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29”Public figures such as actors, politicians, and athletes should expect people to be interested in their private lives. When they seek a public role, they should expect that they will lose at least some of their privacy”.
Public figures, from actors to athletes, from executives of multinational companies to government officers, are always in the spotlight of media. The daily behaviors and personal experience of these celebrities, every so often, are hot topics of common people. 开头改写很不错,不过可以考虑两句合一句,更简洁一些Unfortunately, if he or she would like to play a public role, it is impossible for the notable person to hide his or her privacy completely behind a curtain in such a society that media has covered everywhere in the world这里的world和前面的society是不是有点乱套了? and reporters感觉是不是journalist好点 may appear anywhere at any time.
开头段不错的
The interest of populace on interest和in连用,另外可以不用of,用's。 a man of mark不知道你想说什么,戴面具的人?那应该是man with mark is the majormain好点 force that makes his privacy exposure应该是exposed. As is well known我印象中应该是as it is well known或者as well known,谁确认一下, media is a bridge connecting populace toand famous peoplecelebrities好点, and the purpose of media is to report what people care forcare for是关怀、照顾;关心用care about或者concern. So media would fulfill这个词用法不对,体会一下。一般完成自己的目标什么叫fulfill,满足需要用satisfy its reader’s媒体的对象不一定就是读者,应该是大众,用mass吧 needs and curiosity by all means. 和后一句可以衔接起来,用个状语by finding out...In order to find out the public figure’s privacy, they would tail after celebrities, take photos furtively or even spy their houses感觉用life生活要准确些 with helicopter. As a result, it is safe to say that almost every star could havecould have的意思是“本应该可以” faced such a dilemma that their privacy was the headline on a local newspaper.
这段论述了因为各种原因,名人肯定会被暴露隐私
Diana, the princess of England, who has gained respect from all over the world was digged out to have a lover by the all-mighty media and finally became the victim of her fame. Michel Jordan, the god of basketball game and a good exemplar of youngsters, loves gambling very much. What is more, he always dislikes to pay down. All these scandals should have been hidden if it had not been the media’s intrusion into the basketball genius’s private life. In fact, no public figure can entirely escape the lure of fame and its promise of admiration and respect, but there is a heavy price one must pay forpay for sth/pay money/price for sth; not pay for pirce it-that is the loss of privacy.
这段举例说明做名人就要付出丢失隐私的代价
In contradiction withto above occasions, some stars intendedly let out some of their privacy to promote their repute and provoke fans’ percussion. For example, Victoria, the member of former “spicy girl”, a popular pop musical team, is the wife of another big shot Beckhame, the captain of England national soccer squad. The husband enchants numerous soccer fans from the whole world by virtue of his super skills, while the wife draws attentions of populace through disclosing some intimacy of the couple. Obviously, the spicy girl knows exactly that privacy explosion could buy her fame when other celebrities are fighting with defending their personal life.
这段从另一个方面说泄露隐私也可成为名人扩大知名度的一个手段。例子很有意思,但是不知道国外是不是这样评价,另外,但愿阅卷的不是个小贝拉妹迷,哈哈
No matter for or against his will, a public figure is doomed to sharing his private life with the public when they are enjoying the fame brought honor and happiness.
总结比较简单。
总的来说,我觉得这篇文章还是不错的。观点也比较明确、全面,例子也很恰当。作者对句子的掌握是好的,但是长了以后还是要注意搭配啊、语法啊什么的。最好能长短句搭配用。
不错不错。 |
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