求狠批，想知道到底自己距离四分水平差多远

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楼主需要4分么 要拿4分至少要系统准备3个月
你没有抄写作指引 不知道写的时候有没有按照写作指引来写  

Furthermore, the private sponsorship is more effective than the government sponsor.  It seems that the government sponsor is effective and have a greater impact on the development of the arts when it comes to the large finance of the government.  However, the government sponsor may have a bad influence on the pure development of the arts.  The leaders of the government may choose the subjects as they wish when they distribute the limited finance, which make the fields that the government in favor of are more prosperous and the fields that the government dislike blight.  In the other side, to struggle for the sponsor from the country, some artists may intend to engage in some specific field to cater the government.  So the private are better choice for the benign development of the arts.  Therefore, it is unfitted for the government to sponsor the arts.  

这一段基本和题目所讲的 unemployed和hunger脱节了
可能还是要多列提纲 避免偏题吧 感觉你的语言表达挺好的 但是一旦偏题 就会悲剧了
楼主拿3分-3.5分应该没问题 如果不是文科博士或者要进前10名的大学 就这样吧