Issue55 第一篇文章,文筆不好,請指教

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Issue55 Competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education
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看見寄托的人文章很好..努力學習中,第一篇文,用了3小時,請狠狠批
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I must say that I reject this statement. While it is true that how to improve the quality of learning without competition, that does not in any way mean that we need to entirely cancel any exam for improving the quality of learning. Does that mean that we should follow new statement and make do? No, I don’t think so. To so would be tantamount to change a whole of educational condition in today’s society? I think more students would reject that.

In modern society, competition always accompanies us in lives. Besides learning in school, we would also find in work and love relationship. We may hear that competition can indeed make the world more improvement. Moreover, it as a catalytic can pervade our heart and wake me up to never stop in that time because of competition. Competition seems a river that, if you stay here, subsequently, you would be instantly flowed. It is a constant of current law. Although heating competition for high grades may arouse extremely mental and psychological stress for students, we can regard as it is impetus of power in life. Without competition, we may have a comfortable life but no a wonderful life. Personally, it is necessary for competition to exist.

From statement above, we know competition must need in society. But aside from those, how about the school in competition of problems is? For example, to study high school, my class was more competition but my classmate didn’t think that competition was a vicious circle. They said competition condition can enhance our friend relationship and even change the quality of learning. We recognized along ourselves to be competitors; Meanwhile, we could be helpful us to learn each other. It is quite more effective than studying alone. In the result, we take advancing in learning with classmates as competitor that competition.

To mention about quality of learning. Why do any people usually think to reduce quality of learning because of competition? Recently, lots of news, we can see that many reports indicate quality of learning gradually decrease. No matter where and what grade, including graduated students and high school had appeared in the time. In my opinion, educational funds from government were decreasing in many nations and major factor leads quality of learning to reduce.

To sum up, although many people think that competition for high grades seriously limits the quality of learning at all levels of education. If a society is to thrive, it must put emphasis on development of competition. I am certainly competition to be one kind of method to maintain society of growth.(432)

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