sun3may托福作文练习

beangtUID：2691375

3.2自选题目
Do you agree with the following statement? Government should more support art museum and music performance than recreational facilities, such as swimming pool or play ground.

When it comes to the issue that the government should offer more subsidies to the art, including the art museum and the music concert, instead of spending a large sum of money just on the creation of new facilities. As far as I am known (concerned), they are equally essential to advance the development of art and to build the new facilities that would bring benefits to the citizens.

The first factor coming into my mind is that the support for art is in need nowadays. Take the city I live for instance, which is the capital of Hubei province, few art centers like art museums and painting galleries locate in some blocks where are much inconvenient to reach (我感觉这句话写的有点问题，但不知道怎么改). As a result, the government is supposed to build more museums for the sake of the citizens' interests in art, such as the opera, rock and roll, and the painting.

To back up my argument, it is relevant （？） to conclude that some facilities which are of necessity could assist to advance people's health, such as the play grounds or gyms. As one saying goes, taking practice one hour per day is beneficial to build a strong body and exalted mind. Since presently, the most crucial problem of human is obesity, a series of new facilities that could supply the citizens with adequate room to training (train) their body, and to lead a healthier life without the disturbance from the annoying fat in the heavy body.

Adding more credibility to my points of view is that due to the equal importance to support the art and create new facilities to improve the level of people's health, the government should determine to develop both art centers and new facilities. To plus, the specific situation of different cities should be taken into account when the government makes plans. Some cities lack of art museums which supplies access for the citizens to have a glance on the latest art forms. On the contrary, some cities should have more stadiums where the citizens could taking exercised in. Actually, a majority of cities in our country have a scarcity on both art museum and sports centers.

In summary, I strongly believe that since the elegant sorts of art and a healthy body are all (both) indispensable in our life, according to the specific situations, the government would restore and offer more support to the art museums, meanwhile, the creation plans of the facilities for sports should be included in the schedule.
结构非常好，语言也很流畅，不足之处是感觉有些段落展开欠充分。

sun3mayUID：2574771

3.2独立~
还有综合~（综合感觉没太听懂，于是半编半凑的写了一篇~囧。）
辛苦修改的同学了！

candis712UID：2824089

3.1综合修改

beangtUID：2691375

3.1综合修改
The lecture strongly disapproves of the points presented in the reading. As the profeessor demonstrated, it is not easy and preferable to replace the internal combustion engines with the fuel-cell ones. However, contending an opposite stand, the reading holds that it is convenient and practical to put the fuel-cell engines based on the use of hydrogen.

The first factor that the lecture disagrees with the reading is that pure hydrogen is difficult to produce, due to the complex process of the purification. Though the water could be easily found and collected, the hydrogen is hard to be steamed from water. On the contrary, the reading believes that since the water and natural gas which are sources to produce hydrogen are available, it is much of convenience to gain a plenty of hydrogen.
还有一点说液氢不容易运输，保存什么的
Another factor that the professor uses to cast doubt to the author is that the utilization of the

hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines would fail to solve the problem that pollutions rendering by cars, because the process of making hydrogen, especially the liquid hydrogen would generate much carbon-dioxide which is harmful to the environment. This is not compatible with the reading which believes that by the using of the new fuel-cell engine, the pollution from the car would be reduced, thanks to the only byproduct of the new kind of engine that could never contaminate the air.

The lecture also claims that the use of the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engines could pale in cut down the cost on cars. In fact, this new sort of engine is expensive due to the difficulty during the production, which is totally run a counter to the reading that holds that the higher efficiency of the new engine would help us save money spent on our cars.
重点的那个细节，铂的那个没听到

可能还是需要提高听力吧，我觉得没有特别大的必要每段都带上阅读的许多内容，语言还是非常好的。

sun3mayUID：2574771

62# bibby00888

谢谢了！

bibby00888UID：2908529

帮你批了 虽然不是一个组的

Go2011GoUID：3006241

59# sun3may 有点晚，不好意思哈～～权限不够，只能贴上面了（没有附件的权限）

We usually treat our friends as thetreasure in the life. Consequently, when we leave them, total sorrow and griefmaybe bring us down for a period of time. However, it is not a terrible ornegative thing to leave our friends and to start a new brand life [brand new]in a new city or in even other countries, since we should  determine （whether?）the move to other places couldbring us more benefits than negative effects according to the specificsituation. That is to say, everyone owning different characteristicshave various choices.(逻辑有点奇怪)


The first factor coming into my mind isthat though we would have to leave our old friends or even  them, becauseof the leaving for other places, it is still possible that we couldlosing make newpersons (friends)in the new place. Take me for an instance, in my eight, my families (family)andI had to move from a city when I was born to another city called Qingdao whereI had not any(no) knowledge at all. Unfortunately, after my coming to Qingdao, myold friends living in another city almost lose(时态) connection with me. On thecontrary, in the new block I moved into, a crowd of new friends have been madeby me, offering me the gentle assistance to let me quickly feel comfortable andget accustomed to the new environment. In sum, moving to another place to liveis not negative, due to the new friend there.



To back up my argument, it is relevant toinclude that even after the move, we still could keep in touch with our oldfriends in the （in other cities） other cities, with sort of complement of communication. Thanksto the advance in the communication technology, we are capable to acquire thelatest news of our friends, no matter where they are dwelled in. With the helpfrom our telephone, computer connected to the Internet, we could readily keepin touch with our friends, and trace their thinking and acting. In fact, some3G telephone could make the conversation face to face in a long distance intoreality.


Adding more credibility to my points ofview is that the criteria to determine the immigration from one place toanother is successful or not is that the situation of a person, including hisor her characteristics are feasible for a move or not. On one hand, some peopleare prone to another place to begin a new life for their characteristics thatmake them persons(不明白这句) who may quickly adapt to the different cultural and naturalenvironment. On the other hand, some people do not incline to get involved invirtually unfamiliar environment. As a result, we could not decide a move isgood or bad not according to whether we lose our friends, in fact, in such a（an）information age, friendship could be hold even though 。。。. Instead, our characteristics talkswhen it comes to the issue that moving to other places is beneficial or not.


In conclusion, it is not that harmful tomove to another city or country for a new life. Indeed, we could make newfriends there, and with the appliance of the advanced complement of communication,it is still possible to talk to our old friends sharing our feelings to (with) them at anytime we desire. To plus, for everyone's different situation, whether the moveto another place is preferable or not depends on the specific characteristicsof a person.


写的挺好的，字数很多啊～～

sun3mayUID：2574771

3.1综合~

改的同学辛苦啦！

sun3mayUID：2574771

2.28独立
交作业啦！这次还是超时。。。要把时间一定憋过来~

bibby00888UID：2908529

2.24修改意见

sun3mayUID：2574771

2.24独立~ 辛苦修改的同学了！
（努力着不超时。。。）

hdchangieUID：2402936

改好了哈~

sun3mayUID：2574771

2.23独立
突然发现这篇写过。
辛苦修改的同学！

beangtUID：2691375

2.22综合修改

feifeionlyUID：2778967

藕来鸟！加油这次作业完成得不错