十月金秋第四次作业

fss528UID: 2259545

今天有实习任务,忙活了一天.刚把作业赶完,久等了.文章比较粗糙,请指教.
写作：作文Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Use reasons and specific examples to support our answer.口语
A foreign visitor has only one day to spend in your country. Where should this visitor go on that day? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

作文
I have always found that when mention the hard times in the past, most people hold the view of cherishing them instead of saying badly about that. It implies a phenomenon that most experience, which we thought to be difficult at the time, might be pretty useful later in our lives, and then become valuable lessons in the future.

First of all, those rough times can test the willpower of people. Nowadays, the people who can knock the door of success, are no longer those who have smart heads. They are also called for the characteristic of strong-minded. On the way to success, everyone has to face a great number of difficulties, particularly in the modern times now. On the contrary, those who are afraid of hard experience are always eliminated in this terribly competitive world. So one must have the charm to keep his/her idea and do not fear of difficulties and failures. Here are plenty of examples who have the strong willpower and achieve success finally. Ma Yun, the  CEO of the biggest B2B company Alibaba had failed 3 times during his career, but he never gave up. At the start of this company, he didn’t have enough capital, labor and experience. He even only had a small department room as the work office for all his 18 workers. But it is because his insight and strong will that made his company successful finally.

Furthermore. people gain some valuable experiences and knowledge from the difficult times. It just like only those who once fell ill can know better about the patients, and cherish the lives more from then on. Take the generation of our parents for instance. Most of them keep austere lives. One of the reasons is that they have experienced the rough time during 1960s, during which a great natural catastrophe happened. They could hardly have enough food or water then. So they keep such kind of life style.

Meanwhile, different people have different measurement of the hard times. So not all terrible experiences are meaningful for one’s development. For example, a criminal who is pity for his/her guilty may thought of the past as rough time. The regret might be useful. But the bad experience does have no good for his/her development.

To sum up, most of those difficult experiences can really teach people a lot. So we should not miss every chance to gain knowledge from them no matter how terrible memories they might be.  




口语
I would like to recommend Jinan City to the foreign guest. Firstly, it is my home town, I am very familiar with even very corner in this city. Further more, Jinan is an old city which has a long history. There are a great amount of great interests. The visitor can learn a piece of history of China through the visit in Jinan. Also Jinan is famous for its springs, it has won an alias called “the spring city”. The enchanting 72 well-known springs do attract millions visitors all over the world, especially the most famous Baotu Spring. And the people here are very hospitable. Finally, Jinan is not as large as Beijing and has an advanced traffic system, so  the visitor can see around the city freely in the one day limitation.

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I have always found that when mention the hard times in the past, most people hold the view of cherishing them instead of saying badly about that. It implies a phenomenon that most experience, which we thought to be difficult at the time, might be pretty useful later in our lives, and then become valuable lessons in the future.

First of all, those rough times can test the willpower of people. Nowadays, the people who can knock the door of success, are no longer those who have smart heads. They are also called for the characteristic of strong-minded. On the way to success, everyone has to face a great number of difficulties, particularly in the modern times now. On the contrary, those who are afraid of hard experience are always eliminated in this terribly competitive world. So one must have the charm to keep his/her idea and do not fear of difficulties and failures. Here are plenty of examples who have the strong willpower and achieve success finally. Ma Yun, the  CEO of the biggest B2B company Alibaba had failed 3 times during his career, but he never gave up. At the start of this company, he didn’t have enough capital, labor and experience. He even only had a small department room as the work office for all his 18 workers. But it is because his insight and strong will that made his company successful finally.

Furthermore. people gain some valuable experiences and knowledge from the difficult times. It is just like only those who once fell ill can know better about the patients, and cherish the lives more from then on. Take the generation of our parents for instance. Most of them keep austere lives. One of the reasons is that they have experienced the rough time during 1960s, during which a great natural catastrophe happened. They could hardly have enough food or water then. So they keep such kind of life style.

Meanwhile, different people have different measurements of the hard times. No matter how terrible the experiences are, most of they are somewhat meaningful for one’s development, even a criminal can learns a lot from his so-called hard times. A criminal who is pity for his/her guilty may thought of the past as rough time. The regret of the bad experience is truly good for his/her development later in his/her life.

To sum up, most of those difficult experiences can really teach people a lot. So we should not miss every chance to gain knowledge from them no matter how terrible memories they might be. It just like someone says. we might have a lot of unhappy experience in the whole life, please do not desperate about that, because someday they might be great treasure.

glxingUID: 2156425

我觉得写g作文很有利于提高自己的逻辑性，现在托福的其他项目开始复习了吗？如果开始了，不妨贴出来，大家共同监督

fss528UID: 2259545

呵呵,多谢两位高人给出的意见.写G作文走火入魔了,老想问题的两面性....呵呵.一定及时改正!

liyuxin217UID: 2348915

哥们,把你的作文仔细读了三遍,感觉写的太好了,小弟自愧不如啊!
我感觉你的语法很好,没有语法毛病,就是觉的第三个REASON牵强了点,结尾草率了点 前面也的比较PERFECT
口语写的也不错,内容稍微多了点,不知道能完成不!

ensueUID: 2196590

Well done!
一点小建议：倒数第二节，谈criminal的。我想那个experience也可以是meaningful的，只要criminal改过自新。我想从正面谈，看起来更积极一些。