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本帖最后由 jessicalulu 于 2009-5-26 16:37 编辑
issue190 "As long as people in a society are hungry or out of work or lack the basic skills needed to survive, the use of public resources to support the arts is inappropriate—and, perhaps, even cruel—when one considers all the potential uses of such money."
The speaker states that we should not put much money on the arts for the reason that numerous people, who need for money more urgently, are incapable to reach the least living standard, some even to starve. (这部分改写蛮好的)I concede that, only accepted by a minority of people, some extremely luxurious arts exist and cost countless money at modern time
(times). However, we should not attribute all the matters to the arts, which bring substantial spiritual world to us.
At the very beginning, the existence of any sort of arts is not the derivation of hungry and destitution, so it is ridiculous to abnegate artistic wealth to suffice the expenditure of the later. (观点)Casting back, endless warfare is actually the hand of the Evil. For example, after the Second World War, a myriad of refugees forever lost their snug houses, lost their loving relatives and lost their peaceful lives at the motherland that they familiarize with and deeply love. How can we impute that to the innocent arts? What is shameful is that our governments invest countless financing every year on the productions of weapons. And on the excuse of safeguarding each own country, numerous arsenals keep working day after night at every quarter of the world, so there is no doubt that not the arts but the warfare is actually the most seriously potential menace to mankind.(我总觉得这段的论证不够强。你的TS说,因为艺术不是导致这些社会问题的原因,所以我们不应该砍掉给艺术的资源投入。你举二战的例子,说明其实是战争导致的人民生活困苦。但是,无论是啥玩意导致的这些社会问题,总之,人民的生活困苦着,那么,合理利用资源,投入资源给艺术这种非实际性的东西我就可以认为是不合适的。你还是没有说服我)
Furthermore, our lives cannot take away from art. Not just the sensible enlightenment in spirit, but also the headspring for inspiration the arts bring us. (写得很好,学习~)From the great piano sonata of the Ninth Symphony created by Beethoven to the European street surrounded with Gothic architecture, it seems to me that these treasures of arts are just like the luminous stars shining in the night sky. Indeed, we absorb the dew of culture at every pore. Try to imagine this, if there is no support by governments to establish numerous theatres all around the world, where can we go to listen to those great melodies? In addition, what a pity if no administrators truly care about those dilapidated architecture of Gothic style after merciless war, leaving them swaying in the wind and rain without any proper repair. Therefore, it is crucial and necessary for government to invest and protect the inheritance and development of art. 这段文字其实写得很棒的,但我觉得放在这里论证不甚合适。你告诉我们,艺术很重要,保护和发展艺术很重要,但是,相较于人民的困苦生活,这些urgent social problems,艺术为什么该获得资金呢?我始终觉得,这个是本文需要把握的重点。就好比你的那句我用橙色勾出的句子写得很棒的,如果可以深入下去,写一下,艺术对于鼓舞人心,形成良好社会风气,良性循环的作用的话,那么这段会很出色的。
Indeed, a vast array of thorny problems have not been solved over the past few hundred years ago, especially the modern times. When it charged some troubles such as unemployment, hungry and poverty, people always eagerly hope government rush forward several effective solutions to lead us overcome those hard time. However, the reality turns out that the fact will not be all moonlight and roses. Most people share a belief that if the basic social security cannot be reached, even considered as a sort of expect, it is ridiculous to pursuit the higher spiritual target. But if until all the people at every quarter of world get rid off starving, the seed of art can not sprout on earth forever(为什么这样说呢?感觉前面的论证没有这层意思). In other words, poverty will go with us for long. 这段能不能这样写,所有的贫穷、饥饿都消除,这基本上是不可能达到的,只是一个理想世界能奢望的,我们不可能为了达到这种理想状态而忽略其他方面的投资,尤其像艺术这种具有多种社会功能的事情。
In sum, we should not take out the public resources from the arts to fulfill any other requirements, because as the aliment and decoration of human spirit, the arts are also needed to survive and develop.
语言很好的了,比我流畅且丰富很多,大大得学习了。至于思路,我提出了一些看法,都在文中,你看看我们在BS下?呵呵~
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