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TOPIC: ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."

When people come across some tough troubles, they may say "there is no choice". For most of all, the truth is that even if the goal we set has got far beyond our ability, we still have a choice. Therefore, I quite agree with the speaker's view that the absence of choice is a rare circumstance.

Admittedly, there are some times when we cannot change and don't have a choice. The gender of people cannot be decided by us, which is naturally random selection. Though some countries pay more attention to boys for they will become main labors after they grow up, the average gender rate is generally 1:1 for this term is not a simple problem of choice. Otherwise, the society and period in which we live cannot be determined by our subjective sense. Hence, there is no choice for us when we stand in front of the naturally spontaneous events.

However, apart from the special events mentioned above, we have choices at most circumstances. While a great many people claim that everything is over and there is no way for them, we should sit down calmly and make a further analysis why people have such a thought. As far as I am concerned, people have two different reactions in front of difficulties and have different ideas about choice.

First of all, some people give up choices. When people pursue their dreams and undertake an arduous journey but they finally come to reality that the dreams are somehow beyond them gradually. Then some of them change their mind and even doubt themselves whether it is the right way they should take. Some people cannot endure the cruel result and become extremely crazy and go astray. In their mind, it seems that every effort is vain. In fact, they haven’t made a smart choice but give up directly before they do so. If they look back, they can find they have promoted themselves in more ways than one. Maybe the dream is little far currently, but if they move on they could find what they want. Hence, never give up, you have choices.

Secondly, some people cannot discover a choice when the complex matters confuse them. There are times when we find that we are trapped in a large stack of problems. Taking myself for example, when I design my experiment, I cannot figure out the last one step for some factors such as lack of time, lack of high-resolved experimental detective device. It seems that my plan has met its end. In fact, despite so many troubles, I can set down them one by one. The last step can be divided into three or more smaller substeps then they can be carried out simultaneously which can effectively save time, and the device can be replaced by another one which can give a satisfying result. Hence, when facing a complicated matter, the most useful choice is to solve them step by step.

Actually, when people with different backgrounds face challenges, they have different attitudes towards them. Some of them have positive attitudes then they can find many choices. Others show depressed emotion, thinking that the fate is unchangeable and there is no choice for them. Therefore, everyone has choices even if he has nothing, at least he can choose to lead a simple life rather than end his life.

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本帖最后由 hdsf2003 于 2009-7-24 14:36 编辑

TOPIC: ISSUE136 - "The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare."

When people come across some tough troubles, they may say "there is no choice". For most of all, the truth is that even if the goal we set has got far beyond our ability, we still have a choice. Therefore, I quite agree with the speaker's view that the absence of choice is a rare circumstance.

Admittedly, there are some times when we cannot change and don't have a choice. The gender of people cannot be decided by us, which is naturally random selection. Though some countries pay more attention to boys for they will become main labors after they grow up, the average gender rate is generally 1:1 for this term is not a simple problem of choice. Otherwise(这个词什么意思啊，，，表示转折么？否则，我们的社会不能被我们的主观意识所决定？不太顺呢), the society and period in which we live cannot be determined by our subjective sense. Hence, there is no choice for us when we stand in front of the naturally spontaneous events.

However, apart from the special events mentioned above, we have choices at most circumstances. （这个地方转的太快了。。。不能这么快的，，详细解释见我的general comments）While a great many people claim that everything is over（太口语化了。While many people claim that the no opportunity can be found） and there is no way for them, we should sit down calmly and make a further analysis why people have such a thought. As far as I am concerned, people have two different reactions in front of difficulties and have different ideas about choice.

First of all, some people give up choices.(why?加个原因吧。主题句这么短。。。)
When people pursue their dreams and undertake an arduous journey but they finally come to reality that the dreams are somehow beyond them gradually（这句话吧，我一直感觉，当你when, where, what等等真正引领了一个从句的时候，逗号应该要的，，）.
Then some of them change their mind and even doubt themselves whether it is the right way they should take. Some people cannot endure the cruel result and become extremely crazy and go astray. In their mind, it seems that every effort is vain. In fact, they haven’t made a smart choice but give up directly before they do so. If they look back, they can find they have promoted themselves in more ways than one. Maybe the dream is little far currently, but if they move on they could find what they want. Hence, never give up, you have choices.

Secondly, some people cannot discover??这个词对么 a choice when the complex matters confuse them. There are times when we find that we are trapped in a large stack of problems. Taking myself for example, when I design my experiment, I cannot figure out the last one step for some factors such as lack of time, lack of high-resolved experimental detective device. It seems that my plan has met its end. In fact, despite so many troubles, I can set down them one by one. The last step can be divided into three or more smaller substeps then they can be carried out simultaneously which can effectively save time, and the device can be replaced by another one which can give a satisfying result. Hence, when facing a complicated matter, the most useful choice is to solve them step by step. 例子很好

Actually, when people with different backgrounds face challenges, they have different attitudes towards them. Some of them have positive attitudes then they can find many choices. Others show depressed emotion, thinking that the fate is unchangeable and there is no choice for them. Therefore, everyone has choices even if he has nothing, at least he can choose to lead a simple life rather than end his life.

General comments: 又是一片冒险的文章。。。我觉得这样写没什么不好，但是一定要控制得到才会拿高分。题目是说，没有选择的情况其实很少。那么你是同意还是不同意呢？同意就等于说，对，就是很少。那么你就来说，我们a方面可以选，b方面可以选，c方面也可以选。（注意，到这里我觉得应该是文章的主体，占据比较大的篇幅）然后再说，那么为什么会有人不能选呢，是因为什么什么。这样加一段就足够了。表示扩展。反面的话，就说，不同意！那么你就证明为什么不同意，比如a方面不能选，b方面不能选，c方面不能选，想扩展就说，那么不能选的情况下我们应该怎么化被动为主动等等等等。总之你还是要切题才好啊。你这个文章基本上条理很清楚，但是是不是应符合另一个题目比如说，People claim they are always have no choices in their life, but actually the reason comes from the flaws of ourselves. 对不对呢？不同就在于，issue136描述的是现象，而你写的题目偏重于原因。虽然现象底下是原因没错，但是你要先说明这个现象到底对还是不对，并且不能只说对或者不对就完了，要证明。。。你要想想看啊。。。。。欢迎讨论。