issue47 考虑对intellect的理解

xqmelissaUID：140370

Issue 47   
Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills.
社会没有给予智力培养方面足够的重视，比如人的推理和其他认知能力。


As we all know, intellect, including reasoning and other cognitive skills, is an important factor in the process of individual success and social development. However, society does not pay enough attention on it, especially the somewhat unreasonable educational system.

Intellect, defined as the capacity for rational or intelligent thought, includes reasoning ability, capabilities of analyzing and solving problems, etc. It is a crucial factor in the process of not only individual success, but also the development of society. Take Bill Gates, the founder of one famous corporation in the world, as an example. If he had not owned high intellect, Microsoft under his control, would have had no opportunity to develop advanced computer operating systems and dominate the PC market triumphantly. Therefore, intellect has an important influence on the individual success. As for the development of a society, the function of intellect also could not be neglected. Social development depends on exploring more unknown fields, other than fields being existed. Discovering the unknown areas rests on the ability of reasoning, a factor included in intellect and an impetus for social development. As a result, intellect is a basic factor promoting individual success and social development.

The phenomenon that society does not place enough emphasis on the training of intellect is produced by the defect of existing educational system to some extent, such as overemphasizing on scores. Grades, standards to measure how much knowledge in textbooks being mastered by students, have many defects. For example, the capability trained in the test is the repeating of what the book says, while others, such as creative thinking and reasoning, could not be improved from this process. A consequence of these standard tests is the fact that some students, owning high scores in the school, have difficulties to fit for the job requiring them to use their cognitive skills, other tan repeating. Only if educational systems could pay more attention on the training of the development of students' whole abilities, jobs requiring more cognitive skills are easier to be taken on than ever. Then, the improvement of educational systems will bring advantages to society.

The approach of solving this problem is that not only educational systems, but also whole society should begin to attach importance to the training of intellect, as doing in some successful companies and universities nowadays. Some successful companies and universities adopt many measures to overcome defects in existing school education. For example, Microsoft has a strict procedure of enrolling employees, including an elaborate designed test which could scientific evaluate various intellect levels of job-finders. Employees in this company will receive a systematic training to improve their comprehensive intellect not only reasoning, but also other cognitive skills. There is another instance about the successful pushing an approach which reduces the pressure of pursuing high scores in Chinese elementary school recent years. As a result, a survey taken by an authoritative organization shows that the general abilities have obviously increasing after carrying out the approach, and recommends other schools to adopt this approach. From these examples, we could draw a conclusion that some good ways to solve the problem of ignoring intellect could be used as references by both educational systems and the whole society.

To sum up, society should pay more attention on intellect by adopting some effective approaches immediately, since it is too important to be neglected.  （557 words）



这个狂狂狂BT的文章,写的我快疯了!!!
限时55分钟,没完成不说,而且完成的部分很不满意,这是又修改了1个小时的成果,可是还心里没底,大家给看看吧,谢谢了!

尝试的一种新写法:
阐述重要性----分析问题产生原因----如何解决问题

对这种写法很没自信,唉!

附上我的提纲:
总论点：同意
分论点：（智力培养的重要性----产生原因----解决方法）
1、intellect的重要性，有利于成功，Bill Gates
2、因为学校教育的一些不合理，导致了缺少智力培养。考试、追求高分、高分低能现象的产生。
3、解决办法，社会应该加强对这一问题的重视程度。一些公司招聘的时候重视除分数外的许多因素，加强对员工的培训等。更多的企业、学校应该学习这些成功经验。

uniqueguoUID：184437

都是高手啊

费跃哲UID：191422

不好意思，刚来但是看发表时间怎么都是以前的呢？现在的人呢？为什么我不能发新帖子呢？

JC506UID：157170

有个issue的题目是：Some educational systerm emphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking,but students would benefit more from an education that also taught them to explore their own emotions.跟这个题目有点类似，intellect是指reasoning and other cognitive skills，那非intellect应该是关于人的emotion方面的吧

candiseUID：172058

这个北美的范文里说道了，情感什么的也很重要，但是过分强调却没什么用。
我觉得不错，可以用进去

learnerUID：160734

语言不错，可在分析为什么现行教育体制未着重培养intellect时好象单薄点。毕竟这是全文核心，应深入说一下score不能很客观反映智力，及灌输式的教育不能提高智力。

九月爱上乒乓球UID：151821

拜托各位~
没觉得这篇文章语言表达很出色，society does not pay enough attention on it, especially the somewhat unreasonable educational system.后半句怎么看怎么觉得是一个Toefl语法的选项，还有下面的being existed，前面in the process of success之类的用词，拜托各位不要溢美过头了~"
不要以为xqmelissa是版主就不敢批她的文章，她毕竟也还只是和大家一样在努力而已
这篇没有看，xpmelissa以前的文章看过一篇，感觉句子组织罗索空泛
提出过一点意见，不过马上就被其他人的溢美之词淹没掉了，这样对她本人绝没有好处
也会对其他人产生误导
我绝对支持wxlgh，砖头让人进步
不知道他如果来看这篇文章会批成什么样子，不过我记得他是曾经把galaxysong一篇很不错的文章评成“差劲”，很多人从那篇修改稿中也学到了很多东西。。。

同意的说~~
本来想加入的 大规模的溢美之词让我觉得就没有什么必要的拉
to be skeptical!!

ar007UID：149835

看提纲的时候，就觉得这道题BT，主要是觉得过于抽象，例子多，但是很难和论题联系起来的话，楼主也有这方面问题，写了反而觉得罗嗦。
楼主文章的立意我觉的很有新意，文笔挺好
学习中！

xqmelissaUID：140370

对对,同意鼻涕虫的观点!
我和大家一样都是在备考的,现在差的还很多很多,常被IMONG批的

大家狠狠批吧!

coolwitsUID：149150

"拜托各位~
没觉得这篇文章语言表达很出色，society does not pay enough attention on it, especially the somewhat unreasonable educational system.后半句怎么看怎么觉得是一个Toefl语法的选项，还有下面的being existed，前面in the process of success之类的用词，拜托各位不要溢美过头了~"
不要以为xqmelissa是版主就不敢批她的文章，她毕竟也还只是和大家一样在努力而已
这篇没有看，xpmelissa以前的文章看过一篇，感觉句子组织罗索空泛
提出过一点意见，不过马上就被其他人的溢美之词淹没掉了，这样对她本人绝没有好处
也会对其他人产生误导
我绝对支持wxlgh，砖头让人进步
不知道他如果来看这篇文章会批成什么样子，不过我记得他是曾经把galaxysong一篇很不错的文章评成“差劲”，很多人从那篇修改稿中也学到了很多东西。。。

davidjackyUID：135962

不好意思，以前来的时候从不乏文章，本来我想把我改的地方变粗，怎么全变了，对不起，影响版面整洁，自我大嫂中。。。。

davidjackyUID：135962

最初由 xqmelissa 发布
[B]Issue 47   
Issue 47
Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect—that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills.
社会没有给予智力培养方面足够的重视，比如人的推理和其他认知能力。

正好我也看了飞跃的材料：过来讨论一下，希望大家能够帮我想象这个提纲可行性，我不能确定的是第四段的写法。怎么布局，还是带一下即可。
我的提纲
支持作者的说法：
1)学校里学的知识是job-related的工作，这个我不想和您们争论我只想说这个观点是正对这个题目的。
In schools or colleges, students have to learn the theoretical courses and abide the rigid curricula, which restrain, at certain level, the student culture imagination and cognitive skills.--具体例子就是说叫我们一些practical skills-job-related education比如：我们去工厂实习，老师们会告诉我们不要乱动，好好听操作，将来工作能用。
2). 在工作岗位也是这样，每天重复无聊的工作，比如：我们天津的学生都知道天才公司，很多人以为买盗版光盘的，实际是个大公司，对此我们也不追求，我们回到下面买盗版光盘的地方，一般那些不懂电脑的大妈都回装机，手法比我熟练，我们加入这个“站队”，也只会装机，限制思维，李子不是这样了，李子：在工厂，我们工人以来计算机辅助控制，只需简单按几个纽，一天任务完成，不去想怎么做的，为什么？所以限制思维With the development of the line-production and computer-progress, people in the work are gradually accustomed to the strict courses, as the consequence, it declines the people's enterprise.-secretary-working machines
3). 这个比较麻烦，我想笔锋一转，又怕过分会跑自己d的TS，大家帮我参考：
No doubt, people should abide by the common courses and progresses, in order to conform to an effective group. 但是我们应该怎么做But we should cultivate a field that can prompt individual's reasoning and other cognitive skills.



下面谈谈我对这片文章的理解，请大家予以斧正：恳请大家指正，往往纠正的正确的自己还很得意，希望大家坦言，学习本来就是一个值得争论的话题吗？我个人认为没有绝对的权威，ETS也不是，尽管控制着我们的命运，至少是我们这些人。
As we all know, intellect, including reasoning and other cognitive skills, is an important factor in the process of individual success and social development. However, society does not pay enough attention on it, especially the somewhat unreasonable educational system.
提出观点，很明确，给分，尽管我说了不算。说的是社会忽视了intellect的教育，和我的一样，如果我没有记错pay attention to 才对，这个至少没见过。你那个写成这样，你看可以吗？however, society does not pay  sufficient attention to intellect , neither does the somewhat unresonable educational system.或者这样：however, society, education system in particular, does not pay  sufficient attention to intellect .教育制度前不要用的那么狠，既然你对教育已经否定了，ETS认为很生气。
Intellect, defined as the capacity for[B][ability of] [/B]  rational or intelligent thought[B][thinking], [/B]  includes reasoning ability, capabilities of analyzing and solving problems, etc.[B][and the like多几个字，可以不这样][/B]  It is a crucial factor in the process of not only individual success, but also the development of society. Take Bill Gates, the founder of one famous corporation in the world, as an example.[B][这个地方被大家否定了，很遗憾，不过我想是这样，该一下Bill Gates, hornored for his great intellect by the world, 将Microsoft公司搞得蒸蒸日上。世界最大了，谁还怀疑世界错了，换个角度，错误也是真理，正如男女之间，不爱也是一种爱，总比故意去伤害好][/B]  If he had not owned high intellect, Microsoft under his control, would have had no opportunity to develop advanced computer operating systems and dominate the PC market triumphantly. Therefore, intellect has an important influence on the individual success. As for the development of a society, the function of intellect also could not be neglected[B][今天GITER给我改作文提到这个词，你这个地方我看也改成这样could not be neglected or ignored][/B] . Social development depends on exploring more unknown fields, other than fields being existed. Discovering the unknown areas rests on the ability of reasoning, a factor included in intellect and an impetus for social development. As a result, intellect is a basic factor promoting individual success and social development.大的方面没问题

The phenomenon that society does not place enough emphasis on the training of intellect [U]is produced by [/U] --->[B]results from  [/B]  the defect加S，下面说SUCH AS  of existing educational system to some extent, such as overemphasizing [U]on [/U]  不要姓马?一般我写overemphasizing 长相，你找不到好老婆，overemphasizing 人品，你也找不到好老公scores. Grades, standards[B][one of the most important standards] [/B]  to measure [B][measure太俗了fathom][/B] how much knowledge in textbooks being mastered by students, have many defects[这里嫁了为什么前面不佳]. For example, the capability trained in the test is [U][B]the repeating [/B]  [/U]  to tediously repeat  what the book says, while others, such as creative thinking and reasoning, could not be improved from[B][during][/B]  this process. A consequence of these standard tests is the fact that some students, owning high scores in the school, have difficulties to fit [B][in qualifing][/B] the job requiring them to use their cognitive skills, other tan [B][rather than][/B] repeating. Only if educational systems could pay more attention on the training of the development of students' whole abilities, jobs requiring more cognitive skills are easier to be taken on than ever. Then, the improvement of educational systems will bring advantages to society.个人认为这一段论述和我的一致，我也会这么写！


对不起，今天太晚了，下一段不予评价，sorry
The approach of solving this problem is that not only educational systems, but also whole society should begin to attach importance to the training of intellect, as doing in some successful companies and universities nowadays. Some successful companies and universities adopt many measures to overcome defects in existing school education. For example, Microsoft has a strict procedure of enrolling employees, including an elaborate designed test which could scientific evaluate various intellect levels of job-finders. Employees in this company will receive a systematic training to improve their comprehensive intellect not only reasoning, but also other cognitive skills. There is another instance about the successful pushing an approach which reduces the pressure of pursuing high scores in Chinese elementary school recent years. As a result, a survey taken by an authoritative organization shows that the general abilities have obviously increasing after carrying out the approach, and recommends other schools to adopt this approach. From these examples, we could draw a conclusion that some good ways to solve the problem of ignoring intellect could be used as references by both educational systems and the whole society.

To sum up, society should pay more attention on intellect by adopting some effective approaches immediately, since it is too important to be neglected. （557 words）

以下省略...... [/B]

dezhiUID：156141

瞧你们说的，呵呵
真会开玩笑:)
共同努力！

lovebrianUID：157127

你也太不给我面子拉`~55555

xqmelissaUID：140370

最初由 lovebrian 发布
[B]不知道imong看了我的语言会怎么说~~sigh [/B]

哈哈
直接砍了
:p  ;)  :p