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发表于 2012-1-27 21:56:37 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both and give your opinion.


In recent years, a great emphasis has been placed on the topic of how to educate the next generation effectively and correctly. It is a hightly debatable issue whether giving children more awareness of competition or teaching them cooperation being more important than compete each other.

Those who claim that to children, competition encouragement may be very useful with which to live, because sooner or later, little kids would step into society and be challenged by other competitors. But this kind of perception will presumbly make children less likely unwilling to work with colleagues later, they may treat others as enemies instead. By comparison, those who have recieved parents' direction as being cooperative mostly perform outstanding in their career paths. They tend to be more open, which is a very important factor in professional work field, as well as offering them an advantage in terms of dealing with the social communication in the future.

Nonetheless,there are certainly shortages in emphasizing the importance of cooperation. Children may think that competition is a potential danger to get along well with their counterparts, which would probably hinder their innovative ideas. Sometimes some kids tend to drown their own thoughts in order to keep the friendly atmosphere. But generally I think this is less likely in most cases, because when children are involved in a teamwork, an unconscious positive awareness of competition will motivate them to challenge other members.

My view is that children need to be taught to cooperate instead of compete. This is a better way for them to effectively learn skills of studying , working, and communicatiing. Children with such a perspective usually do very well in their own areas, they know deeply the approach of cooperating and they learn how to compete from it.
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发表于 2012-1-29 07:23:43 |只看该作者
套考官的句型还挺有才滴,呵呵。
起段没套好

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发表于 2012-1-29 15:30:12 |只看该作者
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厉害。。。一眼就看出来了, 确实。  起段是用的别的作文书里的模板, 你觉得不合理么?

借你吉言了,我只要作文上6就够了。。。。。。当然越高越好

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发表于 2012-1-29 17:24:04 |只看该作者
单词量不一样的人怎么在一起

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据说 被看出来是模板的话就是5分诶
所有的捷径都是弯路

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发表于 2012-1-30 18:15:19 |只看该作者
这位烤鸭的模版套写还是比较高级的
不是完全的抄句子
注意上下文逻辑就不会出问题
再说,这是官方的思路
怎能说自己剑桥的思路不好呢?
所谓模版,就是非官方滴那些东东
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