分论点1,按领域划分。Doctors are necessary for people to live healthy lives. When a person is sick, he may go to a general practitioner to find out the cause of his problems. Usually, this kind of "generalized" doctor和上一句紧密联系,为进一步解释-举例之后有论证,让事例发挥作用。
can help most ailments with simple and effective treatments. Sometimes, though, 转折观点,引出specialist。a sickness may go beyond a family doctor's knowledge or the prescribed treatments don't work the way they should. When a sickness progresses or becomes diagnosed as a disease that requires more care than a family doctor can provide, he may be referred to a specialist. 以上为说理,以下举例支持观点-说理后举例,让说理有据可依,不空洞。For instance, a person with constant breathing problems that require hospitalization may be suggested to visit an asthma specialist. Since a family doctor has a great deal of knowledge of medicine, he can decide when his methods are not effective and the patient needs to see someone who knows more about the specific problem; someone who knows how it begins, progresses, and specified treatments.对事例中的逻辑进行进一步说明-为什么通才看不了的病可以找专才。 This is an excellent example of how a generalized person may not be equipped enough to handle something as well as a specialized one can. 最后总结,进一步指出通才不能取代专才因为通才在某些事实上不如专才。
Another example of a specialist who is needed instead of a generalist involves teaching. 分论点2,按领域划分,表明为并列结构。In grammar school, children learn all the basic principles of reading, writing, and arithematic. But as children get older and progress in school, they gain a better understanding of the language and mathematical processes. As the years in school increase,按时间顺序发展。 they need to learn more and more specifics and details about various subjects. They start out by learning basic math concepts such as addition, subtraction, division, and multiplication. 将举例,说理具体化,即举例,以下也如此。A few years later, they are ready to begin algebraic concepts, geometry, and calculus对于上文中的specifics. They are also ready to learn more advanced vocabulary, the principles of how all life is composed and how it functions对应上文中的various subjects,举例很全面,前后呼应很好. One teacher or professor下面的分析改从作用角度 cannot provide as much in depth discussion on all of these topics as well as one who has learned the specifics and studied mainly to know everything that is currently known about one of these subjects. Generalized teachers are required to begin molding students at a very early age so they can get ready for the future ahead of them in gaining more facts about the basic subjects and finding out new facts on the old ones. 继续回到进一步说理上。
文章观点明确,论证深入。说理和事例结合的很好,每一句说理都有事例支持,每一个事例都进行了分析。没有独立说理和举例,论证过程两者穿插使用,使得论证一步步深入,显得很流畅。
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