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本帖最后由 callmec 于 2011-8-14 00:47 编辑
Obviously, the development of countrydepends on some crucial factors. When it comes to (thequestion that) which is the most important factor, opinions vary(varies) from person to person as(due to) peoples’ distinctive(distinct?)backgrounds and experience. From the point of mine,(可以这样用么,好别扭……from/in my point of view是不是好点) education is the most crucial(重复,用一个即可,此处用了三个高等级词汇,建议删掉MOST CRUCIAL) prerequisite of thedevelopment of a country beyond all questions.
We can not emphasize the importance ofinstruction too much for the simple reason that talents determine the future ofa nation. For example, without the emergence of many scientists such as Newton, Copernicus, andEinstein, it is hard for human beings to develop so fast. And generallyimproving education is the only method to enhance the quality and quantity oftalents. So it is necessary for every government to improve its instruction. Atthe beginning of last century, there were many educators in my country, such asHu Shi and Cai Yuanpei. And with their effort, the quality of someuniversities, such as Peking University, were greatly improved(时态是不是改用完成时 had been ,或者has been更好). Many famous persons who determined thedestiny of my country afterwards came from these universities.
In addition, the promotion of educationwill surely improve the civilian’s character. After all, we should want(want不好。。改为encourage吧) all students to knowand to(去掉)make their own: honesty, fairness, self-discipline, loyalty, personalresponsibility, love of a country, and belief in the principles of liberty,equality. And, in my opinion, we can make children learn and practice thoroughnationwide education. Besides, education can also give people hope. As it wassaid in the movie The Shawshank’s Redemption, hope is a good thing, maybe thebest of things, and no good thing ever dies.
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What is more, in my view, the developmentof a nation determined by many factors such as economic(额 economy 是名词,economic是形容词), quality of life, environment, cultureand so on. However, education is the fundament of factors above, becauseeducation will have an effect on all the other factors. For example, biographyand geography classes will enhance the students’ awareness of protectingenvironment. And businessmen will learn how to manage their companies thoroughMBA classes.
To sum it up, from the analysis above, eventhough economic condition signifies the prosperity of a nation, environmentmeans the potential development, and culture stands for a country’s history, Istill believe that education is the most basic and crucial. Thus the improvingof school will not only have an effect on education but also affect everyaspect of a nation.
总结,比我写得好……,第一次改,没有经验,有的比较琐碎,见谅。Economy这个问题其实很小,主要是学这个的……所以敏感了……有的可能是本来语法没有错,但是只是觉得有些不自然 。。。。推荐个自己觉得更自然的方式……欢迎回改……https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1295532-1-1.html
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