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[a习作temp] argument37 刚刚完成的,限时,字数有点少啊 [复制链接]

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发表于 2005-8-5 10:00:40 |只看该作者 |正序浏览
用时:29min45s 写完以后改了2处拼写错误,一处语法错误,下面的就看各位给狠狠的拍了,千万不要留情啊;如果要互拍, 留下连接,一定回拍,不过我每次都拍的很狠的,考前来拍者要慎重啊,呵呵!


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The argument concludes that the mid-six century's cooling was probably due to a volcanic eruption. However, the argument is fundamentally based on scant evidence and flawed reasoning that lead to the unconvincing conclusion as discussed below.

First, a dimming of the sun and extremely cold temperatures in Asia and Europe do not prove that the Earth became significantly cooler in that time. Perhaps, other places do not have extremely cold temperature.

Secondly, even assuming that Earth experiences a cooler temperature in that time, the arguer falsely considers the possible reasons for the cooler temperature was only the volcanic eruption or a large meteorite colliding.

Thirdly, even if it is due to the above two reasons, the arguer falsely reason that it is due to a volcanic eruption rather than a large meteorite colliding. The arguer indicates that if it is caused by meteorite colliding, there should be a sudden bright flash of light and no extant historical records of the time mention such a flash. Yet, it is possible that the records have been destroyed or disappeared for other reasons. Or the colliding may happen in a remote area without any people, such as large deserts, or in the poles of Earth.

Fourthly, the arguer bases on the record of a loud boom in Asian, which is occasionally consistent with a volcanic eruption to support the conclusion. However, the arguer fails to establish a cause and effect relationship between them.

Last but not least, even if there are a volcanic eruption, it does not mean a volcanic eruption causes the extremely cool temperature of Earth in that time.
In sum, the argument is not thoroughly well supported as it stands. To bolster the argument, the arguer must provide better and further evidence that only the two possible reasons for the extremely cool temperature and that there is not other possible reasons.

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发表于 2005-8-5 15:21:46 |只看该作者

大伙的意见呢

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发表于 2005-8-5 15:20:13 |只看该作者

终于发现了

这样的写法不行啊,宁可少攻击几点也比每点都没有数透的强啊

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发表于 2005-8-5 12:10:24 |只看该作者

没人该啊,自己顶一个先

其实这篇最大的毛病应该是论证不充分,可我为什么时间不够啊?恳请 大虾请指教,如何提高速度啊?

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