issue147-tradition and modernization are incompatible...

hehuiUID：134334

147. Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them. (490, 50’’)

简要提纲:
1.        引言(小故事)+转折后提出主题:传统与现代相互影响\相互依赖,共同为人类服务
2.        现代化由不断累积传统知识而来(现代化依赖传统):例子-天文学
3.        现代化帮助保护传统文化遗产(现代手段作用于传统):例子-中国的云冈石窟与网上博物馆
4.        传统与现代因素共同作用为人类服务:小排比
5.        简单总结

There is an interesting Chinese popular story of "coffee or tea": a grandpa and his grandson both like to drink something in the morning to keep them alert. The grandpa favor Chinese traditional tea while the grandson prefers western style coffee. Neither of them is willing to try the other's choice. At the first glance, the little story demonstrate us a picture of the incompatibility of the grandfather who represents the tradition and the grandson standing for the modern world. However, the true relationship between tradition and modernization is, on the contrary, interactive and interdependent, and most importantly, they both serve the same master, that is mankind.

On the one hand, modernization is not a concept which abruptly comes into this world from nil; it is actually originated or transformed from the relative tradition. The great amount of accumulative knowledge is strong support to the point. How we now know so deeply about the celestial world, the stars, galaxies, space and universe. We know them through traditional documents handed down for generations. Admittedly, today we have extremely advanced tools and methods to discover the outer space, and most of the traditional ways are no longer come into use. But without those old records, even the most sophisticated telescope and the most accurate computer can tell us nothing but ungrounded postulations. In brief, we cannot acquire today's modernization without the achievements of formal people, in another word, modernization, in some sense, depends on tradition.

On the other hand, modern technology helps to protect and elongate the traditional heritages. One of the world heritages in China, the Yungan Grottoes, has been endangered by the damage from the increasing number of tourists these years. Now, scientists and computer experts provide a new way to appreciate the spectacular work without going to it, the computer-based Grottoes Museum. You can inspect every detail of each grotto, from each angle, as if you are walking in it by yourself. All you need to do are only simple clicks and drags of your mouse. Thus by encouraging tourists to visit the on-line museum, the great heritage may be well preserved for the following generations.

One thing I want to emphasize is that we do not have to choose between tradition and modernization because they are here both to serve us. On the aesthetic phase, whether a traditional style or a modern one is not the real concern, what is important is that we gain entertainment through them. On a more practical phase, say in scientific areas, a traditional way of observation and a modern one can be combined to pursue the same goal. It is not tradition or modernization that distinguishes itself from the other, it is our attitudes towards them which do it.

In sum, tradition and modernization are not only compatible, but also interactive and interdependent; they work together to serve us human beings.

请指教,谢谢!

另:我9.15考,短期内如何提高,各位有何高见?

realturtleUID：69047

写得很好！
你的思路很清晰，思维辨证
还有开头很独到！
倒数第二段的排比也很值得称道！
总之，写得很好呀！^_^

hehuiUID：134334

谢谢，欢迎以后拍砖。

xingweilUID：140671

我9.17考啊。比你迟两天，考完后不要忘掉写机井啊。JJ，拜托了。
可是我的作文还是很臭，短期不懂如何提高，有何高见吗？

happyman2000UID：136936

No.1 issue147-tradition and modernization are incompatible...
147. Tradition and modernization are incompatible. One must choose between them. (490, 50’’)

简要提纲:
1. 引言(小故事)+转折后提出主题:传统与现代相互影响\相互依赖,共同为人类服务
2. 现代化由不断累积传统知识而来(现代化依赖传统):例子-天文学
3. 现代化帮助保护传统文化遗产(现代手段作用于传统):例子-中国的云冈石窟与网上博物馆
4. 传统与现代因素共同作用为人类服务:小排比
5. 简单总结

There is an interesting Chinese popular story of "coffee or tea": a grandpa and his grandson both like to drink something in the morning to keep them alert. The grandpa favor Chinese traditional tea while the grandson prefers western style coffee. Neither of them is willing to try the other's choice. At the first glance, the little story demonstrate us a picture of the incompatibility of the grandfather who represents the tradition and the grandson standing for the modern world. However, the true relationship between tradition and modernization is, on the contrary, interactive and interdependent, and most importantly, they both serve the same master, that is mankind. 这一段的例子说的完全是传统与现代的冲突，但你的主题怎么变成了两者可以兼容了？
On the one hand, modernization is not a concept which abruptly comes into this world from nil; it is actually originated or transformed from the relative tradition. The great amount of accumulative knowledge is strong support to the point. How we now know so deeply about the celestial world, the stars, galaxies, space and universe. We know them through traditional documents handed down for（from） generations. Admittedly, today we have extremely advanced tools and methods to discover the outer space, and most of the traditional ways are no longer come into use. But without those old records, even the most sophisticated telescope and the most accurate computer can tell us nothing but ungrounded postulations. In brief, we cannot acquire today's modernization without the achievements of formal people, in another word, modernization, in some sense, depends on tradition. 现代来自传统，论述充分有力，这段非常好。

On the other hand, modern technology helps to protect and elongate the traditional heritages. One of the world heritages in China, the Yungan Grottoes, has been endangered by the damage from the increasing number of tourists these years. Now, scientists and computer experts provide a new way to appreciate the spectacular work without going to it, the computer-based Grottoes Museum. You can inspect every detail of each grotto, from each angle, as if you are walking in it by yourself. All you need to do are only simple clicks and drags of your mouse. Thus by encouraging tourists to visit the on-line museum, the great heritage may be well preserved for the following generations.

One thing I want to emphasize is that we do not have to choose between tradition and modernization because they are here both to serve us. On the aesthetic phase, whether a traditional style or a modern one is not the real concern, what is important is that we gain entertainment through them. On a more practical phase, say in scientific areas, a traditional way of observation and a modern one can be combined to pursue the same goal. It is not tradition or modernization that distinguishes itself from the other, it is our attitudes towards them which do it.

In sum, tradition and modernization are not only compatible, but also interactive and interdependent; they work together to serve us human beings.
写得非常好，语言流畅，思想深刻，结构严谨，除了第一段有几个单复数问题外，我实在挑不出什么毛病。Pf!